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Awesome. Is it bad that I want Celestia to do something like that with the Day Guard? And to see something happen to Sunburst. Like Starlight goes and pays him a visit with Tixie as well. :P
Any way, great job with the corruption. I love it.
Nice.
This is an interesting chapter and it's interesting to see that Luna does not know the real origins of the curse. I suspect that Sunset is closer to truth from what she has seen in Trixie's memories.
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Not sure I understand. Do you mean she corrupts the Day Guard like this group of already-infected bat-ponies is corrupting the Night Guard?
Hmmm... that sounds like an excellent candidate for a bad end scene. Maybe I'll do it as a bonus chapter eventually!
Thanks! Corruption is always a popular theme.
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Guess that's one word for it!
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She is, but she doesn't have the all answers either right now. They'll figure it out later. Afterwards, I should say. I won't let this story end without explaining where the curse came from and how it actually worked.
"Thestralslovakia" has no right to work as well as it does. (Though it does raise the question of a Thest Republic... and I'm definitely overthinking this.)
Some things transcend dimensions.
I'm going to assume you mean those priestesses have long horns and not the other option.
... It appears I was wrong in that assumption. Isn't vague sentence structure fun?
Looking forward to what are sure to be some epic clashes.
You're welcome! Sometimes it takes more than one try to make an OC work. I couldn't make her work in Foolers Rush In, but I'm confident I'll make her work in this. Like my OC, I am not a saint but a sinner who keeps on trying.
Higher on the list was getting high off his ass on mangos and fucking an earth pony in a tree just like his cousin back home had.
Examining these paragraphs critically — they are indeed hot but that's not what's on my mind — you can really really tell where my narrative voice comes from. My God, it's like I'm looking in a mirror. It took reading a ton of someone else's work for me to really see the way we move in close to strike at the onset, then follow up by backing off and launching a salvo of lore at the reader from an omniscient narrator. My study of Clopficsinthecomment's limited narrator notwithstanding, I still view this technique as superior due to the natural wave-like cadence it produces over the course of a chapter, the heights of sexual stimulation contrasted by ebbs of deep, immersive narration from the perspective of an all-knowing god.
Taking Cloppy's form into consideration, I now believe "harmonious form" is found in the crest being as tightly focused, deliberately executed, and limited in scope as possible until the wave collapses, leaving the omniscient one to build it again. The real question left hanging in the air after "Don't Feed The Bats" is how much attention can reasonably be given to the other party during a sex act. Cloppy seems to do okay sometimes looking into the innermost feelings of his sexual partners but even he has limits to looking into the other person.
Sorry, I'm thinking out loud here. I'm just a sinner and all that.
I made a mistake of not adding a suggestion to make this scene even hotter; having their vigorous licking and rubbing break open a lipid deposit in the wing itself with much stimulating fanfare and the two beginning to preen his hypersensitized wings with his own oil. You know the deposit birds gave beneath their wings? Bats keep their oil (fat) in the wing itself and in their muzzle. EEEEEEEeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!
Sweet, sweet detail at the end!
Spicy detail! UNF!
I'm going to have to use that one! I like it.
Here is one area you are clearly superior to Cloppy, God bless me boyo. You have the most complete suite of sexual adjectives in your toolbox that I've ever encountered and they really help keep your sex from becoming repetitive or grossing me the fuck out — the latter being a most vital component to any clopfic. And with every new scene you've written this year, it feels like your arsenal just keeps getting bigger and bigger. 2020 has been a great year for you, writing-wise if a shit year in all other aspects for everyone.
I'll never forget pitching this idea to you on Skype on the whole rite-of-passage bit for thestrals and the astonishing rate of colts who experiment with the gay. One of my prouder moments as a loresmith!
Ha! I love the reference to vanilla. I am to vanilla what Shakespearacles is to pineapple.
Between you and Cloppy, I will one day mainstream ear fetish and found the Aural Republic of Earesia of which I will rule as Earsayer. That is unless Cloppy straight-up jacks my title and claims it as his own. Me boyo writes some amazing ear scenes! I dunno what's worse, that a third of the website thinks I'm a nazi or that no one will ever talk about how good that ear scene was!
I've been to Wisconson many times. The cheese-thing isn't a meme. I went to a grocery store up there that has about 200-feet of shelf space dedicated to cheese wheels.
The idea of getting gayed up and sprouting a head of mare-mane is one of the hottest things I've ever seen written into any clopfic!
My motto and creed!
Cloppy got the kishka and you got the kielbasa! But watch out or somepony might end up stealing it!
I love that! Stealing it.
Say "no homo" before fucking your bro in the ass and all is forgiven, my son. 😇
When you still think you're at 3.6 roentgen but you're really at 15000.
I have just seen the core, Luna!
Someone send that mare to the infirmary, she's clearly confused! Or hungry. You aren't you when you're hungry, m'lady.
I already love this story's Luna. And I'm about to love her a whole lot more!
Things have gotten so bad, we're resorting to Yahweh?
Yes, that was mine. I added this, Fimfiction. Just like Putin said there's not such thing as an 'ex-KGB man' there is no such thing as an 'ex-WoW player'.
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Another addition of mine. In the AJA headcanon, the largest sets of aural receptors belong to Princess Luna, Roseluck, and a third mare I may write about someday but smells suspiciously of cotton candy.
God is not a man and nor is she a woman. She's a futanari!
I will say two things about this acolyte based on my understanding of this OC, the Acolyte is quite happy with her training and is in fact a very submissive male.
This OC promises many great things. I can't wait to read on!
OK, the first part felt like it was from a horror. Have you seen "The Return of The Living Dead"? Scary vibes like that. Not a bad thing, at all. Though shame there's no more Mare Thestrals.
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Night Guards vs Day Guards doesn't sounds like a bad idea. Would keep those two groups busy for some time.
And the new challenger approaches. With history with Delta Requirem. This is gonna be good. So far she's (and Luna) the only one without good tuck.
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That's okay. I overthink everything. That's how I come up with names like that!
Hey, I'm just glad somebody caught it!
I did, actually, but in fact, both are true!
Clarified in the text.
They're coming! But still some more epic sex to get through first.
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No, I haven't seen it, though I know of it. Horror's not usually my thing, though I agree this story probably does borrow certain tropes of it, if for a different purpose. If this sequence raised a few hairs on the back of your neck, that's actually fine with me. As for Mare Thestrals, there were a couple in the middle section who should figure somewhat prominently in the next chapter.
Their corruption might take different forms, but it certainly would! I'm sure a corrupted Celly would probably decide against making her guardsponies thestrals. She'd want something fire-related. Maybe Kirin?
You're right. Might have to see if I can fix that before all is said and done!
Shoot did Tempest Shadow (Fizzle Pop( show up at all or yet? Kinda wanna see her. Anyway keep on the roll, great chapter!
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Then consider this story your confessional! Say five Hail Mare-ys and write three more clopfics as penance!
You know, maybe we could do at least a loose reference to that cousin! And here's a concept--you've heard of zap apples? How about zap mangos?
As writers, *we* are the all-knowing god of our worlds, and that enables the voice to work. I told you this as recently as last night, but I truly believe that the immersive narration really makes the sex better. But the reverse is true as well, if it gets a reader more into the story and interested to know more.
Exactly. Maybe some authors can really make it work, but I just don't think page after page of nothing but sex--particularly the same sex redescribed--can carry a story or even a chapter. There are refractory periods in real life just like there are troughs between the crests of waves, so there should analogs for the reader as well. the closest I got to continuous sex was the final chapters of TLaTU-M, which were the most complex scenes I'd ever written, and yet, those weren't all one scene. they shifted around a lot, in terms of theme and perspective.
Me too. But for matters such as these, I'd rather be a sinner than a saint!
No problem--we can try to slip it in later!
It's the little touches that sell these scenes. It wouldn't have been as immersive if all I said was he was feeling pleasure without giving some indication as to how.
Thank you! Gods, I must have rewritten that paragraph a dozen times...
Feel free! I just liked the alliteration.
Thanks again! I pride myself on my vocabulary, which I can probably in turn thank my Mom for. As for 2020, we need to have something we can look back on fondly for this year. I'll supply what little I can, but past that, I'd like to flush these past twenty weeks down the toilet.
Your entire expansive thestral lore is just too good not to use. Thank god the show never explored bat-ponies, because I fear what they would have done to them.
What am I, then?
I sincerely doubt it's a third, but fuck them anyway. And I'll happily talk about it!
Never been, but I don't doubt it. Green Bay Packer fans had to be called cheeseheads for a reason.
That's the funny thing for me--I don't generally go for fembois or traps at all. But here? Bat-ponies just seem to make it work for me, somehow.
And the Prince's after this! I'd say poor Blueblood, but a) he earned it and b) he likes it. He just fell victim to another way the curse works, which will be explained at the end, and even afterwards...? Well, I said before it wouldn't be status quo for everypony, even if they get changed back.
Thanks for the sausage, there! Kielbasa is actually my standard sausage to eat.
Hey, I have shamelessly stolen plenty of concepts from you and others, so feel free to steal what you want back!
Those two magic words wash away all colt-cuddler sins!
Hey, at this point it's still not great, but not terrible.
Have a snickers. And how can she not be confused? There is nothing sane about what's happening there!
You're welcome!
Just for you, my friend!
Who can ever be prepared for... her?
A certain crazy lady who's hard to write sex scenes for given her dual personalitiy?
All shall love her and despair! No, check that--all shall love her and then share!
And if he wasn't, he soon will be!
Thanks! You'll have to wait a bit now, though--time for some new T&T chapters, then Firefly, then back to here!
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Sorry to disappoint, but this actually takes place before the MLP movie. Which is not to say she wasn't the hottest and best thing to come from the movie! Which is also not to say I don't have a cameo and movie reference planned later!
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Ah well!
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Maybe something fiery demon-like for (extra) diversity? Kirins are already in the story.
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I'm thinking now she'd go the Scootaloo route and infuse them all with Phoenix fire. That would make them deadly and able to regenerate from wounds.
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Ohh, fun. Scootaloo won't be the only one. But this brings a question- What about Philomena?
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Actually, I do know that one! Can't say that was intentional, but I'm glad it sparked memories of it all the same! They sure don't make cartoons like that any more. Pity.