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This story really deserves more love. XD
Always wonderful to get another instalment of your work, even if the pacing in this one is creeping along. Still, now that Gabby is on the mend, here's to hoping we see more soon!
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next chapter will be posted within the next day or two. keep your eyes open!
baked to perfection at a slow and steady rate with a frosting of heavy feelings sprinkled with a "healthy" serving of dramatic Irony, yet served with an artic ice-cold glass of Dr. Lemon aid's sour bitters...
The way our two birds are interacting is increasingly changing since a few things have been clarified, lets just hope she doesn't overdo it to where it becomes an obvious giveaway. then, of course, nosey nobles digging into his personal business is gonna cause diffident changes to how things are gonna go from here on.
Spoiler version with personal notes: The way Gilda and Gabby are interacting now in comparison to the early chapters has changed for the better as it'll slowly reflect that Gilda knows, I'm just gonna wonder how long this can go before Gabby starts to notice this and end up putting two and two together.
Now, the big storm that is starting to form is what got my attention the most. The god damn, silver diaper-wearing Nobles are trying to pretty much politicize the rumors of Gallus wanting to court Twilight which means they can use this as some ace card against The princess, for what gains, I'm not sure yet. It outright annoys me that they are not only sticking their powdered noses into the personal life of Gallus but if the investigation gets out to the public, a lot of folks are gonna start questioning a lot of things that can potentially make it harder for them to accept other kinds of parings, including the one we are seeing take form right before our very eyes.
I'm just glad that Twilight is a step ahead by sending a counterintelligence agent to help Gilda and Gabby work on how to deal with the Investigators when they do show up to "talk" to them. Still, whatever happens with this investigation is gonna have some sort of impact on the future of our two love birds.
I don't know why, but I think the Rose Bun recipe is gonna end up being an edible love gift for a lot of couples and may/may not end up being referenced in other tales of romance.
Good job, Good sir. can't wait to see more!
I'm baaack~ And I already have my eyes combing for little corrections
"Yeah, lemme grab some from the back, their uh, more fresh that way."
Change to "They're"
Gilda gently bopped her with a wing awhile taking bits
Now, I may be wrong on this one, but I think that would just be While
she looked over her shoulder at Gabby.
for several seconds, they simply fell silent, and then Gabby let out a yawn.
Gilda smiled warmly and then reached out and hugged gabby.
She pulled back and they stared at each other for a moment before gabby nodded and walked to the doorway.
Capitalization. Just clumping these together this time, rather than separating them into instances
Opening her wings a bit she let the warm heat of the bakery soak into her boy.
I... don't have a correction for this one, I am just legitimately confused what you mean ^v^'
Now for the biggest thing I have to say about this chapter
I got some glass from Princess Twilight that really makes the place a lot warmer now.
Now, this is just me being a stickler about minor plot holes, but hear me out... if they just got the glass gifted and installed maybe 30 minutes prior, how did Gilda already fit that in the letter that was pre-written before the whole scene? That birb obviously got some magic foresight ^v^
And with that out of the way, still the quality I expect and enjoy from this so far, well worth the wait between bundles of chapters! I'll read through Patience, Persistence, and Power Plays later when I have the time.
glim, you're becoming your father