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1753221 I thank YOU too. Also... do you think I did a good job editing it?
1753244 Thanks dude! *Brohoof* /)
Hoe-lay-shit son. He got 99 problems, but a zombie ain't one!
Sorry. I couldn't help it... Nice story by the way. Is favorited.
1753341 That hurt SOOOOOOOO bad....... But it was SOOOOOOOOOO WORTH IT!
I am intrigued.
Continue. Please
im insta faving this mother fucker..... when will we see moar?
This is relevant to my interests.
1753221
In the description
should be "survivalists"
1753962 bahahahaha wrong guy XD
1753877 I should be updating every story I have every 1-2 days! :D
1754002 AMAZING!dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
It's a bit rushed, but not bad I guess I have some more space in my read later thingy... Oh well, you do a good job here and you'll get into my favs Awaiting next chapter eagerly
1754072 I do not dissapoint. You should check out my other stories.... I am 40 or so chapters into those
Wait so he went flying out of a windshield from hitting a light post?
That truck was manufactured by rockstar
1754184 hahahaha pinkie is amused
Interesting, I was eager to see the continuity of that story, and now that you will continue where it stop I will finally see, how it end. I hope the other 2 humans, will awake much sooner now, I still want to see their reaction to talking ponys.
P.S: Pinkie and Slayer, is not, for complaining or anything the story is great…but, if you can, can you…eh…erase the part of the human killing another and then discover he is Celestia and Luna father?, I think from that point the story start derailing into another one. It is a VERY good concept, and I will like to see it, only…you now, in a different story…eh…if it is not much to ask…please?…same goes to the whole manticora thing…it was a good idea…but on its own…there…well derail the story too…so…eh…if it is not to much to ask…well…don't put those parts…that if…is not to much to ask.
Thanks for the chapter, Pinkie
Hey there, just look what i found?
Insta-fav
I wanna see where is this going!
1754283 good, I am updating this and my main fic... a shadows grave, almost every day, check it out, it is a sequel to another HiE fic of mine and the sequel is around 40 chapters
hmmm. you have my attention.
1753965>>1753982
Woops looks like I replied to the wrong person. Sorry for the confusiondl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Derpy_Hooves_lolface.png
SHUT UP AND TAKE MY SPIKE-STACHES!
1754084Zombies For The Win, bro /).
I like it, however I do have some minor gripes with it. The main being, that Twilight's narrative is first person. This doesn't really fit for an established character we all know, and you're already using first person for Deck. Alternating between two characters in first person narrative is very jarring, in fact I've never seen anyone do that before. It would flow better to make Twilight's narrative third person. Apart from that I would say the pacing needs a bit of work. I feel like we went from point A to point C completely skipping out on B.
Also do a bit more showing then telling. After he went through the window, he pretty much just talked about being in pain. So we get he's injured however we don't see that. Tell us about the gashes and bruises he would have sustained. This maybe all clear in your mind, but we as readers need to be shown that.
Well that's all I have to say, I look forward to the next chapter.
i liked how you ended it a good end cant wait
cool saert i woder what the ponies will think if they see what hell that they gone thoge before being there
I am going to use my amazing powers of clayvoiarence and say that our team retard (my nickname for the main characters when there are more than 2)
will be scared for the first few (1-2) chapters and then immideatly trust everyone, sing songs about friendship and will act so cheesy that they will be copyrighted by the Marin French Cheese Company.
Also Chris will be shipped with Twilight, James with Fluttershy and Deckerd with Rainbow Dash and they will fall in love faster than the Transrapid TH-09.
Oh and give us more detail about the enviroments. Detail the inside of the truck more. How the steering wheel looks like, the seats, the windows and how the destroyed street looks like, how the library looks like.
"I agree with deck on this one… we probably shouldn't waste those."
Deck should be capital D. And remove the brackets when you state that you have a weird nickname.
I'm liking it. Keep going!
hmmm, this story seems familiar some how
oh, it's this story again. Well i wish you luck on the future chapters.
i kinda stopped reading the other one during the 'hospital indecent'
1754245 well... true the father thing confused me too. But the manticore thing I thought was kind of cute. I'm definitly keeping that. But I'm editing what is said during the mother dieing and stuff to make it more fitting to whats happening instead of... "you killed my mother... i'm yours now"
I'm Chris :) weird nickname DICK
1753231 I looked and found this, (for the first chapter), I hope it helps
the words that are inside the () are the correction
• I will tell you all when the chapters he had made have reached an end and the ones I began start. So now I am done blabbering(Babbling), enjoy!
• I smash my foot against the gas petal (pedal) as we sped (speed or accelerate)
• That.Is.Nasty.(That…Is….Nasty).
• I jumped out of the way just as it sped(speed or accelerate) by and rammed right into a lamp post
• Is this a gang or something... (?) What does she mean (with) "it"...
• I'm horribly deformed because of the crash aren't I!(?)
• "Oh my gosh! Your(you are) awake!" Said the lady. "Are you okay?"
• 'Where is this lady.... I only see a pony.... fuck it.... where's my other friend...'(?)
Great story so far....I am looking forward for more
Hoe.lay.shit.
I like it but.. I don't at the same time. It's a good story but I personally don't like first person stories... From the POV of one of the mane6 at least. Oh well, for now I'll keep reading.
this is soooo awesome go show go show kind sir