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Yeah, sorry about that, it was just getting to me, well, the story itself seems to be developing well, Twilight seems a little ooc, but that's ammendable and easily ignored, I'm just left with a craving for more information regarding how the current situation arouse, and this seemingly r63 twilight is making me even more curious, if they are opposite halves to the same coin, why did his arrival happen sooner? How did he survive on those nasty shroomies? I feel like this story is less grimdark and more of a dramatic one, I understand the whole meat eating thing and how that's disturbing to those ponies, but these are (mostly)) human readers, this seems to make more questions than you can answer in a short story. If this was its own story, then I could see this happening, but you've really set yourself up for a challenge...

935901 Hey, I would like a bit more feedback on my first chapter of Ripe Flesh in The Tartarus Collab.
It doesn't help when you only speak of regurgitate as the problem, kinda puts me off.

I used my hammock authority to wed two people
Lilith911 and manicPony , I wed thee using the authority given unto my by the powers of myself, the hammock god, the god whom hast sacrificed thine own dick to the weather gods (that were slayed by the hammock gods girlfriend) now, in the name of cthulu, the spaghetti monster, v-necks and my holy backpack I legally bind you two, and may you live long and have tonnes of rough sex and no typoez and may you both get write forevermore,  be it in heaven, on earth, or (hopefully) from the great lake of fire satan lives in and recently got ac installed (now a cool place to chill;) )

918608
Why thank you, kind sir.
It's always nice to know I'm doing something right.

912124
You look like an author that needs more attention for your efforts, your stories aren't rushed, but not too slow, the stories are good, and the grammer is immaculate from what I've seen, would be a crime to ignore talent like you