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Grandpa Gruff wanted it to be known, and still only got 5 years?
Thats not for the crime, thats for explicitly shoving it in the courts beak.
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No, see, Celestia clearly stepped in and said "While I cannot condone your actions and thus must sentence you to prison time, you did a good thing and that tom deserved what you did."
AAA, I MISSED MORE CHAPTERS!
I need to sleep, it's like.. 11:30 at night...
But.... but I must READ!
...Yep, reading time ^v^
Great chapter can't wait for more
Welp, back again for day two of reading! And with probably a lethal amount of caffeine in my system, but I gotta stay up somehow '^v^
Caaaaaaaaaapitalization~
done what i could
and then it was gone, He snorted
Separating this one because it kinda has a double issue. Capitalization on "And," and you accidentally put an apostrophe instead of a period.
Gabby came down to Join her at the table
singing. shakily and with little hiccups at first
Another little separation in the caps section here, relating to the song at the end. I think you meant to capitalize the start of every verse, since it's a little bit inconsistent, but I'll leave that one up to you ^v^
Capitalization over, on to my regularly schedule nagging 'v'
I can't related to that
Accidentally used past-tense rather than present-tense.
And... that's it, that's all I found. Unfortunately only have time for one reading this time, so I probably missed some here or there, buuut I'm hoping not and that it's just that perfect!
Just like those two lil' lovebirds, even if they're a little... eh, cracked, they're mending! Slowly but surely! And hey, at least now they won't need to visit Zecora anymore, if ya know what I mean ^v^
Huh, somehow this didn't pop properly in my feed when posted.
Good chapter, though!
Wouldn't mind Gilda trying to call out Guff a bit more on the redacted document he showed her. It was something big enough to not only bother the ponies, but pique the interest of their head of state, so there almost certainly would have been something in the papers about it. She had a pretty good idea of the time it happened, too, so digging it up wouldn't have been all that much work. Have Gruff scold her that she was never one to let anything go once she got her claws into it, before he gives her the whole truth. Just feels that it works a bit better in showing she won't give up that easily, even after all he already told her, not until she's either had her own satisfaction or been really put off it, as happens in the story already.
Looking forward to the next part!
Well at least we know now how Gabby’s father died. Pity he couldn’t get to all the other toms involved. I was slightly disappointed that all that happened in this chapter is the kiss, but it seems like the sexy parts is happening in the next chapter, so I’m looking forward to it.
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hey you got a song out of it too!!!!
that was hard to write...*huffs and warbles* XD