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All of a sudden. This story got featured. Congrats.
1809731 wait.... what... IT DID!??!?!??!
1809731 HOLY HELL IT DID! HALF OF MY DREAMS HAVE COME TRUE!
1809734 AWESOME!
The story is intersting.
1809746 thanks!
(Joke) Alt. Title: Bad Endings, Just As Bad Beginnings
1809766 Hahaha nice
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We meet again gamer
And you have another title.........nice......
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Can I also be known for my fanfiction? Please?
1809968 Read a few blog posts back, it'll tell you everything
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No promises
mmmmmmmmmm
MOAR!
No Deckard! It's blood D:
Great story keep it up man
For a moment I was wondering why you didn't go with legs, since they replace the arms, then I put it in the sentence, anyways nice story so far.
So. My (constructive, I believe) criticism:
Some grammar mistakes. "Forever in your dept." means "Forever in your department" (the academia shall last... FOREVER!) Must admit I laughed at this though, once mental autocorrect stopped screaming at me. The word you're looking for is "debt".
Some rushed encounters. "We became friends" should probably be fleshed out into the actual encounter.
The near-instant forgiveness from Derek makes suspension of disbelief rather difficult. He seems more like Monkey D. Luffy than any realistic human.
GET RID OF THE ORB. IT CONTAINS THE THE VIRUS
LOL Nothing to do with Shining Armor's wife! Ahahaha that killed me "Hey Shining?" "Yeah, Deckard?" "That's a really nice pink alicorn over there, see her? Yeah, that one! Wanna-" "HEY!!!"
2815383 I never caught this joke before, I came back because I'm in the middle of updating this story, and now upon reading it I cant stop laughing! Nice one!