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Yes.

This was a pretty good start. Look forward to more. We need a lot more of this concept. Not just ScootFutaloo, but ScootaDash as well. Sadly not common. Worse for clop!

You have my attention for Futa Scootles!

Not often you get a story-based Futa fic, but you have my attention.

More pony porn. The Featured Box Troll strikes again!!!!!!

More pony porn. The Featured Box Troll strikes again!!!!!!

Needs more Futaloo.

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>Needs more futaloo

I like the way you think.

I’m confused, is she both male and female or does she just identify as a female?

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According to my interpretation, male genetalia but completely female body from the frame to the curve of the muzzle to the hormones (though she also gets more testosterone due to her male bits). Hope that makes things clear!

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Does Scootaloo produce sperm or eggs? I think that is what the previous comment was really asking.

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The former.

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Ah, so a male who identifies as female. Perfectly fine.

She held me by the head. It was soft, one hand on my mane and the other on my chin, and she turned me to look at her. Gently, an adjective you’d never think suited Rainbow Dash, but her voice matched it too. “It’s okay, Scoots. But we need to talk about this.”

The story is good and I enjoyed reading it. I did end up getting confused for a moment over the use of "hand" but other than that, well done

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Whoopsie, will edit that out. Cheers for the catch!

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Would you have preferred "Futaloo" instead?

Interesting so far, and it's nice there's the more emotion side of things as well as the smut.

That being said, I accept the 'nobody knows' as a necessary hand-wave, but all I can think with this premise is that they're all naked. Hard to hide things, y'know.

What's the bet that all her friends already know? Considering that Rainbow knew, I think it's quite likely.

Futaloo WITH what looks to be a well-paced interesting coming of age plot? Sign me up!

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Most cases a hermaphrodite character is female and just happens to have both sets of genitalia. They're typically female, but some 'male herms' exist. The feminine ones are not noticeably more masculine or androgynous generally. Male herms can be anything from hyper-masculine beefcakes to soft, cute, fembois who are likewise dual-equipped.

Basically, don't try and science it and use the above labeling criteria. If they look feminine/have breasts and have both sets they're a girl. If they look like a guy, even a girly guy, and have both - they're a guy. Beyond that, their personal identification is something you find out by reading, but generally it doesn't really change from what I've already said.

'Futa' or Futanari, is a more catchall term, however. That can apply to hermaphrodites as well as characters who are post-op transsexuals, as well as characters who have the opposite genitalia for their body naturally. Such as, in every way a female, but lacking a vagina and sporting a hardon. Likewise, the (pardon) cuntbois, are the reverse of this and a fairly popular subset of fetish fuel. These all fall under Futanari, which is originally a Japanese term but became sort of general license.

Hopefully this was educational!

A great start so far. Their are a few points when the narrative switches from 1st person to 3rd person and back again, but other than that. Good job.

I am disappoint, Intricate. You switched into third-person a couple times in this - in particular...

It was difficult to hear something like that from Rainbow. On one hoof, she accepted her. She didn’t reject her or call her a freak. She was trying to make her feel better, convince her that she was great no matter what, but on the other…

“Whoa, hold on.” Rainbow was suddenly looking at her with severity, as if she had just caught whiff of terrible news. “Don’t tell me you’ve never…”

I didn't notice these in your other stories, so either you forwent the usual editor, or are actually multiple writers on one account. Or maybe the comments pointed out errors on the others before I read them.

I could feel the apprehension grabbing at me, mixing with the arousal that I tried to force from my mind until I was disoriented and fearful all at once. “No,” I replied, trying to force myself off of her, but she kept me from moving too far. “No, we can’t. It’s too weird. I can’t talk to you about it.”

“Why can’t you?” Rainbow smiled, softly stroking her mane, something she’d associated with the strongest reassurance ever since Rainbow had helped her through her camping night terrors years before. “You can always talk to me about anything, champ. Always.”

“Even if it’s something that makes you weird and confused and seriously uncool?” I had tears in my eyes, I could feel it, I could see the way they obscured my vision. Rainbow didn’t seem deterred. I tried and failed to blink them away.

I think you meant to use first person there.

Every meeting I’d ever had with Rainbow flashed through my mind. All the effort I’d made to keep myself concealed, the constant checking to make sure I wasn’t sitting of moving in any way that would allow me to expose myself… “How? Did my parents tell you?” The idea felt like a betrayal, almost, but she found it hard to even imagine that was the case.

Same here.

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Cheers a bunch for the catches! I'm not entirely sure why, but I've been making this mistake recently—it's a new quirk. I think it might have something to do with the fact that I'm constantly switching between writing first, second, and third person limited stories in the same writing sessions (for example, this chapter was one of the results of my seventeen thousand word writing binge yesterday), but no, this doesn't make me 'multiple writers', or whatever else. I'll fix these, and try to make an effort not to do this again, as it's quickly becoming the most irritating mistake I make just on account of how basic it is.

I hope this ends in an orgy.

This chapter was cute, awesome and sexy. A+ I loved it. I kinda jealous of Scootaloo now.
I also have to say that this was very in character for both Scootaloo and Rainbow Dash. Scoots is sensitive to things she might make look less cool and Rainbow is a mare of actions. And actions speak louder then words

Kinda impressed with the level of depth you chose to put into this, but that's probably good as the character driven issues carry most of the story. As for the sex, I think the prose holds its own but conceptually it's not that ambitious. A hoofjob itself isn't the kinkiest of things, but it works narratively, because Dash giving Scoots a full on blowjob right off when Scoots is clearly not comfortable or experienced yet would be too much. Testing the waters like Dash does, then teasing and encouraging a little makes the most sense, and helps to convey that sorta big sister connection they have. And the little bit of oral thrown in feels balanced to me. But that all comes at the cost of some greater kink so it's a tradeoff.

On the kink upside, I really enjoyed the emphasis on size. Hung futaloo is a hot concept, and when combined with shyness and esteem issues about her dick, it's really appealing. I'm a fan of that combo. I also really enjoy her high libido and how she has latent feelings which Dash responds to a bit.

Overall to a guy like me, the first chapter reads pretty safe and I think most of the kink here is overly reliant on the futa element. As a futa fan, futa of course counts as a positive, but the sex doesn't really stand out or come off as anything but vanilla beyond that. The story focus is neat too but the angle chosen is something we see with a lot of futafics so I was pretty ready for the usual story beats there. It's not a downside since it's common for a reason, but again, it makes it feel safe and not that ambitious.