Thanks Howie, I love the gift.

all of my mustaches to this fic.

The CLOOOOOOOOOOOP!

I think I shall read this later, after a good night's sleep.

It's a school night, that's why

Not failing > Ponies > school > WoW > Else

LOVE

I like it. It was so believable that i actually got confused when the word stallion was mentioned. Then I realised I was a guy...

Berry Punch? This surprises me

Well, that took a lot longer than I thought it would to upload. Oh well, still happy with my birthday present.

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1347229 He went to sleep, and this was a one shot. xD

That was good.

I think you have a truly well-rounded skill set in writing Howitzer.

And another masterpiece by Jet Howitzer. You sir, are a brilliantly minded writing genius (yeah, I know, corny )

I greatly look forward to future installments of Faux Paux of the Heart as well as any future oneshots and the like that you release. I'm quite glad that I chose to track you a couple months back

Its going to be featured by tomorrow just watch. Its jet AND clop

meh...

who is this Storm i'm always hearing about?

You regret nothing? ABSOLUTELY NOTHING?

You will live...

For now

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You know why I'm okay with this clop? Because it's classy clop.

Also, inb4 featured. You know it's gonna happen, Howitzer.

1349808 There's no way it'll be featured. It's been up for too long, and it's not popular enough. Although I'm okay with this. Maybe I'll use this as motivation to write the Taupe x Applejack scene from the end of Apples.

1349848

Maybe I'll use this as motivation to write the Taupe x Applejack scene from the end of Apples.

1349848 I suppose we'll see. I'll wait patiently for your future work.
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This was good, I certainly didn't expect you to write about Berry, but why not give some love? I quite enjoyed it, it wasn't rushed, and it had purpose. I could actually connect with the character. Bravisimo!

We are pleased..

Love how descriptive this was. Not too much that it sort of grosses me out but enough to make me feel entertained

Rain? his name is Rain??!! so wierd. i could connect with this story more than the other ones cuz i also envision myself as a Pegasus

1351752 Rain Chaser, but there was never an opportunity for his full name to be used without seeming weird.

Well, that was good, very good!
Your stories are good, so you should feel good!

How was this not as popular as the others?

Nice work Mr. Howitzer you've got skillz

1369436 But I must wonder: Can they pay the billz?

1369585Perhaps... perhaps...
Let the writing do the work for you, just enjoy the ride and experiances it brings

1369649 That's what I try to do. And sometimes it works better than others. Now then, off to write a different clop scene!

1369683Hoorah!

Mustache For you Good Sir

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It's Jet Howitzer. Nuff said.

Well, all I could do is show this to my mum, if she saw me reading this one!!!
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Other than that, I'm....not sure what to say about this one...expect I know Berry approves.
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Mikey likey. A lot. Berry is best nympho.

Okay, screw sleep. I'm torturing myself with this despite not being that horny!

I don't usually like 2nd person clopfics, but I've read a few good ones, I guess. Let's just hope this one's not like the others that turn out to be a big disappointment. Too bad it's not in present tense. I've found these sort of stories much more entertaining that way, but alas, there's nothing to be done about it...

A few parts could've used commas, but once continuing, the reader picks up what you meant, though not till after pondering on it a bit. For example,

As you trotted down the road you passed many familiar faces

Upon the second you, there could've been a comma that helps the reader recognize the break.

A slight shiver down your spine as you heaved a massive sigh and began walking once again.

This sentence needs to be reworded, or just put 'slid' in between 'shiver' and 'down'. Several instanced like this appear, actually, where the sentence almost seems or is incomplete.

You had made your knock a part of the routine, and Berry had come to associate that knock with you.

This sentence is entirely unneeded, for the reader can assume this from the previous statement.

In the description of how Berry looked, you use 'seemed' several times. It's unnecessary to say things seemed, rather than saying it is or was. Not to mention repeatedly starting your sentences off with 'as'. I, myself, occasionally begin to do the same thing. Before I know it, I've used the same starting style for every sentence. You need to be wary of what you're actually writing, even in the beginning. They say the most important part of a story is the ending, but this is entirely false. It's the beginning. What catches the reader, and drags him or her into the story? The beginning, not the end.

for a few minutes.

I wouldn't say minutes. More like seconds if you ask me.

You soon found yourself staring at the wall, but with nothing of note on the wall,

The repetition of 'the wall' is unneeded. Once again, the reader can infer that he's staring at the wall.

Several times in the story up to the part where the reader is remembering his first date, and even after, you tent to use the same words over and over again, causing serious boredom to develop. It's a good idea to avoid using a certain describing word too many times in one sentence, but even after that, it's good to switch things up until a fine duration of paragraphs has passed, and then begin to use those words again if you can't think of anything else to put down. It's not so much show versus tell, believe me, I hate the term just as you do. More of a playing thing with words, and even full phrases. Also, you never told the reader what the two of them looked like in the photo, only the story behind it. Was it a picture of before the accident, or after?

You know that you don’t need to surprise me with fancy dress.

I am now suddenly imagined myself as a Mexican colt.

There's a few, though minor parts where you switch tenses. Not really irritating, but still noticeable. From then on, there's actually very little errors. This first chapter's clop was alright, but I felt it could've been a tad bit longer. Never the less, a decent read. At least it wasn't riddled with ridiculously annoying errors involving grammar, spelling, and punctuation. I'll be back tomorrow for chapter two. Till then, once again, sorry for putting this on hold for such a stupid amount of time.