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Yaay, Gabby is getting better, but now its Gilda who is going to be on the steady wind up waiting for The Question?
I thought, if Im going to teleport, why not do it in style. Anyway, the gold made the magical flux distribution CLANG.
You got me hooked as of late, when I get a mail FiMFic notification i immediately hope it's about this story updating!
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YAY!!!!!
i hope you like the rest then ^^ Cause I plan on doing more griffon stories!
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Well we could always do with more quality griffon stories tbh... specially since most are either way too short or abandoned :(
I love how you've handled the story and characters so far, it does not feel lacking in depth yet it does not get sidetracked unnecessarily, your writing style is quite good and with plenty of attention to detail, which help the characters feel alive.
I can't wait for the following chapters and I certainly will check your next stories , regardless of whether or not they are about griffons. (Burds are bonus points tho! )
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we shall warble and all deh burbcats shall hear us!
First half of the chapter, you keep refering to Gilda's talons as paws.
Oh, come on!! Argh, so close!!
Glad to see this is still ongoing, looking forward to next chapter.
So, despite the fact that someone has just found out, they are gonna put themselves through the hardship of pretending to not know and let their lover-to-be find the time on their own to pop the question, oh that's not gonna cause problems later on, NOT AT ALL!!
Seeing where this is going, however, I can see that prolonging the obvious inevitable was a good move, would have been anti-climatic to lay the cards out now.
Im batting by turn (chapter) 9, someone is gonna swing for game in this cycle of love.
by the way, my love triangle prediction, bucking called it! the hints are obviously here, wouldn't be long till those feelings for each other are revealed. I would be "kinda" surprised if the armored one has a thing for secret letter writer as well our mane protagonist since he knew long before our love tortured birb did. of course, I could be chasing ghosts with my predictions because of the fact that the pillars of Gryphonstone are pretty much foster siblings as its noted here and there so far...
where are you going with this arc
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oh im going places...MWAHAHAHAH!!!!
oo.....throws a tic tac at you and runs away!
Figure'd I'd jot down the small typos as I came across them ^v^. I know I'm nitpicking, but I can't help it! To see a wonderful story as this marred by tiny little things that only people like me would really ever notice, can't possibly let that happen.
Still loving this so far though, would've read this much earlier but life wanted to get in the way and make me crawl into a hole.
And I'm sorry if my nitpicking makes me seem bitchy or annoying, just trying to help the little bit I can.
"Gilda clenched her talons into fists for a moment...GAllus had known it was Gabby"
Think ya held shift a little too long, heh
"She was good with the kid too."
Did you mean that to be plural?
"Grover's beak...I am a rose...Gabby saw it long before I did..."
Not quite sure if you put too much or too little italics, but it cuts back to normal formatting starting at "a rose." Plus the lack of a space after each ellipses (which seems to be recurring with most of the ellipses I am seeing), but that's just me being picky.
"'Hi gilda, I like you, can we date?' see? Easy, why could she do that?"
Capitalization, and I think you meant "couldn't."
"WHen she lay down on the cool floor"
Just held onto shift for too long again, no biggie.
"'Well, do you think she will be bothered by it? i think that would be great news to hear,..."
Yes, I am even pointing out a lowercase "I." I don't know why I do this, don't ask.
"For you gabby, I'll do anything to see you happy,"
Capitalizaaaation~
Edit: OH, and the chapter name is lacking in capitalization, it looks more like a statement of fact rather than a title.
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oh my gosh you are awesome i shall make these fixes immediately ^^
Yay, I'm an awesome tweeterlion for being a stickler for text-based enjoyment! ^v^
*Insert generic bird dancing video.*
Probably best to expect me to do that more often, with the same type of layout for the errors I spot.
I had a feeling it was Gabby writing. still not sure how I feel about the Gallus and Twilight thing, (to each their own). adorable story all around, can't wait to see how it turns out.
MERRY HECCIN CHRISTMAS!
I believe Gilda could use the advice of a certain Disney song right now.
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lol
I like this story more each chapter I read. Really like Luna getting involved too. It's something I like in almost every story I read. The princesses getting involved in in their 'jobs'. Celestia wouldn't really fit, but great job with Luna.