Not bad. I may have to step up my own game :P Not to mention how excited I was when it updated. Please don't hurt Fluttershy, Rainbow... Looking forward to seeing how this develops.
"Big Mac! How come you don't feel all hot and bothered?!" " because I didn't eat the bread. I'm allergic to the wheat." "Then why do you chew a stalk of wheat when ever I see you!?"" "Because I like to live on the edge applejack! It's like eating poisonous blow fish, or poking a sleeping bear! Fylo can't control me, for I am Big Mac! Stallion of many apples and few words!" "That's mighty fasinating Big Mac, but unlike you I ate the bread, so you think you could...." " nope... Sorry AJ. Incest is bad mmmmkay?"
2767965 If bieng a 30 year old virgin makes you a wizard, then no. I am not a wizard. I am in fact a albietor, a direct descendant of white mare and her devilish cohorts.
I wonder if the effects of the bread are permanent. They're definitely fun to watch- I'd love it if we saw some more of what's going on in Ponyville! Not that I didn't like the scene with Fluttershy, mind you; alternating between Fylo and the rest of Ponyville like you did this chapter is probably the best way to go about this. Heh, now I really want to see something like Snips and Snails cornering Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon... that would make my day.
I've also a question: As far as I can see, the ponies are quadruped. Their breasts are on their chests, like it says in chapter one, right? Just how human-looking are those? I still have some trouble picturing them; are they ponies with boobs, basically? And sorry if this question sounds a little foolish.
2771020 Emphasis on "Descendant of whitemare.." That basically means I have incredible foresight, for whitemare is the changer of destiny... and so on and so forth.... I had a hunch Big Mac wouldn't eat the bread, and apple jack ... well, yeah you get the point.
Damn, this is consistently awesome. I've been waiting for an author with this kind of creativity for a long time. The vanilla shippy stuff that infests this fandom way too much for me. There is one thing though. The story has quite a few errors that I see as I go. If you want to clean them up, I'd be happy to edit for you. I normally don't do clop but this is too fantastic to not make an exception for. You can find me here if you want to learn a bit of what I've done.
Comment posted by HAHAHAHAHA_no deleted Jul 29th, 2013
i was more than a little pleased and aroused by this chapter/story 11/10
"Yes!"
Not bad. I may have to step up my own game :P Not to mention how excited I was when it updated.
Please don't hurt Fluttershy, Rainbow...
Looking forward to seeing how this develops.
2765885 ... ... ...I'm not American...
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Refer to this post: 2757031
"Big Mac! How come you don't feel all hot and bothered?!"
" because I didn't eat the bread. I'm allergic to the wheat."
"Then why do you chew a stalk of wheat when ever I see you!?""
"Because I like to live on the edge applejack!
It's like eating poisonous blow fish, or poking a sleeping bear! Fylo can't control me, for I am Big Mac! Stallion of many apples and few words!"
"That's mighty fasinating Big Mac, but unlike you I ate the bread, so you think you could...."
" nope... Sorry AJ. Incest is bad mmmmkay?"
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This is just ten tons of Oh My Shit this is amaysing. Im satesfied... For now €:
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...Uh...are you a wizard?
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If bieng a 30 year old virgin makes you a wizard, then no. I am not a wizard.
I am in fact a albietor, a direct descendant of white mare and her devilish cohorts.
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This is a good story btw.
If you listen really carefully...You can almost hear the screams of waifu-rape rage as people read this
Because friendship is carrots!
awesome so far
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It was a shockingly accurate prediction, that's all I'm saying.
I wonder if the effects of the bread are permanent. They're definitely fun to watch- I'd love it if we saw some more of what's going on in Ponyville! Not that I didn't like the scene with Fluttershy, mind you; alternating between Fylo and the rest of Ponyville like you did this chapter is probably the best way to go about this. Heh, now I really want to see something like Snips and Snails cornering Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon... that would make my day.
I've also a question: As far as I can see, the ponies are quadruped. Their breasts are on their chests, like it says in chapter one, right? Just how human-looking are those? I still have some trouble picturing them; are they ponies with boobs, basically? And sorry if this question sounds a little foolish.
2772051 You ever seen a female pig? Sorta like that, except there are only two of them and they're covered in fur.
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I like to think of them as close to the show as possible, so they have two nipples but flat chests, that's the way I see it anyway.
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Thank you for clearing that up!
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Emphasis on
"Descendant of whitemare.."
That basically means I have incredible foresight, for whitemare is the changer of destiny... and so on and so forth....
I had a hunch Big Mac wouldn't eat the bread, and apple jack ... well, yeah you get the point.
And then rainbow dash put angel bunny up fluttershy's...
But really, excellent work, please continue ASAP.
I hope to god she's not defeated...There's endless fun to be had if everyone is forever stuck as her obedient sluts
Damn, this is consistently awesome. I've been waiting for an author with this kind of creativity for a long time. The vanilla shippy stuff that infests this fandom way too much for me. There is one thing though. The story has quite a few errors that I see as I go. If you want to clean them up, I'd be happy to edit for you. I normally don't do clop but this is too fantastic to not make an exception for. You can find me here if you want to learn a bit of what I've done.
Looking towards the next
Awesome, very well done.
can't wait for next chapter.
you are one of my favourite writers hands down.
I have absolutely no idea why this fic exists....
3095753 Its group listings might provide a clue
I'd like to see a continuation to this
when will next chapter be up
I really want to see it
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Also, it's up now.
Ok...no.
Oh boy