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Is this story meant to be a mystery?
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Not really sorta maybe I dont know I'm writing it for fun cause I wanted a gilda romance story where she was just her. No human, no anthro, no alternate world or cross over stuff.
Just natural gilda. And some romance.
10785026
You and me both! There's not much catbird content and more so for good ol' vanila stuff
Also exceptional work m8, writing about PTSD and specially of this "nature" is quite hard to get right.
Though this doesn't explain Gabby's intense reactions to the subject of homo lovebirds, was that also caused by HIM?
Or is that another bundle of trauma Gilda has yet to unpack?
PS: There's a "thinfs" typo on the chapter
10785103
i agree!
more vanilla natural catbirbs is best!
also where in the chapter is this "thinsfs?"
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"Gabby please! It's just me! it's GILDA!" She yelled. Her claws dug deeper into Gabby's hands and Gilda feared she might make thinfs worse if she held on any longer."
10785026
AMEN BROTHER! and what a great story it is...good at writing and art you are.
10786173
thaaank you ill fix that!
May we all agree that at least the monster is burning in Tartarus still...
you realistically nailed the PTS when it came up. It sucks that it can literally strike out of nowhere like that. Seriously explains why Gabby is playing the mystery writer game with Gilda, to 100% make sure she isn't gonna get hurt again and I don't blame her.
An awkwardly painful step in the right direction I think, Keep it up!
One more chapter, one more batch of (mostly) fun read.
And I am almost certain all of us would be lynching that bastard of a sperm donor if he were still alive.However, that being said, proofreading time!
I'll have to write up some rules and guidelines for them too, at this rate. Not a bad idea though, with how smart that little
bird is.
I'm not really sure what the giant space is about, but I see you do it multiple times for.. emphasis, if I'm on the right track? Just looks out of place to me, that is all. Never seen someone do that, and I certainly don't do it justice in this little excerpt here.
"You've been spending too much time around that zebra Zecora and pinkie pie."
Simple capitalization of a name.
SHe gently nudged Gilda's shoulder wit her own.
Two-for-one here, She and with.
"Look, Gabby.You may be bothered by..."
Tiny lil' space wants to wiggle it's way in there 'v'
SHe cleaned up the game board and stowed it back in one of their bags
Caps, typing a wee too fast here that your finger couldn't react to get off Shift, heh.
"Alright, alright, he was cute. now, get up, and follow me."
Ah, that's where that capital letter went.
For several minutes they simply breathed. chests heaving, loose feathers fluttering around the two hens as they calmed down.
And there's another, I feel like I'm Oprah right now. "YOU get a capital, and YOU get a capital!"
a kiss in every meaning of the action for griffons. Gilda gasped but didn't pull away. She slowly nuzzled back. Gabby chuckled and then blushed and pulled away. "s-sorry. my heat is...well you know."
"Still, don't dodge the question. where's this fucker live?"
Yeah, I think I should just change my name to Oprah now.
For s few seconds, they stared at one another, and then Gilda slowly stared out the doorway.
Yay, now I don't seem like a prick digging in to every capitalization error!
Accidentally hit S instead of A there.
Gabby blinked and tilted her head. "hmm?"
"What?! why?!"
Gabby smiled and her face glowed. she reached up and touched her chest feathers with a blush.
Aaaaand right back to it, I am sorry for picking out so many caps ;v;
But anyway, enough of that, I still enjoyed this chapter as always! From the happy, to the tense, to the sad, it's all still needed to build the character and story of them in this little offshoot universe you have created.
Seriously though, I'm gonna need to know what graveyard that bitch was buried in to re-name his stone, he deserves that.Keep up the work, this birb will be here yet again with the next chapter ^v^
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you are a godsend, thank you so much. I shall edit this right away ^^
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You are very welcome Backlash, always happy to help ^v^
Hell, if I wasn't happy to lend a hand, do you think I'd be coming back each chapter and re-reading this a minimum of twice to catch out tiny details with my hawk eyes?
Totally ain't to enjoy the story too, naaaaah.10805132
Ahahah xD well I appreciate it!
You can read it as much as you want to ^^
10806627
Damn, you got the 100th comment milestone. Rigged.
Well? I'm waiting on you as well, you know? XD
Jokes aside, no pressure, do it at your own time.
(But do continue it as soon as possible, this story is great!)
10839312
will do! things are hectic for my atm irl. but I will be starting it up again after memorial weekend is over.
10839324
Tell me about it. I just moved to a new state, I'm staying at an airbnb while I look for a more permanent place to rent and on top of that I got multiple work things going on. It'll take me at least half a month until I get everything sorted out XD
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Ooof!
Well I hope your life gets smoother soon too!
That way we can both write our awesome stories!
May I say that this is not only a competently written slow burn romance, but also a good little mystery?
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GASP! WHY THANK YOU!