Oh god. I'm torn between reading this now and waiting for each chapter or just waiting til its done. I've loved your stuff before (Nurse Redheart is my waifu), so I know its gonna be good!
Sweet merciful celestia daisy is gonna go all overly attached girlfriend on him and then twilight realized that daisy was in the burger place stalking him and became extremely worried for his safety and goes all super saiyen twi all on daisy .... That's my imagination for the next chapter
Are you trying to kill me cute Jaydex? Because you're doing a great job. It's also kinda eerie how this reads exactly how I would act some of the time, that's just wild.
5438634 Which ever you decide, I hope you'll enjoy it. And it's funny you should mention Nurse Redheart. I know it's been too long, but I'm finally going to work on another story for her series, taking place where the third one left off.
5438756 I thought Daisy would make for an interesting plot twist.
5440295 Yeah that's the way it is Jaydex. I'm really fond of Wind Whistler, G1 Twilight (the unicorn), and Heartthrob. That's just a small number of them.
5440555 Hard to have just a few favs, even with the G1 mares. I'm actually quite fond of Wind Whistler too, and of course Gusty, Gingerbread, Posy and Ribbon, to name a few.
I haven't read a pony story in a rather long time. This was quite nice; it took me to that special realm of the imagination which is where I really live. It almost makes me want to write a book about me and one of my pretend girlfriends. I also wonder what happens after the main character talks to Daisy :o
i lvoeee ti i can wait for you to write mre! as rainbow says oh my goshomygoshohmygosh! they need to add a smiley like that where rainbow is like that. :)
Sweet merciful celestia daisy is gonna go all overly attached girlfriend on him and then twilight realized that daisy was in the burger place stalking him and became extremely worried for his safety and goes all super saiyen twi all on daisy
I had been reading chapter 4 a bit on and off this past week (kept getting interrupted by friends showing up at my place), but finally got time today to finish reading.
Still chugging along with all the super mushy stuff and I don't expect that to slow down. Though I am interested in seeing what complications Daisy can bring to the table. I'm sure Twilight could end up having an insecure moment if she feels that there is a chance that the protagonist could be lured away from her. Even though there is literally a snowball's chance in hell of that happening, certain events or meetings can be misconstrued as rekindled interest and be taken the wrong way. A lot of conflicts end up coming from simple misunderstandings and from not properly talking about them.
The worry I have there is that with the way you are writing this story, you would promptly quash any misunderstandings by having them immediately talking things out. This instantly diffuses the drama and/or build up to a larger, more powerful, resolution. You would need to put in some roadblocks that can realistically keep them from talking things out immediately in order to properly build up the tension. Though like I said, with the way the story is currently, I'm unsure if you are willing to add a lot of tension or just want to add small, easily cleared, hurdles for the loving couple. Just my two bits there.
Either way, I'm looking forward to seeing a new chapter made. Hopefully you come back to this story sometime soon.
So, I just blitzed through this story. I have to say it was very well written, and I am only mildly bothered by the first chapter of a romance story containing a sex scene. Mainly because up to that point we were just told they are in love rather than having the build up of them falling in love.
Yes plot thickens. -looks for the next chapter-..........where the next chapter? -double checks- where the hell is it ? Okay im going to hit the refresh button and it will.....not be updated. Why isn't this updated why did this amazing story have to end like that. I need to know how it ends I need to know. Tell me Jaydex I need to know
7317345 Have no fear, my friend. There will be more coming. I took care of my free time issue and that which was killing my creativity, my old job. I left it and got a new one that should grant me time to get back to work on this and my other stories as well. In fact, I've had time to check on my comments again since starting my new job.
A fun fact. This originally was only going to be a one-shot, but I ended up splitting it into two chapters and the response from it was so good, that's why I decided to make it an ongoing story that will give you a feel for what it's like to be in a relationship with Twilight. At least that's my wish for this story.
7324087 It's cool. And I love tfs Vegeta. So, your comment was quite entertaining. It's up there with 6795816's comment. It was just an animated gif, but it was entertaining nonetheless. I'm a fan of "Avatar - The Last Air Bender" and that clip of Zuko is perfect given my lack of progress on this story. But we're cool, so no worries. Thankfully, I will have time to get back to work on my four core stories now.
6795816 More is finally going to be coming. After being all but beaten down by my old job, I've got a new one that has given me some free time at long last! BTW, love the "Avatar" gif. Totally got the reference and it really fits my lack of progress.
7593987 I'm just about done with the next chapter for Luna's story, then Twilight's will be up next. I have close to half the chapter done and just need to retool a few things, then I should have it ready. Not sure exactly how long, but it will be soon!
This should be a decent story; all of the elements of one are there, but I couldn't help but feel that something was off, and I finally figured out what: Twilight and 2nd-person-character are emotional polyglots. Here's what I mean: The Five Love Languages Both of the main characters speak all five, which is rather unrealistic. It's not that important, but it was bugging me in the back of my mind while I read. Anyway, keep up the good work!
Hi Jaydex, your latest blog post brought me here. This seems to be a sweet and charming story. I do hope you revisit it again. Take the time you need. I look forward to an update to either of the stories you've ensnared me with.
8104877 Yes actually. I only need to do two more scenes to complete the rough draft of the next chapter, which unless I break it into two, will be a very nice and long chapter, probably over 10,000 words. Oh, and my pre-reader is looking over what I have drafted so far.
8108342 Oh finally. Ive been going through clearing out unfinished stories from my read later list and so far every single one of them has been dead and the author hasn't logged in in over a year. Its nice to finally find one where there will be an update.
Oh god. I'm torn between reading this now and waiting for each chapter or just waiting til its done. I've loved your stuff before (Nurse Redheart is my waifu), so I know its gonna be good!
Sweet merciful celestia daisy is gonna go all overly attached girlfriend on him and then twilight realized that daisy was in the burger place stalking him and became extremely worried for his safety and goes all super saiyen twi all on daisy .... That's my imagination for the next chapter
This was a good chapter keep up the good work.
Are you trying to kill me cute Jaydex? Because you're doing a great job. It's also kinda eerie how this reads exactly how I would act some of the time, that's just wild.
Yay, some more of this fic.
IT LIVES!
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Which ever you decide, I hope you'll enjoy it. And it's funny you should mention Nurse Redheart. I know it's been too long, but I'm finally going to work on another story for her series, taking place where the third one left off.
5438756
I thought Daisy would make for an interesting plot twist.
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I will, thanks so much for reading!
5439392
Well then, it would seem we have quite a bit in common. Besides liking G1 ponies as well as G4.
5439481
Hope you enjoy the new chapter.
5439674
YES, YES, YES...it does indeed!
5440295 Yeah that's the way it is Jaydex. I'm really fond of Wind Whistler, G1 Twilight (the unicorn), and Heartthrob. That's just a small number of them.
5440555
Hard to have just a few favs, even with the G1 mares. I'm actually quite fond of Wind Whistler too, and of course Gusty, Gingerbread, Posy and Ribbon, to name a few.
5440701 oh man I like them too, I am also very fond of Fizzy. She might be a bit scatter brained but she sweet and lovable.
5440295
Insert manly squee sound here....
Sunbeam is my favorite G1 Pony. She's adorable. fc06.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2014/056/7/0/g1_mlp_sunbeam_by_gundamcat-d77xypa.png
I haven't read a pony story in a rather long time. This was quite nice; it took me to that special realm of the imagination which is where I really live. It almost makes me want to write a book about me and one of my pretend girlfriends. I also wonder what happens after the main character talks to Daisy :o
you know I cry every time I read a good romance story like this. Keep up the good work my friend.
i lvoeee ti i can wait for you to write mre! as rainbow says oh my goshomygoshohmygosh! they need to add a smiley like that where rainbow is like that. :)
5438756
Misterious Hooded mare
Watching (from a distance)
5446614 She is adorable, I've never seen her before. Thanks for showing her.
5527293 Any time! I'll take any chance to show my favorite G1 ponies.
5543356 Good to know, there are many of them I'd like to know more about.
I was here when it was only 1 chapter, It's been too long ;n; I need to come back to this wonderful community
Nice story bro, can i ask you question?
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Fixed. Thanks for letting me know.
I had been reading chapter 4 a bit on and off this past week (kept getting interrupted by friends showing up at my place), but finally got time today to finish reading.
Still chugging along with all the super mushy stuff and I don't expect that to slow down. Though I am interested in seeing what complications Daisy can bring to the table. I'm sure Twilight could end up having an insecure moment if she feels that there is a chance that the protagonist could be lured away from her. Even though there is literally a snowball's chance in hell of that happening, certain events or meetings can be misconstrued as rekindled interest and be taken the wrong way. A lot of conflicts end up coming from simple misunderstandings and from not properly talking about them.
The worry I have there is that with the way you are writing this story, you would promptly quash any misunderstandings by having them immediately talking things out. This instantly diffuses the drama and/or build up to a larger, more powerful, resolution. You would need to put in some roadblocks that can realistically keep them from talking things out immediately in order to properly build up the tension. Though like I said, with the way the story is currently, I'm unsure if you are willing to add a lot of tension or just want to add small, easily cleared, hurdles for the loving couple. Just my two bits there.
Either way, I'm looking forward to seeing a new chapter made. Hopefully you come back to this story sometime soon.
Holy shit, this story was awesome! I'm really glad I came across this. Twilight's my most favorite pony EVER! Keep up the good work, man.
6493366
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll be sure to do my best as I continue with this story.
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Keep up the good work, dude!
A Perfect Song For Twilight.
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Yes. I certainly will. I've just fallen behind due to a lot overtime at work.
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So, I just blitzed through this story. I have to say it was very well written, and I am only mildly bothered by the first chapter of a romance story containing a sex scene. Mainly because up to that point we were just told they are in love rather than having the build up of them falling in love.
UPDATE!
Yes plot thickens. -looks for the next chapter-..........where the next chapter? -double checks- where the hell is it ? Okay im going to hit the refresh button and it will.....not be updated. Why isn't this updated why did this amazing story have to end like that. I need to know how it ends I need to know. Tell me Jaydex I need to know
7317345
Have no fear, my friend. There will be more coming. I took care of my free time issue and that which was killing my creativity, my old job. I left it and got a new one that should grant me time to get back to work on this and my other stories as well. In fact, I've had time to check on my comments again since starting my new job.
A fun fact. This originally was only going to be a one-shot, but I ended up splitting it into two chapters and the response from it was so good, that's why I decided to make it an ongoing story that will give you a feel for what it's like to be in a relationship with Twilight. At least that's my wish for this story.
7320532
Yay . Anyway sorry about going all tfs Vegeta on ya.....and started to sing a 90s song.......
7324087
It's cool. And I love tfs Vegeta. So, your comment was quite entertaining. It's up there with
6795816's comment. It was just an animated gif, but it was entertaining nonetheless. I'm a fan of "Avatar - The Last Air Bender" and that clip of Zuko is perfect given my lack of progress on this story. But we're cool, so no worries. Thankfully, I will have time to get back to work on my four core stories now.
6795816
More is finally going to be coming. After being all but beaten down by my old job, I've got a new one that has given me some free time at long last! BTW, love the "Avatar" gif. Totally got the reference and it really fits my lack of progress.
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7327434 This deserves a special cheer.
7593987
I'm just about done with the next chapter for Luna's story, then Twilight's will be up next. I have close to half the chapter done and just need to retool a few things, then I should have it ready. Not sure exactly how long, but it will be soon!
This should be a decent story; all of the elements of one are there, but I couldn't help but feel that something was off, and I finally figured out what: Twilight and 2nd-person-character are emotional polyglots. Here's what I mean:
The Five Love Languages
Both of the main characters speak all five, which is rather unrealistic.
It's not that important, but it was bugging me in the back of my mind while I read.
Anyway, keep up the good work!
Is this dead? 2 and a bit years is a long time for an update.
7917438
If all goes well, this story won't be quite for much longer. I just know that when they say life comes at you fast, they aren't kidding.
Hi Jaydex, your latest blog post brought me here. This seems to be a sweet and charming story. I do hope you revisit it again. Take the time you need. I look forward to an update to either of the stories you've ensnared me with.
8104877
Yes actually. I only need to do two more scenes to complete the rough draft of the next chapter, which unless I break it into two, will be a very nice and long chapter, probably over 10,000 words. Oh, and my pre-reader is looking over what I have drafted so far.
8108342 Oh finally. Ive been going through clearing out unfinished stories from my read later list and so far every single one of them has been dead and the author hasn't logged in in over a year. Its nice to finally find one where there will be an update.
That picture of Twilight in the Notes has torn my heart asunder.
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thats so cute, i feel so bad for twilight there, i just want to give her a hug