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i missed this
9944600 Well, I'm glad to have brought something you like back to life.
Great job once again.
<-understatement of the fluffing millenia at this case I'd say... And I'm loving it.
I don’t know if you have already been told this author but the 3 lowest spots in the feature list is for updated featured stories. If a story has been featured once it will show up in the bottom 3 automatically every time a new chapter is released as a sort of heads up.
9944626 I am aware, the last few featured notices on the story's description were from when I did not. Also, nice profile pic, 'tis good to see someone else who remembers Karl. Did I ever mention I have a pending story for him?
9944614 Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter.
9944666 I can honestly agree with you on all those points, as I thought the same thing during the hiatus this story recently went through. It's the main reason why I'm thinking of rewriting some of the earlier chapters.
Seeing Suki finally getting some payback was more than worth the wait.
9944696 Glad to hear it!
Yay! Suki owned that stupid, cunt and a half of a cow!
Oh no Twilight, this works in a different way , you can only become/be an ally if Storm Queen wants it
9944763 I will admit the first crossover leaves much to be desired, but I assure you, it gets better as you go along.
Glad to see some comeuppance towards the minotaur princess brat, though I have suspicions that the Minotaur lands will end up torched to the last bull and cow if they keep that shit up.
As for comments on this chapter?
It's your.
This said, Lucette is leaning too heavily onto the
pansiesponies who have different views on bullying if we go with that Babs Seed crap. Fear can be a powerful motivator to try and defeat the source of fear - they're a prey species after all. Even if the main cast is not the one plotting, there will be parallel forces within Equestria that will try their hooves into making counters to Lucette and her kingdom.With this said, it is good to see your work, here again, Timeless.
I'd personally suggest leaving the original chapters that you want to rewrite in gdocs or akin, while leaving the rewritten versions onsite with links to the originals in case one wishes to see the difference. It also serves the purpose of working as a backup.
Have a good day, and until next time!
I am almost expecting suki to become either a hallow or an iron lord esc Guardian.
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Sorry, the site doesn't show notifications for comments on a story you're currently reading, so I didn't notice this. I forget, but I distinctly remember Starlight getting shoved off to the side during that chapter, as well as Shining to a lesser degree but still notable in his absence. The same complaints I had for the previous chapter carried over even with the characters you kept up on.
Though, I'll bring up another complaint now, one for the speed at which Lucette got used to ruling. Ruling is different from military work, there's a lot too it that take years to understand. Anybody can learn politics, and in America should partake in it. But a monarchy is much different from a federalist republic(We aren't fully democratic due to how the forefathers wanted to avoid mob rule and abuse. People may say our current government isn't fair to the little guy, but the mob would rule in a purely democratic system)
Whatever, off topic. Point is I feel she became too good a leader too quickly.
9947008 I can also agree with those points. I cannot tell you how much I now lament how fast I took things in the beginning, and, as such, there will be rewrites of most early chapters. Also, FTR, thank you for the suggestion on that note, I may just do that.
Well after binging this story let’s just say that I’m marking this story to read any updates and I’m still waiting for the smut though I understand if it takes more of a while just as long it happens soon-ish.
This is a little shameless as far as genre fics go, not even attempting to describe the character at all and relying on mostly broken links is some lame shit, lemme tell you.
9952647 I'm sorry? I don't follow.
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The first chapter. This paragraph in specific.
"But back to the matter at hand. Right now I was walking up the driveway through the front lawn in my custom costume. It was a mix of my two favorite games in the whole world, Dark Souls and Destiny. I was wearing the Gensym Knight Cloak, the Crown of the Dark Sun serving as my mask, along with the Iron Truage Grips and Boots which covered my legs and arms, both colored purple with gold engravings, my chestpiece, the Floating Vest, colored similarly, only with a distinct symbol on it no Souls fan could ever forget, the Crest of the Warriors of Sunlight. Along with those came my favorite weapons, the infamous Hand Cannon Crimson, with the Silver Bullet ornament, and the iconic Moonlight Greatsword, complete with the Crystal Chime."
Alot of the links are broken, and you rely entirely on outside knowledge to fill in the gaps that your completely absent description leaves behind.
9952708 Ah, that. The links were made ages ago at the request of some readers, so I suppose it makes sense they'd break. Before that, there was a description. I'll work on fixing this when I have the time, I assure you.
9952709
Uh where though?
These are all the paragraphs in the story before that one.
There isnt a single line of description in the entire first chapter that does not rely wholly on links and outside knowledge of referanced material.
Something that wouldnt be so bad if you were referancing something truly iconic like the buster sword, or the master sword. No, your describing nearly a dozen different random objects from a game and relying entirely on me having played the game, and played it long enough to have gotten every single one of those items. Which is... oof, not the best idea. I could even pinpoint the exact sentance where my eyes glossed over and I knew this was a story designed solely for diehard destiny fans.
9952736 That would be because, like an idiot, I deleted the old descriptions in lieu of the links. However, I just changed it back to descriptions, so hopefully that helps. I'll try finding better links later on tonight when I get more time.
I can also tell you this story was not meant for diehard fans. I had intended it to be something anyone not familiar with the two franchises could read, though, as seems to be the case the past few days, I'm realizing more and more that I did not do well enough.
Rest assured, I am going to fix this.
I'm proud of Suki & how badass she was in her fight against Golden Axe. Also, will there be any clop scenes in the future?
9972288 Eventually, yes.
Love the story just finished it in two day
Good to see another chapter in this fine story, keep up the good work. Nice job Suki you did good kid.
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And in almost every practical application it fails spectacularly.
It's like ITF TKD they teach responses to situations but do not test them with resistance, and in Systema especially, they do all kinds of absurd situations that never actually work out.
Not only that, but the entire system is based off of the concept of explosive motion. You know the problem with that? Constant application leads to a soft style that can't properly apply itself.
Techniques in systema try to supply explosive motion to everything, leading to most strikes having extremely little power due to a lack of buildup.
And even when they try to integrate moves form to her styles, somehow it becomes soft as well.
Systema cannot be used to defend onself, much less be 'debilitating' in any sense of the word. For Christ's sake, the techniques used are literally soft-strike or swift strike. Even if we say that Systema is somewhat usable, which it is not, you'd have to realize that systema is in itself limited by its own complexity.
No one is going to pull of a twenty one move combo, fighting against fifty people. That doesn't happen.
In other words.
You might as well have taught them Akido.
When will you update, pls say soon I'm going crazy for waiting.
10092276 As soon as I can manage. Work hasn't been kind.
Heyo, everyone! So, I added a definitive edit to one of the chapters - as shown on chapter 3's new title - and have begun the more major edits to the beginning chapters of the story. From here on out, though, I've decided that instead of doing rewrites, (at least for most of them) I will be adding the meat and bones that the story needed via half or partial chapters, signified via the .5 or .6 or . anything chapters. This, however, does not necessarily mean they will be shorter than other chapters. In fact, they may just be larger.
Regardless, the story is undergoing change, what with my sudden spike of a free work schedule. I'm sure you all can guess why. I hope the changes turn out to your liking, everyone.
Thanks for reading!
-Timeless Lord Slayer
10049387 To each their own, my friend. Though I do appreciate the critique.
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I suppose,but, just saying, to this day the only positive and successful application of Systema is through DanTheWolfman, and he had to evolve and combine it with jiu Jitsu and a few other things.
Edit : Also, apologies on the initial harshness, I recalled the time a friend of mine got his ass beat because he was convinced his 'system' would work.
As you can imagine from my apprehension, it failed spectacularly.
10139936 It's quite alright. I understand.
I need a good lesbian displaced fic got everything to recommend?
10201951 Well, Lucy is bi, though sadly I've yet to write a chapter where she goes to town on another woman.