• Member Since 12th Feb, 2012
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Bloodpool


I'm not much of a writer, but if you need information on the many weapons of war that humanity has fielded over the centuries, I'm the guy to ask.

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That's one way to vent anger. Brutal. :pinkiecrazy:

It will be interesting to see what drove the protagonist(?) into madness. I did see some errors however; mostly just missing spaces after a full stop. Those aside, I quite liked it.

"Nailing various animal carcasses to the walls of your shed, and attacking people with a rusty chainsaw."

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Yes, I loved it. I demand those expansive chapters this instant :yay:

Keep writing. I like a good disturbing story every now and then. :pinkiecrazy:

1197134>>1196451>>1194651>>1192472>>1192382 Thanks for all the support. I'm certianly going to expand this story for you people, but I must make a few things clear before we continue: I'm not going to explain how the protagonist ended up in equestria. In effect, I'm going to "skip" a year or so ahead after the protagonist's arrival, meaning that I won't have to spend time slowly building up the relations between characters, because this isn't that kind of story. Secondly, there may or may not be romance involved. I haven't decided yet. :twilightsheepish:

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I'm fine with skipping the how he arrived there, I more want to know how he lost his mind.

1201881 Eh, I haven't decided if I'm going to include romance in the story. I probably won't, but we'll see.

Sweet, I can't wait to see where your story takes us!

I think I would like to see those stories you write randomly. It sounds fun to read if it's dark like this Fanfic!

1219537 I do have something in the works: It's a SCP-themed fic, if you know what that is. If you don't here's the link to the website of the Foundation.

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There's already a few SCP MLP out there.

I am curious how you will write it, SCPs is fun and creepy!

Next chapter is up, and yes, I know it's a little short, but I didn't want to bore people with long chapters where nothing much realy happens. I apologise if you find this chapter partictulary boring, but it's nessercary to the plot that I have in my head. The realy important chapters will hopefuly be longer. I expect that this story will extend to five chapters, possibly six.

1226224 Eh, I think I can do better than that.

By the way... Nobody steal my brilliant idea!
Or I'll eat your face! :twilightsmile:

Sweet, the events leading up to the horrors beyond is staring to be revealed now!


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Better? Oh, that makes me even more excited for what you will turn out! :pinkiehappy:

Spotted a few little things:

What just happened is proof of that You smile politely, and continue on your way.

Missing full stop?

Could you let me up?Please?

Missing space.

An Iron clang sounds in your ears, your vision begins to blur,

Shouldn't be capital.

I'd also recommend starting a new line after each bit of dialogue. It can get pretty messy when there are more speakers/longer conversations.

Those aside, good job. I'm looking forward to more.

1232666 Thanks, the story was written on an IPod touch, so it's harder to spot mistakes like that, and there's only a basic autocorrect feature. I'll correct them when I get the chance to get on my desktop computer or laptop.

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That's pretty damn good for being written on a mobile device.

Temporary insanity and amnesia for power, wealth and or fame? It is a tough one.

as thousansmds of unseen hands clap enthusiastically.

1268523 Oh bloody hell. I hate my iPod. :twilightangry2: I'll correct it anyway, thanks.

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I'm still amazed that you managed to write that on an iPod.

1270469 I'll tell you how: Magic *Snort Snort* :rainbowlaugh:

More. That is all I have to say.

1288269 I will update soon-ish. I am currently working on a collab with several other authors, but I should be able to write a chapter up in my spare time.

he should've raped them first

1327395 Oh-kay... Um... I'm not really into writing about that sort of thing, but if that's what you're looking for in a story, check this one out. It's written by a good friend of mine, and it's nice and gory, with some more... extreme sexual scenes.

Brutal. I like it.

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