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I dont care to do authors notes so im gonna keep it short. I wrote this story because it felt right and i knew it wouldnt take long. That was not the case, i had had it written down for at least a week and a half before i put one word online. I dont know why but i can get into sad stories more that anything so i decided to make this. Yes, for all of you ramatical scholors out their there are a TON of them in here. Mostly becasue im typing. This on my motorola phone. I would much appreciate it if yu can add a like or dislike to the story and comments about what i did wrong and what i did right. I have 1 sad/adventure story, 1 clopfic and 1adventure story all in the process of being wriiten. If you liked this one hope you can like my next ones. If not im sorry and my bad
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Left my advice already on the other chapter. It should help you with the "Show, don't Tell" problem and making your characters deeper.
925733>>925975 thanx for the critisism guys. I know there is little detail and TONS of grammer errors and I will use the critisism in my next story.
Thanx for readin'
Read "Cabbage Cart"
Istantly thought "NO! NOT MY CABBAGES!!!"
927284 ha so true
All the grammar stuff has been covered, so I'll get straight to the point.
Story was fine, nice idea, needs some work. Take your time, no one is rushing you to get any story out by a deadline, mkay? However, as long as you enjoy how you're doing it, keep on going! My first rule of writing: write your heart.
Also, Y U CALL YOUR CHARACTER STARLIGHT TOO?!
Now I feel embarrassed... :/
972013 thanx and i no. Everything that has been said is true. I like writing, its just i can get bored with ideas really fast. Anyhoof, thanx for the critisizm and my next story has ALOT more detail then all of the other ones
thanx for readin
1014534 thanx for the help.
i will try to make it better, but right now i am currently working on a better story and its almost 2 in the buckin morning.
im bucking insane
P.s. thanx for da fav. It twas unexpected