The One Thing You Allways Find

by Sirixich

(Epilogue) Lunas mid summer monument.

"There, it's almost done! Just need to finish the engraving." Luna was in the middle of the maze at the Canterlot garden. She had worked days and nights on this, most with little to no sleep or food! As she took a step back to examine her work, she bumped into her sister.

"AGH! Sister, why did you sneak up on me?"

"I wanted to see the progress Luna, I almost came to say you need to rest." Celestia looked at her sister, she was covered in dust and sweat. Her mane was a mess. She smelled strongly of masonry and work. "You need to take a bath, eat a feasts worth of food! And go to bed."

Luna stomped her hoof, planting it firmly on the grass. "I won't leave until I've accomplished this! I only need to put on the final engraving. I need to put on what we learned from eachother so others might learn as well." Luna looked down, Celestia understood the pain her sister was in right now. She also had seen many good friends come and go. She finally nodded.

"Alright Luna, finish the engraving but then you will be taking a bath and eating, I'll make sure of it." Celestia gave a light giggle. Luna looked up at her big sister and smiled. She nodded and immediately picked up the hammer and chisel again, slowly carving the words to perfect formation. She stood up from her labor and took a few steps back.

"I miss you Robin, I really do." The statue was of the moment when Robin had looked his bravest, when he smiled at her, when he was impaled through by the scarecrow. She did regret never finding a way to put in a light in his eyes I wish I could have done him that one last service. As she turned to follow her sister, bright lights slowly seeped from the sky, these lights were familiar to her.

"Luna, what are all these lights? They seem, different from most lights."

"I'm not sure sister, but they are familiar." As Luna continued to stare the lights slowly flowed to the statue, like a river amongst a mountain. The lights all streamed up and into the eyes of Robins statue. His eyes glowed a brilliant multi-colored hue His eyes, that's the light he had when he died. Luna looked up into the sky, she smiled a little and faintly whispered.

"Thank you."

Celestia looked at Luna then to the statues eyes she smiled and shook her head Some things are best kept between friends.

"Come along dear Luna, you need some rest."

"Yes sister." As the two slowly trotted out of the maze, Luna looked back the first of many times at the statue of Robin, she looked at the inscription, finally she turned away, following after her sister. The inscription has been seen by many a pony visiting the castle, of those who see it, few truly comprehend the power in it. If you were to go to the castle, and read the inscription it would read:

Christopher Tailer Gilland, Defender of the light and Ponyville

This brave soul fought against a most terrifying monster, darkness in the form of a scarecrow.

This monsterous being tore through the fabric of nightmares and attempted to swallow the world

in darkness...

But Robins soul was stronger.

His soul never wavered from the truth, it was just and honorable. He always knew right from wrong.

This greatness is what gave him the light that stopped the monster before it could achieve its

grisly goal.

On that night, he was impaled through by the monster, but even then, dying on the cold, bloody floor

of the town square in Ponyville he still found words and told Princess Luna what he had learned.

His final words to our dear princess Luna were these exact words.

"The one thing you'll always find...Is Friendship, love, happiness, and care no matter where you go,

Your friends will always be there to help you."

Comments

[ShadowBreeze]

Well done! *clap* *clap* *clap*

[Sirixich]

301875 Thank you!

[shadow chaser]

there are no words to describe how much i liked this story.

[Sirixich]

336113 I am very honored to hear that, this was my first story and I wasn't sure how it would turn out, I'm glad you like it!

[Adzainy]

At the end of the day it was a good first attempt at a fic. So here's the words you've been waiting for... The criticism.

A reoccuring problem throughout the chapters is with the grammar, spelling, and just the typo's that pop up. I know you were excited in writing this, but without a real editor you should probably take the time to re-read your chapters multiple times to try and catch things such as a lack of spaces where there should be or wrong punctuation used. The grammar would be harder to catch on your own, but the only support I can say is to read outloud to yourself. If it sounds wrong when you read it outloud then it most likely is.

I couldn't help but also feel that some of the actions of the ponies seemed a bit out of character. Especially how they reacted to certain situations. This may be just my way of thinking but I can only offer that you could try and really sit down and make a list of how a certain pony acts/reacts. Get a good idea/feel for just who the pony is, and from there you can get a better idea of how they would react. Of course not that I'm saying they HAVE to act that way! But generally they should start out that way, and through character progression in your story they can change as fitting.

This next bit is more of a personal issue that I found, and I know the oppinions on this one are going to differ from person to person, but I have a problem with the power levels (inb4 over 9000 joke) that the ponies (Mostly Celestia/Luna) seem to have. To me I'd like to believe that, being there there was no real reason or power constraints(like a magic field that lowered their power) given, that the two would be able to do a LOT more or help a lot more than they did in the story (probably Twilight too, but that goes more under being out of character in her actions).

Anyways that's the end of my little take on it. Lots of practice will most certainly help things out, and also becoming more familiar with everything over time sense I know you're 'relatively' new. So for your efforts Twilight will reward you:gamesprays.com/files/resource_media/preview/hug-me-twilight-6360_preview.png

[Sirixich]

358699 Thank you for a AMAZING COMMENT BRO! AND YES! Twilight hugs XD

[Flint]

I don't want to be rude or anything but i must be honest
this was the most boring thing i ever read