The Reviews Are In! · 12:47am Jul 18th, 2014
Or at least one is:
I appreciate it and love the vid!
Two bits of clearance:
Midnight is only the third kirin to exhibit the ability, so it's not indicative of the entire species. Yes, I admit it's a bit overpowered, but I would hope you noticed that Midnight wasn't exactly owning that hydra either.
And that not all bat ponies or bat pony colonies are the same as Squeaks' is. They are zealots, and other colonies actually despise them for it.
And that leads me into my only counter to one of your bad points: Squeaks' dad.
Zealots are, by definition, pretty much nuts. I guarantee that if God himself came down during the inquisitions and said "guys, WTF!?" all those involved would say things like "but, this is what you told us to do!" "we're cleansing the earth for you lord!" "this is what's necessary to save all of our souls!". In front of God himself they would say this because in their twisted minds, they're right. And even if God told them they were dead wrong, they would continue to justify themselves. THAT is the kind of nut job I wrote. And this isn't an attack; I'm just trying to show where I got the idea for the character and why I wrote him like I did.
Again, great vid and hopefully I'll stay up to your expectations with the next chapter.
Aaaaand while I'm here some story progress update:
2 Bits Short of a Full House is officially on hiatus. It's been holding up the progress of the main story, and at the moment I CANNOT let that slide. With that said Mids and Sapph are currently just arriving at the gala, so that's where I am at the moment.
My ego is approaching Justin Bieber levels, Bieber levels! (Explodes)
Seriously though, thanks a million
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I actually just edited it with a couple of clarifications and a counter-point to one of the points you made. Nothing serious, but just a few things I wanted to point out in terms of my line of thinking and for (polite) discussion.
At the gala huh? This gonna be good. *squee*
2295566 thanks for your points. I'm actually annoyed at myself now since the whole "zealot father" didn't occur to me, that'll teach me to pay more attention
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Looking back on it I should have listed Midnight not completely destroying the hydra as a good thing, so I guess there's 15 good points about the story. As for the wyvern form, I'm just hoping that it won't be used as a "solution for every giant monster attack". (Though judging from the rest of the story, I don't think it will be)
Thanks again for the insight and feedback
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it won't pop up too often, and only when it would make sense. for example, trying to corral a rampaging, greed-boosted Spike or being a decoy for an army
2297760 Am I detecting some foreshadowing
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Why not revisit the story again when it is done?
2302769 you know, I really want to do that with another story I reviewed, I think I may do the same with this one. The thing is getting stuff wrong in reviews is the Bain of my existence, honestly I'd rather someone say to me "you weren't funny at all, but everything you said was spot on" then saying, "dude you were hilarious, but this is what you got wrong". Still, just gotta keep improving
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2302810 For the reviews that are revisiting stories you reviewed while they were still in progress you can point to moments in the prior video where you acknowledge you goofed in your assessment or started making more sense in the chapters that came after the initial review was posted, after all the reviewing process is a bit more complex than many viewers realize. Still enjoyed the video, and am looking forward to the next one.