OK that scene of twi teaching dawn to use her hooves was kind of really uncomfortable for me cause twi basically controlled her and had now idea she was doing it it was uncomfortable and disturbing but also oddly arousing in a way

also could you tell me what that story is were dash and twilight fuse cause i swear i read a story like that years ago back in 2012 it was one of the first stories on fimfiction as a brony and fanfiction in general that i ever read i don't rember the name but i rember scenes from the story

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I think you mean this.

Twilight chuckled, relaxing more from her adrenaline filled moment before as the stallion turned to walk away and disappear into the shadow of a nearby cabinet. "Yeah. I'm technically a doctor but I don't have a license so am just a medic."

i predict twi and dawn are going to bang at some point

"Y-yes m-Twilight." Dawn nodded happily,

What was that ‘m’ word?!?! Because the first thing that popped into my head was ‘mistress’, and reading the rest of the chapter, and looking at the story tags has not changed that opinion.

Twilight needs to chill.

"We're going to learn some changeling things." "... We're totally going to lazy about for a few hours, aren't we?" "Yep!"

Sub Chryssie is adorable.

Maybe this dimension's Celestia and Luna are hippies?

'Dawn chuckled, He enjoys it since he' - Dawn chuckled, "He enjoys it since he

'What you reading' - What are you reading

'dawn said' - Dawn

'could also improves the' - improve

'conceptual idea from based on back home' - remove based on

'Twilight yelled falling back in her seat as the pony formed and rolled coming up as the room filled' - Twilight yelled, falling back off her seat as the pony formed and rolling back up

'She stood on her back lets' - legs

'was aimed at the sudden pony that appeared' - was aimed at the suddenly appeared pony

'dealing with for a several years' - remove a

'there was enchantments in it' - there were enchantments in it

'get sole good practice' - some

Sawn is tough she doesn't flinch with violet.

And plot thinkers and being on Discord with Scotch not surprised by Twilight's actions at al

The story was good up untill all the sex stuff came up. I understand that this supposed to be a more mature story then the rest of the series, but the blatant sexual references is kinda jaring for a series that has focused mostly on twilights no bullshit attitude.

Don't get me wrong it's funny to see commander Twi crack a few sex jokes here and there but it's really in your face in this chapter and is starting to come of as 'less mature' storie and more clop side story of the main storyline.

Gonna go on to the next chapter. It's fine to have sex and stuff in a story, sometimes it makes character feel more real. But I hope this doesn't turn into Twi banging around like a horny teenager.

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I will admit, the first part does focus a tad heavier on Twilight's sexual side as its a part of her that hasnt ever been explored in fics.

However its just a couple chapters it's mentioned and mostly its other aspects of her.

As i said in the description i havent written anything like this before so it probabay will fall a bit into that shoehorned in parts as its outisde my usual subject matter.

Please bear with it as it thins out after a bit.

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It's not bad that this is in the story it's just kinda jaring to go from the more pg-13 story's to in the second chapter talking about subs and Dom's.

it just feels like the whole chapter should be later in the story after the characters have spent a little more time together and know each other a little better and get more used to the idea of a more mature dialouge between characters.

I'm sorry if I come off assish and ignorant but I do try to be honest when I comment on a story. These in the end are just my opinion and it's your series to do with it as you please. This isn't any major thing that would cause me to stop reading the story,I love this series to much to hate it

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Yeah, may hve jumped the gun a bit but it was more to show Twilight is rather open about things like sex and the like.

I sort of expected it t be a tad jarring as it defiently is outside the norm of the series.

Though i do hope you are enjoying learning something more about our favorite military maniac even if jarring.

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It's always nice to learn about a character you like twilight is a powerful character in this series and it's nice to see her in more normal settings sometimes.

As always it was nice hearing back from you on the story. Have a good night (or day).

did twi just involuntarily hypnotize dawn
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master as she wouldn’t call a stallion mistress

"Oh right, your version is a great deal more conveniently cast..."

still looking at the writers

Though I will admit I love you jab/make fun of yourselves.

Twilight is not excersising she has robot legs!!
Running is useless for her.

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Her legs are machines but the rest of Her body isn't such as her heart l, shoulders, hips and areas the augs connects to so Cardio is still something to work on.

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Twilight is a mare so mistress would work

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It seems so, though from her own explanation it seems the inroads have already been made, and well in advance. It seems she's already fairly used to being under hypnotic suggestion, if her reactions are any indication.

Still, there's something seriously wrong with this Equestria (though... that's a given, considering it's one of the CTS stories worth telling... ;P), but also with Dawn in particular. It's like she's a cross between Twilight's (early) social ineptitude and Fluttershy's lack of spine, but I sense there's more to that... To be perfectly honest, she feels as though she's being intentionally suppressed.

Also, it's funny that I haven't mentioned this before... The 3 Crusaders? :D Really?

Any relation to MAGI?

Dawn nodded, "In addition to the density of our mass, things like that. I've tried flapping my wings, but I get startled after my hooves leave the ground..."

Ok this is something I been meaning to ask, how does Twilight fly? Because she is 600 pounds and has steel limbs, it should be impossible.
And as for the answer being "magic," hasn't it been confirmed the limbs no longer have magic because it's not part of her body although some how she can feel through them? But yet can't pick things up without her fingers? So doesn't that mean Twilight's wings can lift over 600 pounds? That must mean the wings on Twilight must be extremely sturdy and can probably even kill a pony who gets to close to the wings when they spring into action without even trying, atleast Twilight won't have to worry about losing her 2 remaining limbs in battle as it seems it's probably impossible to tear off.

Twilight took a seat. "Yeah, she is very well trained, and it's fun leading in her through her hive gagged, blindfolded and on a lead. She is fully aware of how many drones see their mighty queen being an obedient pet for me." She smirked.

I don't even know how we even go to his point, it all started with a mention of a kiss and this is what it lead to.

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To answer your first question, her limbs are magic now and a natural part of her body, it's why she can feel through them, the reason she still uses fingers is because that was part of the cybernetics before the change so the fingers remained as all the alicorn ascension did was make her limbs natural part of her rather then an addition.

So she still has fingers but the answer is magic.

Second point, because I wanted to explore other aspects of CTS and might habe had a tad too much excitement for it plus it fitting the character to chat about things outside of official settings if the other person wants too.