Read a lot of ship-fics in the past since getting into MLP FiM, and I must admit, this is by far one of my favorites, by far the best of any FluttershyxBig Macintosh ships I've read, keep it up
This was a very nice fanfic. It was a little slow at times and a few minor errors, but one of the better storys on this site. I really enjoyed it and hope to see more soon.
A great start indeed! What's most important, you managed to portray Mac's and Fluttershy's characters very well; so well that this story could be a foundation of an episode. *Looks at the [Mature] rating* ...or not. Anyway, I'm tracking and sending you a 5/5 stars. Sending... Sending... Eyep, catch 'em!
Ha ha, yes, it's kind of hard for me to break away from my comfort zone of clop. This is one step to see if I'm any good at making some story without the naughty parts that can hold up. And I'm already so happy that it's being praised so early. I promise I'll upload more once I wake up today.
i saw the adult tag and say NOPE.avi but decided to give it a try... IM IN LOVE WITH YOU lol awesome story loved how you deployed the characters and everything... i see that its incomplete so i will track but that also makes me wonder about the mature tag (no zecora talk intended lol ) well lets see what you do keep up the awesome work
I was wondering how you were going to cram clop in at the very end, but then I realized that this was just the first of several chapters. Anyway, this is great. Added to the Fluttermac group archive!
I do think that the play scene dragged a bit too long, though. Since we already know what happened from the pilot episodes, that amount of detail distracted from the Fluttershy/Macintosh interaction. It is also hard to tell the paragraphs apart, so you should touch up your formatting by indenting your paragraphs or separating them with spaces.
Yeah, the play scene was waaaaay too long. Also: "Big Macintosh felt a sharp pain in his rear leg as he looked back to see the eldest of his sisters stamp on his foot, urging him to wrap it up while he was ahead."
Stars? What are those? I lost all of mine forever ago throwing them at the screen of my laptop in hopes of getting updates faster! Maybe Cloperella is eating them instead of putting them to work as slaves?
Anyhoof, YESH! ANOTHER AWESOME FlutterMac story! Thanks a ton! You rule! /]
The play was a good touch, sit-and-eat dates are boring and there's plenty of those. I really love how you basically parodied the pilot in and of itself, and it felt legit. A major historical event like the defeat of Nightmare Moon would of COURSE be turned into literature, lore, and probably a play as well. That's an excellent extra piece of lore to add into the story.
Of course, any fic where Big Mac does a good deal of talking is always head-scratching for me. To me, he represents the concept that actions speak louder than words. But, it would be very very difficult to tell any sort of interesting story involving a pony that is all but mute 90% of the time. So, the dialogue is certainly appropriate and stands up in the form of text. Fluttershy felt a liiiittle off when she was shouting over the crowd, but then again she has been seen to make little outbursts now and then so I'm sure it fits her just fine.
The scene where Fluttershy is messing with Big Mac's suite and hair and tie really stood out to me. It felt unique and heart-warming, and if you ever do any sort of editation on this fic I would love to see that scene expanded upon. It was cute, and Fluttershy's innocent helping really showed through. She had her hooves basically all over him, but didn't really think about it. She was just making sure he was more comfortable and looked the way he usually did, fixing his mane and such. I liked it a lot.
Read a lot of ship-fics in the past since getting into MLP FiM, and I must admit, this is by far one of my favorites, by far the best of any FluttershyxBig Macintosh ships I've read, keep it up
Can't wait to read more.
This was a very nice fanfic. It was a little slow at times and a few minor errors, but one of the better storys on this site. I really enjoyed it and hope to see more soon.
A great start indeed! What's most important, you managed to portray Mac's and Fluttershy's characters very well; so well that this story could be a foundation of an episode.
*Looks at the [Mature] rating*
...or not.
Anyway, I'm tracking and sending you a 5/5 stars. Sending... Sending... Eyep, catch 'em!
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Caught 'em! They're quite tasty.
Ha ha, yes, it's kind of hard for me to break away from my comfort zone of clop. This is one step to see if I'm any good at making some story without the naughty parts that can hold up. And I'm already so happy that it's being praised so early. I promise I'll upload more once I wake up today.
i saw the adult tag and say NOPE.avi but decided to give it a try... IM IN LOVE WITH YOU lol awesome story loved how you deployed the characters and everything... i see that its incomplete so i will track but that also makes me wonder about the mature tag (no zecora talk intended lol ) well lets see what you do keep up the awesome work
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Oh yes! Please write more.
I was wondering how you were going to cram clop in at the very end, but then I realized that this was just the first of several chapters. Anyway, this is great. Added to the Fluttermac group archive!
I do think that the play scene dragged a bit too long, though. Since we already know what happened from the pilot episodes, that amount of detail distracted from the Fluttershy/Macintosh interaction. It is also hard to tell the paragraphs apart, so you should touch up your formatting by indenting your paragraphs or separating them with spaces.
But, overall, pretty good.
All my Star. Take them. I have no need for such trivial things in the face of this wonderful story.
Veddy good, modom. Please keep up the jolly good work.
Can't wait for the next chapters, great job so far!
Yeah, the play scene was waaaaay too long. Also:
"Big Macintosh felt a sharp pain in his rear leg as he looked back to see the eldest of his sisters stamp on his foot, urging him to wrap it up while he was ahead."
Otherwise, enjoyable.
Like Wragnaroq,
Very minor errors. Would be nice if you fixed them, but as an over all...
I'm tracking this baby!
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>/)<
That's why I'm glad I can edit these things forever. Every now and then something slips by me.
This was very cute. Thank you for the time you took to write it.
Stars? What are those? I lost all of mine forever ago throwing them at the screen of my laptop in hopes of getting updates faster! Maybe Cloperella is eating them instead of putting them to work as slaves?
Anyhoof, YESH! ANOTHER AWESOME FlutterMac story! Thanks a ton! You rule! /]
~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria
Daaawwww
-Glassed
The play was a good touch, sit-and-eat dates are boring and there's plenty of those. I really love how you basically parodied the pilot in and of itself, and it felt legit. A major historical event like the defeat of Nightmare Moon would of COURSE be turned into literature, lore, and probably a play as well. That's an excellent extra piece of lore to add into the story.
Of course, any fic where Big Mac does a good deal of talking is always head-scratching for me. To me, he represents the concept that actions speak louder than words. But, it would be very very difficult to tell any sort of interesting story involving a pony that is all but mute 90% of the time. So, the dialogue is certainly appropriate and stands up in the form of text. Fluttershy felt a liiiittle off when she was shouting over the crowd, but then again she has been seen to make little outbursts now and then so I'm sure it fits her just fine.
The scene where Fluttershy is messing with Big Mac's suite and hair and tie really stood out to me. It felt unique and heart-warming, and if you ever do any sort of editation on this fic I would love to see that scene expanded upon. It was cute, and Fluttershy's innocent helping really showed through. She had her hooves basically all over him, but didn't really think about it. She was just making sure he was more comfortable and looked the way he usually did, fixing his mane and such. I liked it a lot.
Down to earth pony apple farmer
Head in the Cloudsdale pegasus
That was clever
i love this
this is honestly my 10 reading this story and the first chapter is the best
Daww levels.....Calculating.........+9,000!
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Agreed fine sir.