Well this seems to be an amusing story. I look forward to reading more.

Hmmm I like this story!
*smashes glass*
ANOTHER~~~!

2624074 THIS IS IMPORTANT! LOOK AT THIS!

I think its funny how rape is a key factor in the stories......not complaining!

2624124 Roflmao MY SIDES ARE IN PAIN *hahahahaaaaa*~~~

Well now! I think its safe to say...WE NEED MOAR!

2624182 Thanks, I just learned how to use the link button.
Hugs!
Have a hug!

2624074 I think the proper way to do this is:

Hmm... I like story...
*Smashes Internets*
ANOTHER!

Dude, you need a proofreader. The story itself is alright, but you need someone to check the grammar and spelling.

needs proofreader and grammar finder but good story

well it was very good flare i hope to get more soon
and im sorry i have not ben on xbox to give you prase for all your stores
im a convicted fellon now and im on probation so im not allowed to be talking with others online
but i can get on a little hear and there
my cort date is june 13 and i plan to make a new appeal and i think i can get this fixed
and im rping with so meny pepole it just so much fun
plus, i have a new pet, his name is jose ortize III
he is only 13 but he will be 18 in no time
its a nice prospect for tomorow

2624615>>2624394 I have one it has been fixed and I would love love love it if people would just assume that like all my fics I post the crap version first then my editor fixes it the next day.

2624798 Yea but in your other stories there are still errors in them...ones I could fix since my college semester is gonna end on Wednesday. All hail the freedom of no more college for a couple of weeks!

Another new story? Weeeeeeeelp, promising start! Hopefully have a few more updates to the others as well as this one now! =3

What is starting to piss me off is that people who dislike it only seem to do so due to the clop I mean I tried one without clop and it only got about 82 likes it was pathetic and even now the only reason I get so many likes is because I am known by alot of bronies

2625346 wait your a brony? Oh wait...this site...erm durr...*hit self with frying pan*

2624188 WWWWEEEEEE HUGS

So far this is not too bad, but I think it would help if you added a few more details. It would be a good idea to give us a bit more description on the Griffon capital and maybe starting off with him entering the emperor's throne room with some details on how he walks around or something like that since he is an assassin give us a little hint on how good he is. Starting the story off in the middle or end of a conversation is a bit annoying since your kind of pushed into an environment, which is good for an action scene, instead of letting us absorb the world you have us in. A little more detail on how humans are viewed or what they are in the world would help since we don't know his rep, it could be from nightmare tales of how horrible humans are, not saying to go that route, but you get my point. I hope this helped, but I do want to see more so please continue.

2625346
You shouldn't let yourself get discouraged just because some people that hate humans and interspecies romance down vote. Those assh*les ares not important.
You have plenty of fans, and I am sure some friends, on this site. You write good stories, which is more then what others could say. Plus this story already has almost one hundred readers favoriting it in just a few hours. Sure, it would be nicer if more of them left a review, but I ill call it a success.

Please, don't let it get to you.
Good luck with all of your endeavors.

I like the premise so far. A little more detail on some parts wouldn't hurt but overall very good. I look forward to future updates.

how the hell did I not see that coming rich griffin stabs you in the back and Cestia is a spoiled rapes brat witch ironically gets the ball rollen talk about a odd series of evnts that get a romance going

2625346 also many peope don't like rape dude so food for thought so better clop when it's meaning full or skip straight to were the rapist gets killed like a bich

this confuses derpy

... I would have called you crazy and most likely insulted your mother.

That alone has dictated that I shall read this story.

Not bad, not bad at all. Certainly has me interested. I'm going to have to follow this one.

And the assassin's shit-talking... He is a smart man. But then agian, Celestia didn't buy him dinner first.

Does every romance story you do introduce the main couple through rape?

Can't say I found any enjoyment here. An immoral, arrogant, and ultimately foolish assassin who I don't think deserves any mercy or a good fate as the main character (who I already know gets too kind an ending because for some reason he ends up marrying not just one, but both princesses, and having kids with them), a version of Celestia who both hasn't found a way of restraining estrus over a thousand years, turns to rape easily, and is just for the heck of it the "former tyrant" model of her character, a Luna who ranges from just kind of boring to ineffectually angry, and a fair number of base grammatical/formatting problems that take away from the reading.

People seem to be enjoying it, so keep writing, by all means, but this could use a fair amount of work in terms of character portrayals and the writing quality itself.

2625790 hugs are good

MOAR

Well, you got featured!

2627376
YEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSS MOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR

That was quite a good story.. id like to hear the end...

Now, I haven't read the story, and therefor I have no reason to comment and/or judge this. But based on the description, the plot sounds like it was.... wait? Is this a comedy?.... So like... all that getting married to both the princesses, is just for the fun of it, and not a bad attempt at fulling your own fantazies about getting together with the female ponies in Equestria? Ah... sorry to bother you. I'll be moving on, have a nice day.

.2628372 I am sorry that this isn't to your liking but this story is still just a prototype I am working out several kinks in it. I understand that it may seem stupid that they fall in love after the rape and one tries to kill the other but I find those sort of fics fun to write. Thank you for your input.

2627052 I will be honest with you this story is more a comedy that an actual serious fic sorry that it wasn't to your taste but that is the harsh reality there isn't a proper story here it is just for a couple of laughs. My next fic I hope to write will have no clop and because you were unhappy I will spill a little teaser I plan to have it focused in the griffon empire. The human in it suffers no rape or marriage. He is a royal guard and protects the emperors daughter.

This is fun to read

... So they are telling to a kid that the first encounter between her parens, his dad tried to kill the mother, and the mother raped the dad?

What a nice story for a kid!

2628904 Because the way you worded your comment came across as snide and quite nasty. Now if I have read that wrong and overreacted then by all means I will apologise and retract my earlier statements. I sometimes read things wrong and I will not dispute that but if you honestly meant no malice by your comment then of course I will apologise for lashing out and insulting you

2628917
I may have sounded like a I was being sarcastic in a rude way. Still, even so if I actually said "Sounds like a bad attempt at furfilling a fantasy" it wouldn't be an attempt at mocking or trash-talking your story. And criticism is acceptable provided the person has fair reasons and such. The best way to deal with people like that is to just stay neutral and not go down to their level.

I accept the apology, and I am sorry if you brought you in a bad mood by accident.

I think this needs to be said again: Have a nice day.

2628943 Same to you I am glad we were able to sort this out

You mean "The Princess and me"

Going by the description alone, how did this get into the feature box?

2629116 I could ask the same about how you were born how did a sperm that retarded win the race.

2629139
The great unanswered questions. I doubt we'll ever know my friend.