"Hey Rainbow I'm home!" Spitfire said, remembering the last three months she had been living with the mare. She had learned quite a few things. Rainbow had finally started eating things other then take out, and Spitfire had learned to make sure they always had Ice cream in the house. It had been a productive three months to say the least, their friendship had grown and they had become closer then ever. Soarin' had even come to vist once our twice if only for dinner. But now it seemed that the mare was no where to be seen. She called out again, "Rainbow Dash, you here?" Still nothing. Spitfire carefully made her way through the hall checking the kitchen, but when she peered around the corner there was nopony there. She then proceeded to make her way through the rest of the house. Checking every room until she came to the stairs. She and Rainbow Dash had been living across from each other the entire three months, it only made sense because there were only two bed rooms(you gunna' argue with that?). As she walked up the stairs and approached the other mares room she heard soft sobbing, Spitfire walked up to the door and opened it softly and slowly.
"Rainbow, you in here?" Spitfire whispered into the room.
"S-s-spitfire? O-o-oh h-he-hey." Rainbow Dash got out in between sobs.
"Rainbow are you ok?" Spitfire said, walking into the room and getting on the bed to place a wing around Dash. Never before had she seen the mare so distraught. Rainbow only replied with more sobs, she couldn't even manage to get any words out. Spitfire knew that she wasn't going to get any words out of the mare any time soon. So she sat there with her wing around Dash's body making gentle shushing sounds, just trying to calm the mare. And eventually it worked well enough, she got Rainbow to calm down so she could ask her, "Rainbow Dash whats wrong?"
"I guess I have some explaining to do..... huh" Rainbow said chuckling a bit but silencing it by wiping her snout with her hoof.
"Maybe just a bit" Spitfire said coyly.
"I.....To-today is the anniversary of my parents death" Rainbow Dash sighed, getting comfortable under Spitfires wing.
"Rainbow I'm, I'm so sorry I had no idea." Spitfire was worried she had upset the mare.
"And why would you? I never told anyone this before." Rainbow reassured her.
"Do you want to talk about it?" Spitfire asked, trying not to pressure her.
"Ye-yeah, I think t it would be good to get it out" Rainbow said.
"Well I'm right here ready to listen" Spitfire said, getting comfortable on the bed.
"Well it all happened when I was just a filly, I wasn't really like the others" Rainbow began.
~Flashback~
"Hey dad? I have a question." A small Rainbow maned filly said
"Yes Rainbow what is it" A larger light grey pegasus replied.
"Well today we had the birds and the bees talk from the teacher, but they never said anything about two mares....Can that happen?" She asked with general curiosity. She was rewarded with a sharp hit on the top of the head.
"Rainbow Dash, I do not want to hear another word about this! Do you under stand! Two mares being together is wrong! Not another word" The larger pegasus scolded her.
"Y-yes dad!" The Rainbow filly answered her father.
~Present~
"And a couple years later I got my first fillyfriend, "Skyfire". My dad had said it was wrong but I didn't care. Until I actually told him that is. He called up Skyfire's parents and told them. We were forbidden the see each other ever again. Three years later I walked out on them and left." Rainbow said finishing her tale.
"Did you ever see them again" Spitfire asked her curiosity over taking her.
"No. I never saw "Skyfire" again either, I still miss her too. She made me the happiest, when we were together. You kind of remind me of her, except her special talent was cooking." Rainbow concluded
"Did she look like me." Spitfire asked her.
"Not really, she was white with light orange hair." Rainbow Dash remembered her fondly.
"Well why don't you tell me about the first time you met?" Spitfire suggested, "It might help you cope.."
"Well..It was my first year at Cloudsdale Elementary school. I just walked into my first class."
~Flash back~
"Alright everyone please take your seats." A elder brown pegasus mare rapped her ruler on the desk. A little cerulean blue pegasus took a seat next to a white filly with an orange mane.
"Hey there my names Rainbow Dash!" She greeted the other filly.
"Hi! My names Skyfire" The other filly smiled.
"I like the color of your mane, It reminds me of the Wonderbolts!" Rainbow complimented her.
"Really!?!?!? Ohmygosh that is the nicest thing anyone has ever said to me!" Punctuating her statement with a peck on the cheek.
~Present~
"And I guess after that we just kinda fell for each other." Rainbow said, finish her second tale of the night with a single(coltly) tear.
"Rainbow..."
"Yeah Spitfire?"
"Ummmm, I Know you don't really feel good, but I'm going to leave you to sleep. Your going to need it, I'll see you in the morning" Spitfire said, not sure that now was the right time to confess her love for Rainbow Dash, "Stupid stupid, stupid!" She mentally beraded herself. But while she was internally yelling some quite harsh words at herself her heart jumped at Rainbows next statement.
"Wait....Spitfire?" Rainbow stopped her in the middle of the door frame.
"Yes Rainbow?" Spitfire replied.
"C-could you sleep in my bed tonight? I don't really want to be alone right now." Rainbow Dash conceded, a coy smile apon her face.
"Of corse I can Rainbow" And with that Spitfire climbed up onto the bed and locked Rainbow Dash in her embrace. As they fell asleep both of them were in a state of happiness they hadn't felt in years, love.
o.o ...
wow.....
i dont know what to say
So.... (....wait WHY THE BUCK IS THERE NO SPITFIRE EMOTICON?!?!)
Sweet!!!
Is "Skyfire" related to Spitfire?
And what was with the quotation marks?
The're not related, I was just using the quotation marks to display her name.
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1. you dont use quotations make to make a name aparent in a scentince. you use caps
2. why is it that in almost every fic ive read with Dash as a mane charicter, her parrents have died in her past?
(3. did u c wut i did thar?)
hmm.. I dunno it seems like you wanted to get over with this chapter asap, I think you maybe could have shown more of their emotions and how they fell asleep was a bit fast in my opinion.
Maybe you should think about taking more time to write the chapters.
but other than that good chapter, keep them coming.
>>demonoid47
Yeah well......you spelt sentence wrong! But yeah I did see what you did there.
>>Moonwolf
I completely agree with on this. I'm not particularly happy with that chapter but it was my first time doing a big emotional sene. I might do a rewright of it.....
Awwww
SpitFire and RainbowDash Sitting in a tree K I S S I N G
First comes Love then comes Marriage then comes Spitfire with a baby Carriage (ADOPTED!)
yeah, this chapter was pretty good. im not saying it was th best. but i can see you tried hard. The part where spitfire just comes out and says it was kinda unrealistic. It was kinda like a "Guess what! Its like this! Done!" kinda moment. There wasn't any lead up. it kind of felt like she just spontaniosly decided it right there on the spot. The chapter felt a little rushed and short. But apart from that, it was good. Im tracking this story. :)
>> Vinyl-Scratch
Again, totally see where your coming from with this. Need to do I bit of rewriting on all the chapters! -Theengineerbrony
Also, No Spitfire emoticon? I am dissapoint :(
REWROTE, HISTORY UNVEILED! AGAIN! BLARGH!
(coltly) tear. AHAHA this guy right here, brovo dude
IT'S GENIUS!
I CANNOT DENY YOUR LOGIC *fizzles and explodes*
On topic, wow, that pretty much came out of no where. It was adorable, but extremely rushed. Yes, there was that three month time lapse, but those never carry with them the emotion that would have been there if you actually wrote them. My only suggestion, for any future projects, or this one if it's still going, is to slow down. Instead of that 3 month time lapse, you could have broken it apart and delved into some relationship building instances. Not romantic, but more friendship, the romance would evolve from that. If you had other elements to the story, this point would have felt a lot more emotionally pact, it would have hit harder. Of course that's just me and my suggestions, so feel free to ignore me completely