Rachnera Arachnera is sent to Equestria by a demoness. She now seeks a way home and won't let anything stand in her way. Even if it's a hive of changelings trying to take over a small town inhabited by ponies.
Oh I can't wait for Rachnera to meet Celestia. Luna, and all the girls, are out of the equation from the time period. But she in Celestia are going to have so much FUN together considering Trollestia and how much the Princess enjoys her pranks. I also wonder how old Sunset is, and how soon it will be before she does her whole thing. Her mom is just wonderful too! I can definitely see where Sunset gets it!
Now imagining Rachnera befriending a young Cadance, Shining Armor, and helping Cadance babysit Twilight.
9521834 When you come from a long line of warriors (and have a lot of heroes dotting that line), certain names are going to be given and there are going to be expectations behind them.
Lucifer lived up to that and at this point of his life, married late in his age to continue the line. He also left his homeland to get away from the pressure.
Rachnera reaction to Lucifer voice made me think of the character Pica in One Piece. Humongous body but a really hilarious high pitch voice that doesn't match his appearance.
But did the pony guard freak out at Rachnera speed?
But Lucifer look like the perfect companion for an adventure. He will be interesting I think.
For the next several minutes Rachnera sipped at her water while Winter Shimmer never took her eyes off her. They locked eyes and a battle of wills (i.e., staring contest) began.
9521907 I was more questioning the fact that Minotaur’s apparently have access to Latin and knowledge of the religious taboo inherent to that name. Or at least I assume they do as Light Bearer or Light Bringer aren’t names that would imply badassery.
9522056 I used it because it sounded neat. If people want to look into the name's history and meaning, all the more power to them. It has nothing to do with the character other than what I want the name's meaning to be.
But I do understand the curiosity. It does sound intimidating, which is the main reason I chose it.
(edit: I can already imagine my mother giving me The Look for using Lucifer on any character...)
Just a few small points of criticism before the praise. First, if you're going to drop f-bombs, don't go back to the cutesy Y-7 "buck" term in the very next paragraph. It creates dissonance. It's like a PG-13 movie desperately trying to not cross the R-rating line by using exactly one f-word while being "edgy."
“Thanks, but no thanks,” Winter said flatly. “I’m not going to trust somepony I don’t know to stand with my troops and mingle among my civilians.
I would definitely classify Rachnera as "somecreature," not "somepony." She's about as far from a pony as a creature can get.
Otherwise, I enjoyed the back-and-forth between Winter Shimmer and Rachnera. While the tension between the two is beautifully played, this chapter also shows neither of them has true malice against the other. Winter's caught between a rock and a hard place because of the missing foals and pups and the rising tension with the diamond dogs. Rachnera only wants to go home.
That cliffhanger ending, though! It's a special kind of mind-splitting terror that drives a person all the way around to laughter. Based upon the story description, I imagine the pre-reformation changelings would react the same way to Rachnera. After all, bug horses would be natural prey for a giant spider.
9523375 Duly noted. That was actually due to my indecisiveness more than anything else. I'll fix that!
However, in Winter's defense, I wanted to show she does accept Rachnera's personhood (but in a way that can be seen as a bit speciest). It is a habit of Winter to use everypony for everybeing. Her husband is more inclusive when referring to other races as he is a bit more aware in that regard. Winter is a bit lacking in that department, as it is a character quirk.
Other than that, the chapter was a lot of fun to write as I really do enjoy having characters interact with each other on a level that I think would feel natural. I also wanted to throw something in there that would balance the fear the ponies have of Rachnera with the fear she has of Lucifer.He is more than physically capable of doing terminal harm to her and she knew it the moment she saw him burst through the door.
Thank you for your thoughts and constructive critisism! I really do appreciate the feedback! Keep 'em coming!
Aha! The mythical cow level at last!
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"Moo."
"I said Moo."
"I'm a cow, okay?"
9521773
*Monster girl encyclopedia knowledge intensifies*
Yeah, it's best if a kid doesn't know what 'learned'
Hopefully she can hold it together long enough to have a new translation spell cast upon her.
Have to wonder at the naming convention that would lead to a minotaur named after the Morning Star.
Oh I can't wait for Rachnera to meet Celestia. Luna, and all the girls, are out of the equation from the time period. But she in Celestia are going to have so much FUN together considering Trollestia and how much the Princess enjoys her pranks. I also wonder how old Sunset is, and how soon it will be before she does her whole thing. Her mom is just wonderful too! I can definitely see where Sunset gets it!
Now imagining Rachnera befriending a young Cadance, Shining Armor, and helping Cadance babysit Twilight.
*inhale* MMMMOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
9521834
When you come from a long line of warriors (and have a lot of heroes dotting that line), certain names are going to be given and there are going to be expectations behind them.
Lucifer lived up to that and at this point of his life, married late in his age to continue the line. He also left his homeland to get away from the pressure.
Rachnera reaction to Lucifer voice made me think of the character Pica in One Piece. Humongous body but a really hilarious high pitch voice that doesn't match his appearance.
But did the pony guard freak out at Rachnera speed?
But Lucifer look like the perfect companion for an adventure. He will be interesting I think.
Six eyes vs two. You are outgunned here Winter.
That chapter ending XD
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*ahem*
MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
9521907
I was more questioning the fact that Minotaur’s apparently have access to Latin and knowledge of the religious taboo inherent to that name. Or at least I assume they do as Light Bearer or Light Bringer aren’t names that would imply badassery.
9522056
I used it because it sounded neat. If people want to look into the name's history and meaning, all the more power to them. It has nothing to do with the character other than what I want the name's meaning to be.
But I do understand the curiosity. It does sound intimidating, which is the main reason I chose it.
(edit: I can already imagine my mother giving me The Look for using Lucifer on any character...)
9522066
Fair enough. I suppose I have problems seeing a name without reading into the whole of its implications.
i am greatly enjoying this
9522054
... um having fun there?
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okay
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Yes, yes we did
9522054
EXACTLY!
Why do i feel like i've read the ending part before?...
Loved 3.
Looking forward to more
The Monk
Just a few small points of criticism before the praise. First, if you're going to drop f-bombs, don't go back to the cutesy Y-7 "buck" term in the very next paragraph. It creates dissonance. It's like a PG-13 movie desperately trying to not cross the R-rating line by using exactly one f-word while being "edgy."
I would definitely classify Rachnera as "somecreature," not "somepony." She's about as far from a pony as a creature can get.
Otherwise, I enjoyed the back-and-forth between Winter Shimmer and Rachnera. While the tension between the two is beautifully played, this chapter also shows neither of them has true malice against the other. Winter's caught between a rock and a hard place because of the missing foals and pups and the rising tension with the diamond dogs. Rachnera only wants to go home.
That cliffhanger ending, though! It's a special kind of mind-splitting terror that drives a person all the way around to laughter. Based upon the story description, I imagine the pre-reformation changelings would react the same way to Rachnera. After all, bug horses would be natural prey for a giant spider.
9523375
Duly noted. That was actually due to my indecisiveness more than anything else. I'll fix that!
However, in Winter's defense, I wanted to show she does accept Rachnera's personhood (but in a way that can be seen as a bit speciest). It is a habit of Winter to use everypony for everybeing. Her husband is more inclusive when referring to other races as he is a bit more aware in that regard. Winter is a bit lacking in that department, as it is a character quirk.
Other than that, the chapter was a lot of fun to write as I really do enjoy having characters interact with each other on a level that I think would feel natural. I also wanted to throw something in there that would balance the fear the ponies have of Rachnera with the fear she has of Lucifer. He is more than physically capable of doing terminal harm to her and she knew it the moment she saw him burst through the door.
Thank you for your thoughts and constructive critisism! I really do appreciate the feedback! Keep 'em coming!
9521757
There is no cow level...
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