Ending: Atonement
The sleepy, deformed being awoke to the fine morning, his whole body aching in many different ways. Looking at his claw, which sparked fluent energy of chaotic magnitudes, his thoughts sank into the remembrances of the changeling queen, and how she almost gained control of his power completely and tried to use him like a puppet. The thought of actually hurting his two alicorn friends ruptured his fears in a new way, and placed his mentality in a more correct state. Slowly, the shimmering claw reverted to normal, but would from time and again spark up, only to return to its present state.
The draconequus rose from his luxurious bed and peered to the mirror to see his body. He looked different somehow. Maybe it was his eyes, or his outlook on life, but this new Discord had a kinder aura about him. Perhaps this was the kind of aura he saw in the six elements of harmony... and then it hit him. The elements still deserved an apology. He hastily strutted over to the throne room and entered to see Celestia giggling with one of her personal guards. He approached, but Celestia simply smiled his way.
“Good morning, Discord,” she said admirably. “Sleep well, I presume?”
Discord nodded his head, and asked, “Are we going to Ponyville today? I need to apologize to your student, and her friends, remember?”
Celestia frowned, and attempted to dismiss the notion with, “Today isn’t good for me, mainly because-”
“Please!” Discord interjected. “I need to get this off my chest. If I don't...” He stopped himself to look at his now yellow, glowing claw. The electric energy surged forcefully, making him close his eyes. However, the light died down. He once again looked back at her highness with serious eyes. More calmly, he continued, “I’m still feeling my chaotic mindset overtake my true disposition, and I need to see those fillies to ensure their forgiveness… something that I don’t actually deserve… but need.”
Her highness looked at her guard, and sighed, “Cancel all my appointments, for this requires my full attention.” As she rose, Discord blew a puff of air. The two entered the carriage room where the princess’s signature rides could be found. Two pegasi ponies prepped themselves for departure while Discord and the princess hopped on.
While they rode, the two talked of fond memories such as them exploring the Everfree Forest, and their first visit to Cloudsdale when it was justly made. They reached the city of Ponyville in roughly four hours, and landed in front of Twilight’s tree house. Inside, Twilight was discussing with her friends about the letter that was sent to her from Princess Celestia herself.
“And so, this friend, which you all know wishes to apologize… but it doesn’t say who it is!”
Rainbow suggested, “It must be Gilda! She must have gone to Canterlot, and got upset about the way she acted, and is now ready to apologize!”
Fluttershy interrupted, “But what about Iron Will? He may be coming to apologize for turning me against my friends.”
“Yes, but then there’s Trixie,” Twilight offered. “She might have been able to come to her senses to realize she was being very rude to me, and all of you as well!”
All these assumptions were thrown out the window when Celestia knocked. The moment she did, the door slowly opened, creating this ominous feel of things. The rays of light shadowed Celestia’s guest, but as he entered the room, thrilling chills were sent through each of the elements. Memories of his horrible deeds surfaced in each pony's mind, making the awkward moment even more stressful for Discord. He stood there, gazing at everypony with worried eyes, begging fate to be kind with their judgment. Celestia cleared her throat, almost making Twilight jump as she did.
“You all remember Discord… He… has something to say to all of you.”
Everypony stood, trembling before the draconequus. Their fear emitted like smoke wafting from dried ice. The being just looked down, returned his gaze to the six, and looked over at his child hood friend, Celestia, begging for her assistance with just his stares.
Suddenly, Twilight trotted towards the two, her torso lowering before her mentor. "Uh, with all do respect, your highness... HOW COULD YOU BRING DISCORD HERE?!" She cleared her throat, and quickly resumed bowing.
“You see girls,” Celestia stammered, staring desperately at Twilight. “A draconequus is a being with powers, yes… but with the magic of friendship, those chaotic abilities wither away, and that’s where it all went wrong.”
As Celestia explained the whole story about the time when they were kids, and all the way up until the present, the six mares received an understanding of this misunderstood creature. He was never a threat unless friendship ceased to comfort his soul, and knowing this became the one piece of knowledge that told the elements he was here to apologize. As he looked into the eyes of Twilight, the mare he tortured the most during his return, he began.
“I know… I made mistakes in the past, and I split up your friendship… not only that, but almost caused a rupturing in your wellbeing… something I regret more than anything else now, but I come to you with a heavy heart, and a good mentality… I wish I could do more to make you… all of you understand that this was never supposed to happen… I was never supposed to develop my powers… this wasn’t Celestia's or Luna's fault, nor was it mine… Okay, maybe a little bit of my fault, but it was mostly just… a bad turn of events that caused all this devastation I brought… and I’m sorry… I really mean it when I say that. If I could make you understand just how much grief I feel right now, I would.” His last three words were the most emotional he had ever said. “I am sorry.”
Twilight bowed her head, and sighed. As she looked back at the other ponies, her eyes unsure, she told the draconequus, "We forgive you, kind of harm not to, but there's still the problem of you possibly being a threat, right?"
Celestia looked at Fluttershy, and beckoned her to walk by her side for a time...
Forgiveness and friendship and joy and all that jazz.
I should go to bed, before another happy story updates and borks my mindset
DAW
Awwwwwwww, nice ending! I'm about to cry tears of joy.
Loved every word of it :3 Cant wait for bad ending though. You're awesome dude!
1304551 The bad ending was the one that said alternative ending. And thanks for the compliment.
Dawww.
Party time!
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Yay! This one is finally complete! Bumping it to the top of my "to read" list!
Great ending, although I can't help but feel like some of them would hold a grudge, most specifically, Rarity, Rainbow Dash, Twilight, and Pinkie. While I can easily imagine AJ and Flutters being forgiving, it's difficult to imagine the others forgiving so easily, so completely, so quickly.
Other than that, this is a great story! I think that, if this chapter were stretched out a bit, to give better reaction time, this might even be perfect. I'm glad that I read this, and I consider you one of the better writers on this site. Here, to show my gratitude, have a 'stache.
1305907 Thank you.
1305938 not at all. You earned it, and besides, authors (including myself) are always too humble when accepting praise. You earned it!
Anyways, know this isnt exactly "cool" of me, so feel free to say no, but would you check out my story? I never get any feedback, and a famous-ish name like yours might attract people who do give feedback, especially if you end up liking it. Lost Kindness
1306029Hehe, famous? Please. Sure, I'll look at your story, and see what I can do, but please, don't call me famous-ish. I'm not that great, just obsessed with ponies.
1306053 hey, don't blame me that you write a good story!
1306071 iIm not blaming anypony, but really it wasn't that good. Sure, I put a lot into it, but just look how ridiculous this is. Here I have a great story like the one we're commenting on that deserved to be in the feature box, and instead, the one about stupid, silly animal crackers gets featured instead! So ridiculous I could scream, but hey, that's the ironic side of fimfiction... Oh, my... Sorry, I began the ranting about the silly feature box again... truly sorry. I do this from time to time.
1306101 meh, I just wish there was a spot on there for the most recently updated fic. It's very exploitable, but still useful, if you line it up in a que and give the a feature per day limit.
1306150 There is, but your fiction has to be really popular with ratings like this one. Tthe last three in the ten choices.
great story! i loved it i even loved the sad ending it made me cry but wow did this happy ending make my day i love it when discord has a happy ending ^_^
1304589 Right my bad sorry Still cant wait. :D
I must say, tis a fitting end for a well written story...Based off an awesome song!dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy_invert.png
1311545 Thank you!
Okay. Am I the only one thinking this should be an actual episode next season?
MAKE IT HAPPEN HASBRO AND HUB!!!!
1317114 Yes, it is.
1325439 If that's your decision, by all means, quit now! Bye!
I must say, this take on Discord is very different than any other I've seen. Of the two endings, I have to say I prefer the alternate (sad) one over the "true" ending. However, I was expecting this story to go in a much darker direction than it did. With all of the mind warping and control setting that Chrysalis did, I had expected Discord to require more than just a "she did it" to break free and turn on his puppeteer. I was also somewhat surprised that Discord didn't outright destroy Chrysalis with her own attack given his mental state at the time.
All in all, though, it was a good read.
Amazing story! I prefer the good ending, but the way you described Discord condemning himself to an eternal imprisonment... Heroism took up to eleven.
1332803 Thank you!
I had to wait till all of it was uploaded because I knew I'd hate waiting. So I saved it all up and read it in one go. Pretty cute and all the feels type story, another successful story yet again, art inspired.
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1331499 i agree with you on the ending front. i personally preferred the bitter-sweet feeling of it. if anyones played saints row the 3d, and went for the 'kill Killibane' option at the end, they probably know what I'm talking about. also, where is every one. just because I came to the party a bit late, you could have saved me some cake. hmm cake, or muffins, or *GASP* CAKE FLAVORED MUFFINS!!!!!!!!!!
1567747 Please refrain from cursing, thank you.
1567774 It's what I do.
1567759 Oh, sorry....
1567777 Yes, yes, you brilliant genius, you.
But, in other news.....
OH MY LUNA, ISH SO BEAUTIFUL THANK YOU; THANK YOU FOR THIS AMAZING READ
1567798 You're welcome.
What, a story about a relationship between an alicorn and a draonequus that in the end can't end on a happy note? Who writes this kind of thing?
Perhaps just a bit rushed at some critical moments, but still a worthy reflection on a relationship that could, and perhaps should, have been. If you continue to write and grow with stories of this nature, then I'll be very happy that I Watched you indeed!
1662784 That's a review I can enjoy, and thank you for pointing out the mistakes!
I'll read this later, but right now i gotta work out...have a free thumbs up
I haven't even read this yet and I feel like it's gonna be sad. Will read later.
all i can think is beautiful.
1305907 You were right!
2073497 Holy crap! And a whole season in advance, too!
oooohhhhh.....sooo close to predicting the episode Keep calm and flutter on
This was a cute story. I'm glad that I read it.