Young Gallus

by Yoshifan30

Chapter 1

In a far off in Equestria there was a town called Griffinstone a town not so good looking like broken down houses and it gets very cold in the nighttime and the Griffins usually doing their daily routine being miserable and fighting with each other and stealing but it looks like it was pretty quiet until there was a yelling in that particular house.

"GALLUS!! Get down here now!" An old Griffin screaming then he coughed then suddenly the young blue Griffin running towards the old Griffon in a pant.

"Umm yes Grandpa Gruff." Said Gallas in a nervous tone as he look up at the old Griffin.

"What in the blue blazes are you even doing upstairs in your room boy?" Said Grandpa Gruff.

"I was just setting up for a little party with just a game boards and stuff and I thought I can just invite the other Griffins if they can play or something."

"Oh really you are trying to invite other Griffons to your little party what makes you think they will come anyway?"

"I- I just wanted to see if anybody want to come and probably this is the another way to make friends."

"FRIENDS? Ha! Not the way how are you stealing some other Griffins."

Gallus got a nervous look and then he said " I don't know what you talked about I didn't steal anything I swear." He cried out.

"Don't you dare lie to me boy!" As he pull out the 20 bits. "I found this In your room so you try to steal my bits so you can buy those little game board of yours. you are nothing but a ungrateful little Griffin who basically steals and never gives and that's coming from an old Griffin and if you think a creature will become friends with you and coming to you little party well luck with that Sonny boy."

After hearing that what he just said the fear and nervous disappeared and now he was just angry and said. "Hey Don't you dare tell me that you don't know anything about me at all!" Shouted Gallus as tears begin form in his eyes. "and you don't even care about me."

"Hey you better not raise your voice at me boy!"

"You know what I don't want to talk about this anymore!" And so Gallus begins running to his room.

"Hey what do you think you're going boy? We're not finished talking."

"Well I am done talking to you and it is a matter of fact I don't want to speak to you again!" As he slammed the door close.

"Fine stay in that room for all I care, Bah that crazy kid." he mumbled angrily as he walk away.

After that blow out between the two Griffins a female young grayish Griffin name Gabby heard everything what's going on between him and Grandpa Gruff and wanted to see if Gallus is ok. She knock on the door and said quietly "Gallus I'm sure he didn't mean to say that he's just a little grumpy that's all."

No response.

She sigh. "Look I know things are looking bad but you can't give up Gallus. I'm sure someday things will look up you'll see and I'm sure some somegriff will become your friend or maybe a pony and ohh or probably a different other creature you'll see." Said Gabby very excitedly And once again no respond. She low her head and frowned. "Gallus if it means anything you still got somebody here who can still look out for you and everything and who knows maybe you can find something out there when you get older just don't give up hope ok." Said Gabby and she continues talking. "You are the sweetest Griffin around don't ever lose that side of you." As she quietly began to walk away to her room she look back one more time in a sad way. "I'm sure there will be a better future for you out there Gallus."

Gallus lean on the back of the door for a while then he run to his Bed and sobbing thinking about what Grandpa Gruff said about him and angrily punching the pillow out of frustration Multiple times. After that and taking a breath he basically just lay down looking at the six chairs that's supposed to be for game boards and he almost forgot that he was waiting for other Griffins to come over. but later hours nobody showed up and then he just felt lost and lonely and thinking about this whole situation which it hurt him so that no Griffin never came over. As he closes eyes while tears coming down from his eyes.

Gallus: At that moment I always thought that no Griffin or any creature will never be my friend And I always will be the griffin who takes things and never give back and destined to be alone ...forever.

Somewhere in Canterlot An young light green earth pony reading a super hero comic book then there was a voice from the other side said. "Sandbar it's time to go to sleep its a school night." The female voice said.

Somewhere In The Deep blue sea. A pink seapony sleeping on her bed Dreaming one day that she will go up to the surface for the first time then she mumbled something in her sleep. "stairs."

In the Badlands there was an odd looking rock castle inside there was a young black larva changeling crawling around and once she got to the opening of the castle she staring at the moon in such Fascination and curiosity in her eyes.

In the Dragonlands young Orange dragon playing tea party with her rock dolls but then an older dragon called out. "Yo Smolder come on I'm going to teach you how to lava surfing with your big bro!" Said the red dragon.

Far off and the cold mountain of snow there was a young female yak playing in the snow with her siblings and smashing logs and rocks and said loudly. "Yona smash!!!"

And Then back to the sleeping sad Griffin.

Gallus: But thankfully I was wrong.

Author's Note:

This is my first and only Story I ever made. Yeah it's not as long and this is probably the only time I do this I just wanted to do something different on my blog but it was an interesting experience.

Oh and by the way if anybody was wondering why is Sandbar in Canterlot is because in the movie My Little Pony: Equestria Girls – Forgotten Friendship he was there during that time before season eight came around.

And the song called someday we'll be together by Diana Ross and The Supremes

Comments

[Italibaso]

Aw, that was pretty nice. I'm glad you were able to publish your first story :)

[Mlpzootopia19]

Not bad of your first story man and I would imagine gallus would felt like that but knowing in the future he will meet his future friends Nice job

[Yoshifan30]

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Thanks guys I really appreciate it. it was a long wait but it was worth it 😊

[Miller Minus]

nice one yoshifan! keep up the good work 💙

[Yoshifan30]

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Thank you I really appreciate that

[Ocellus The Changeling]

Interesting Story I love it!

[Yoshifan30]

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Thanks

[Kikio3000]

The story needs work, but it's your first so I understand that. Nice job with it, great topic and song choice, and writing errors did not make the story too much of a tough time to read. I like the Gallus backstory premise. Good luck if you are going to write more stories, and the app called Grammarly should help for this and any future stories. :) Cool story!

[Yoshifan30]

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Thanks for the advice and your input on my story I really appreciate that and maybe I'll consider it if I ever make a story

[Kikio3000]

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You're welcome. :)

[Princess Starflight]

This would make a really great episode! The episode was playing out in my mind the whole time I was reading this!

[Yoshifan30]

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Thanks when I saw the episode I thought this would be an interesting way how he will go through in his younger years before meeting up with his friends in the future but he never thought he will become friends with them

[Knox Locke]

This was a good story. I especially enjoyed the end where we saw what each of his future friends were doing back then. There were a lot of problems with sentence structure (especially run-on sentences), but they didn't subtract from the story itself, so it was still very enjoyable! Altogether, this was good work, especially for your first time.

[Yoshifan30]

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Thanks I really appreciate it I've been wanted to try something like that for a while and yeah despite that I'm not the greatest writer I did my best tried to put in where the periods are and some of the sentence as well so it's not all over the place but again thank you so much for that

[Teikan]

Ha ha, nice comedy

[Yoshifan30]

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What do you mean comedy I didn't make anything funny

[Teikan]

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Oh, how is really sad. I mean not story

[Yoshifan30]

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If you look at the summary of the story it's basically talking about his past gallus been going through hard aches ok

[Teikan]

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Meh, was reading. it's a little funny when they randomly give examples of an error ›
Scope Insensitivity (lesswrong)

[Yoshifan30]

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Fine I maybe not be a great writer but I wanted to do something different on my social media for a while and I did it despite that there are few things that are missing I was proud of it and if you didn't like it that's fine everybody has their opinion as long as it's not too cruel or anything like that

[Teikan]

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my god, open your eyes or learn to read. Where did I say I didn't like it? my first comment is literally praise (albeit not what was expected)

[Yoshifan30]

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Ohhh... my mistake

[Teikan]

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yes

[Cosmas-the-Explorer]

I love how you use music like this. (You might want to say the name of the song in the story in case the youtube video gets taken down and people can find another video of the song)

Gabby was right. Gallus got a lotta friends and that's quite nice. Take that Grandpa Gruff. I love how all of them were doing things, including Silverstream looking at the moon for the future.

[Yoshifan30]

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Thanks i really appreciate it Oh yeah I did put the name of the music on my Author's Note and thanks I've been wanted to do something like that for a long time when I first started signing up on this website

[Mlpzootopia19]

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Troll dude