Lol

But if I had to guess it's probably going to be like the grilled cheese situation

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Bro you traumatized everyone

Will Sweetie Belle be doused with cold water in every chapter? Because it seems pretty effective

Wow, you go all out with the descriptions eh?

I give at the second chapter three stars ⭐⭐⭐

An entertaining chapter

There are so many good ways for this story to eventually end.
None of them involve Sweetie getting what she wants, of course.

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Gotta commit to the bit. Part of me wants to prove that I have the chops to write actual clop, even if I choose to write sexual comedy instead.

Although I'm not entirely sure if that's true. I went into Sibling Supremacy Sword Fight trying to write an actual clop fic for a contest, but somewhere along the way I got distracted by a silly idea and it just derailed into sexual comedy instead. It's not my fault that most porn is inherently ridiculous.

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People are downvoting based on the title alone without even reading the story. This is funny as hell, maybe a little out of character for Sweetie Belle but I believe that's half the point.

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maybe a little out of character for Sweetie Belle but I believe that's half the point.

Oh, definitely. This takes place in a satirical version of the universe where these kind of "fillies banging their human foalsitters" stories occur. It's absolutely the wrong place to be looking for ponies to be "in character".

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Though I also missed it the first time around and downvoted, I did later see the joke they were trying to make. It's just that the sentence structure and spacing is a little messy which makes it hard to spot. It just comes off as a bit confusing and incoherent. Like maybe an English as second language problem? Could do with a paragraph break between the setup and the payoff. It's also sadly undercut by the fact that Opal is Rarity's cat, not Sweetie's.

Gonna leave the downvote in place though, cause it's just generally kind of a mess.

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This story is far more downvoted than any of the fics it parodies. I think it's the foalcon types who are primarily downvoting. In my experience arguing with lolicons, people get really offended when you even imply they're pedophiles, especially when it's true.

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um....what?

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True

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>people get really offended when you even imply they're pedophiles
Yeah, that uh...that tends to happen

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I take it most people stopped reading after the first sentence. That or the difficult to read English made the joke fall flat. Maybe some combination of the two.

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It's generally not a good idea to imply people are criminals simply because they have differing tastes.

Imply to a brony that they're actually just a filthy zoophile who wants to go and rape animals because they like MLP, and you'd probably get a similar reaction.

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This is most downvoted comment, that have the most replies, that I have ever seen.

And it is shitpost using double meaning of cat and rooster.

I'm not even mad

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Idk, I like foalcon/lolicon stuff and think this is a pretty funny parody lol

And yeah, it’s always annoying when someone conflates fiction with actual crimes (or disorder? depends on how you’re using the term, really); nothing new there o.O

Not anymore or less frustrating then the whole “violent video games” thing

The fact that this manages to be just on the edge of what it implies makes it that much better. This is one hell of a parody.

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And was there a joke in that comment or something? I didn't understand it.

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Yeah, that's always going to be the mystery here. Are the downvotes primarily from the people hating anything that looks like foalcon on sight, or from the folks who like it and are taking the ribbing a bit too personally.

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Yeah, I don't even really have an issue with people who like that genre. Fiction is fiction. Liking a story doesn't make someone a pedophile. But the characters IN said stories, at least of this foalsitter sub-genre, absolutely are. And the premises are often pretty damn ridiculous.

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Take your meds immediately.

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Are the downvotes primarily from the people hating anything that looks like foalcon on sight, or from the folks who like it and are taking the ribbing a bit too personally.

Why not both? Cause people on this site are just that petty.

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holy SHIT i just realised what this comment meant. never judge a book by its first two sectences guys.☠

This is hysterical; Keep up the good work.

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Re-Read what he wrote

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This comment is unhinged and awkwardly worded/formatted just enough to blind side most people into missing your joke. A genuine 10/10 bait, impressive.

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Put the story into another group now that its hit 100+ likes. Congrats on your 'worst story ever'.

"Right." She slowly turned around, straddling her legs over his waist and stomach and spreading her stance slightly to give a clear view of her troubles. "I mean, even just sitting here in the shade, look how sweaty I am? I'm positively dripping ." She gently waved her tail back and forth, gently fanning the scent of her arousal towards his head.

The funny thing to this is, her doing this only amounts to 'horse-like creature smells of horse-like creature' to a human.
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Ah, a slip-n-slide! I was never good at those. Maybe I'm just too slow.

Also wanted to comment that Sweetie Belle pic you used for the cover art is absolutely perfect.

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Yeah, picking the cover art is always tricky. I have zero artistic talent of that variety, so it usually means trying to dig up some fan art that works, linking to it appropriately and asking the artist if they're okay with it and hoping they ever respond. It's always nice when you come across an actual show screencap that works perfectly.

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sadly therapy won't stop folks from missing the joke. but it's fine folks are allowed to have their opinions. thanks for the concern tho.

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wasn't aware the community was that young they didn't understand what a feline(pussy) or rooster(cock) was.
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sorry I don't know who that is.
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I'm old so my humor doesn't always click with the younger crowd but it's all good.

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lol nah won't be anything other then a pile of mush and liquids by the of comments I've seen if they are all as bad as folks are making it to be.

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sadly no but it's fine I am not worried.

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no just made a joke that folks clearly didn't get. wish they would of been nicer to the writer of this story and sent their complaints to me in personal/private messages rather then flooding the comment section with nagging about my comment rather then the story it's self.
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sadly not the first time something I wrote got taken wrong but that was usually a one on one text deal not something like this. live and learn i guess.

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it could also be that i am horrible with the english language (structure, punctuations, and grammar) the basic joke was playing with a rooster and feline totally wholsome thing but worded to sound dirty.

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lol love that joke

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sadly, seems so many can't take a joke but it's fine if I can make them feel like they've made a differance and did something positive or to even vent their anger then it's all good.

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seems so. bet they'd hate to see the pic I drew years ago of that. AJ was hearing it out her window.

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Sadly no I am american so yeah english is my first language. as for the rest yeah I am a horrible writer which is why I only read them not write. the last grade I passed english was 3rd from then on no teachers cared to teach and was passed all way thru high school with strait F's. hell I learned what verb meant from commercials as a kid (an action). also no idea what time i wrote the comment so could of been very intoxocated. if it was between 4-6am then that could be it too. and the down vote is fine I am not hurt by any of them people are allowed their opinions.

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guess even sponge bob characters don't get jokes but it's fine I do agree pedo's deserve much worse.

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It's a joke about playing with roosters and felines but worded to sound dirty.

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I am assuming it's both. depending on what time I wrote it I was probably intoxicated so add that to my already horrible grammer, punctuations, and structure of sentances yeah you have a set for thing to go wrong..

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yeah pretty sure many missed the joke but it is what it is.

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yes it was a joke about playing with felines and roosters but worded to sound dirty .

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sadly insulin won't fix my humor. but it's fine most seemed to not get the joke of felines(pussy) and rooster(cock) so thats something I can not fix just gotta move on.

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lol yeah it's a totaly sweet thing meant to sound so wrong and dirty. tho knowing how to write could of made it better.

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yeah I worded to sound so wrong despite being not. but it's fine if folks hate it they hate it.
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ok so what should I write? up until I think a week ago maybe a month at most I had no followers so why write a blog? and I am not a writer (hence no followers) so what should I write? please enlighten me into what I should do to not make my account seem like a troll one because I thought all the stories I ahve read and commented on for the past deacde would of shown that. but please since you think I am a troll tell me how to fix this with no writing talent and nothing to blog what should I post?

and with those out of the way please feel free to send me a personal/private (what ever this site call it) message and please stop flooding this writers page with comments NOT associated to their story. I will respond to every message sent via the method this site has I just rather we leave here to folks talking about the story. thank you and my apolgize to anyone who missed the joke and thank you to those that got it nad liked

I was laughing so much with this chapter. sadly for poor sweetie unless she decides to play some kind of daring do roleplay or any other that allows her to tie up anon that filly is gonna have to ride out her heat without getting anon's pecker. I do have one question about sweetie's outfit tho. who made it and have we checked their belongs for anything we may need to let those in charge know of because yeah how did she get that. I am sure it's cute and all but in the 20 years I've seen art online I have never once seen that outfit mean actual maid.

and also props to anon for either not even noticing or slyly not letting on he saw her winking in his face. honestly if I was in his place I'd at least would of asked what was wrong with her seeing that put in my face

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Wow.

I was not expecting that.

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Nothing says clop can't be comedic. In fact, some of the best absolutely are!

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Salutes to you soldier, pulling up with the most out of pocket joke and successfully fooling most of the ill informed people, then pulling up and proving them wrong, absolute madlad

Well now she's positively drenched!

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This entire site is the wrong place to be looking for any of them to be “in character” in my honest opinion. It’s fanfiction for a reason.