The heat treatment at the Ponyville Spa helps mares get over their heat, but it leaves them in a temporarily dazed and suggestible state. When a stallion helping out for the season finds out about this, he uses it in very inappropriate ways.
Honestly, I think Aloe should have just told Star the effects of the herbs from the very beginning. At least that way, he'd know why he wasn't allowed in there and the opportunity would then never express itself.
Instead, Star didn't know, so he ended in a position with the opportunity, which he took. Had Aloe just told him WHY stallions weren't allowed in there, this would not have happened. Sorry, Aloe, you kinda brought this on yourself.
So between this one and the other story, I liked the main character more in this one. He came off as more of a “innocent” and sexually frustrated pony than what I can remember of the main character in the other heat treatment story.
Don’t like how he got into this position as much in this one but I didn’t hate it. I thought the other heat treatment did better by having the stallion janitor (i think) walk in and find that twilight was accidentally left behind; then, when the hypnotized twilight sang praises about him afterwards, earned the trust to do more.
Lotus and Aloe... well let’s be serious, if they needed help during the heat rush, they would’ve hired a mare. Even if star was the only applicant, I don’t think they’d hire him. Maybe if he was hired at the spa before and this was his first heat season working there? Idk, Lotus and Aloe just didn’t seem as responsible in this. Not to say the bar was very high to begin with since they locked up the spa with a customer still inside in the previous story.
But whatever; I look forward to more. I was pretty disappointed when the first Heat Treatment didn’t continue past the first chapter.
Honestly, I think Aloe should have just told Star the effects of the herbs from the very beginning. At least that way, he'd know why he wasn't allowed in there and the opportunity would then never express itself.
Lotus and Aloe just didn’t seem as responsible in this. Not to say the bar was very high to begin with since they locked up the spa with a customer still inside in the previous story.
Well, they’ve got to be irresponsible somehow, or a story like this could never happen!
10093125 Heh -- just wait until you see the last chapter!
10093245 Oh, I definitely will. All 5 chapters are already written, just waiting to get posted.
Mares in heat were first put into a special sauna room where the mist in the air was infused with a special blend of herbs – in fact, they’d just started using a new recipe, one from the legendary Zecora, which was supposed to be much more effective than the old one. Now it was only supposed to take one treatment. After the herb-infused sauna, the mares were taken to the back room of the spa where things were kept dark and quiet, where they’d be given a gentle massage to ease their body’s tensions as they cooled down from the sauna. And by the time they left the spa, they’d be completely heat-free – ready to go about their normal lives without being driven to distraction by the thought of sex all the time.
He really don't like when one of the character is just not consient about what is happening, it's litteraly a rape i think. Sorry, this is not a story for me, i pass this clop.
so there will be more chapters then why is it marked as complete?
Twilight gettin a hard horn
Hmmm... Stallion assisting mares with heat treatments during their season? Sounds like a serious Pony Resources SNAFU.
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Oops! Fixed that now.
10093044
Well, that’s one way to say it...
10093055
They’re definitely going to get some strongly worded letters to the manager after this...
Pretty excellent so far. Tracking this!
I actually really liked how this was handled.
Honestly, I think Aloe should have just told Star the effects of the herbs from the very beginning. At least that way, he'd know why he wasn't allowed in there and the opportunity would then never express itself.
Instead, Star didn't know, so he ended in a position with the opportunity, which he took. Had Aloe just told him WHY stallions weren't allowed in there, this would not have happened. Sorry, Aloe, you kinda brought this on yourself.
So between this one and the other story, I liked the main character more in this one. He came off as more of a “innocent” and sexually frustrated pony than what I can remember of the main character in the other heat treatment story.
Don’t like how he got into this position as much in this one but I didn’t hate it. I thought the other heat treatment did better by having the stallion janitor (i think) walk in and find that twilight was accidentally left behind; then, when the hypnotized twilight sang praises about him afterwards, earned the trust to do more.
Lotus and Aloe... well let’s be serious, if they needed help during the heat rush, they would’ve hired a mare. Even if star was the only applicant, I don’t think they’d hire him. Maybe if he was hired at the spa before and this was his first heat season working there? Idk, Lotus and Aloe just didn’t seem as responsible in this. Not to say the bar was very high to begin with since they locked up the spa with a customer still inside in the previous story.
But whatever; I look forward to more. I was pretty disappointed when the first Heat Treatment didn’t continue past the first chapter.
This is what we call a big ooooof.
This was a fun read :) I hope you keep going with it.
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Thanks! ^.^ What do you like about it?
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But that would be a really boring story!
10093107
Well, they’ve got to be irresponsible somehow, or a story like this could never happen!
10093125
Heh -- just wait until you see the last chapter!
10093245
Oh, I definitely will. All 5 chapters are already written, just waiting to get posted.
Typo
This is a high-class low-class story (if you know what I mean...).
Liked it, can't wait for more.
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Fixed! ^.^ I guess the commissioner gets that word for free!
Yeah, I kinda had life shit come up. Havent even been able to turn out pretty much anything lately, though I'm working on something behind the scenes.
Just wish he'd messaged me to see if he could get me back on track instead of assuming I was gone.
10094294
I assumed he’d already talked to you about it...
Star, huh? Reference to Star Shooter perhaps (from Star Struck?) Maybe? No? ... Okay ...
10098719
No, not at all! I wouldn’t drag his good name through the mud like this!
It’s just ... a really good OC name is all...
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At this point, I think they're acting.
Heh, for suggestions to stick the person being suggested at needs to have at least some level of acceptance.
Silly Aloe, her mistake will cost dearly!
10381154
Yeah, none of this will end well. ^.^
He really don't like when one of the character is just not consient about what is happening, it's litteraly a rape i think.
Sorry, this is not a story for me, i pass this clop.
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Well, yeah. This is a rape story. Pass if that's not your thing.