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You know, I've been thinking, as we've gone through page after page together. I may never know who you are or what you look like, even if I have been able to catch glimpses of the kind of person you are in the way you've handled this book. But you've gotten to know a lot about me. Even then, you don't know what I look like. I mean, you know what the book looks like, but that's not exactly the same thing, is it? What I mean is, when I was a pony, I had a face, a mane, a tail, a whole body wrapped around these words and thoughts that I'm left with now. I had eyes to see with, a mouth to speak with. I was whole. I was free.
If you want... maybe I can show you what I looked like?
I haven't tried to do this before, never for anyone else in the past. No one has really cared enough to read this far anyway. So, for you, maybe I can give it a shot. If I try really hard, focus...
If I...
If I try hard enough...
...maybe...
Please, just a little...
Why....is...
...I can...
...m...be...I....c....n....
No. I'm sorry.
I can't do it.
Making cute little walking ponies, making little singing birds, that's all easy. But I'm quickly realizing that... I don't even fully remember what I look like anymore. It's been too long, and the memory is a wash of black smoke, streaking ink, spatters of red. And remembering what happened is so painful still, even now. I may be in this book, but I can still feel, I'm still alive, and I can still feel all that anger and hurt and hatred from back then. Even trying to imagine myself as I was makes me remember that I'm stuck here forever. That this is was a curse I never deserved.
...
Not that I'm upset to be in your book!
Oh no, I'm sorry. I'm so so sorry. I shouldn't have tried to do that in the first place, it was a mistake. Forget I said anything, please forgive me. I didn't mean to upset you. Please, please forgive me. I'm grateful you're here, and I like trying to entertain you, I can certainly promise you that. Let's get back to the fun, that's what you and I are all about, right? We're just here to have fun, with me amusing you, and you reading along as I do.
There's no need to stop reading. Right?
Besides, I know we'll get to know each other even better in time. There's no need to rush things.
I can wait.
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I'm only kidding, though, I'm really loving this. I was just checking to see if there was a hidden message in the file names.
The second failed attempt at showing what she looks like actually succeeded, but she's hiding the result.
The first and second links are broken, unless you intended them to be! In which case huh that is neat.
Otherwise, I'm loving this visual element.
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wait, the second th? It only gives me the broken image icon
YU CAN DO EET
BEAT THE SYSTEM
The first and second links are broken in here, so I can't see those images. The image of a melting pony is quite nice, though.
Also, something I've noticed: when doing stories like this, that tend not to have a particularly pony presence because of how they're presented, dropping things like 'person' and other terms that don't feel strongly pony to replace them with stronger pony-equivalents and idiosyncrasies really helps with immersion. I really hope you write more things like this, because any stories like this are pretty great to see on the site because of how rare they are.
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Yes, the "broken" images are supposed to be there. They're actually not broken, they're images of the broken image symbol. :)
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C L E V E R
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I could tell that you wanted that image, but TBH it kind of breaks immersion for me... (And it looks like it does for others.) Why would a pony trapped inside a book know the broken-image symbol from the human internet? Alternately, why would the magical construct that's "powering" her know to put that symbol on the page when she can't conjure up a specific image? In-context I would have expected vague, messy scribbles or hazy ink blotches or something like that, you know?
Unless we're getting really meta later and this is just the first hint of it...
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How do you find the second one? I’m stuck on that one.
Failed image pictures? Very clever. Very interesting. There seem to be a lot of anachronisms in this book. It makes me wonder just how meta we're gonna get.
well, you tried. that's gotta count for something.