Currently you have Rarity, Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy, Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Scootaloo, Sweetie Belle, Apple Bloom, Trixie and now Zecora after Spike and Dusk. Now if you were to have proper time to get each girl to have a relationship and sex or what-have-you, then you'd have literally 10 chapters (one for each girl) or 4-6 depending on pairs, trios and solos.
Then you also have anyone else afterwards who might want a piece of those two.
Oh and also unseen but totally there Chrysalis. This story doesn't need any more conflict, even if it was just the CMC trying to get just Spike and not anyone else.
Stop bringing in new characters, you are already diluting to others too much.
Your question is as good as mine, but here's the 'unofficial' official definition of it from Google:
"Q.E.D." (sometimes written "QED") is an abbreviation for the Latin phrase "quod erat demonstrandum" ("that which was to be demonstrated"), a notation which is often placed at the end of a mathematical proof to indicate its completion.
I guess in layman terms, it means this is how Dusk and Spike adapt to this sudden issue that showed up from the previous chapter.
Caution: this comment have been made w/o reading the newest chapter first. I will have it edited after I have read the chapter for myself.
EDIT: I've read the latest chapter. QED is like I thought it meant. Rarity's basically telling all the other mares that they have successfully shown that their targets Dusk Shine and Spike and that they are attractive to them, but that they needed to slow down, realize what all of their antics reacted to the two males, and revise their strategy of getting the two without all the innuendo and double-talk. Then when Pinkie came right out with yet another innuendo joke (which obviously RD and Scoots laughted loudly at it), Rarity shook her head at it with the "...QED" reply. (Just like we demostrated)
Long story short, make Dusk and Spike see that even though it's official that they are royalty now (and for Spike, he's been prince his entire life), the girls are still the same girls that are friends of the two princes and the females' affection for Spike and Dusk Shine are genuine and not because of the titles. Hope that makes sense.
While all this was going on, however, an unexpected-and most likely unwelcome-newcomer was listening in on the conversation. Its pale blue eyes narrowed when it heard the words 'Prince Dusk Shine', and a low, chittering hiss escaped its fanged maw, "Mussst tell the Queen..."
bloody hell queen chrysalis is to town now! but man zecora Is into spike. Now this is going to get exotic for spike.
8165022 Here's another example of QED, from "Pirates of the Caribbean 3: At World's End":
The part where Barbosa, Will, and the others find Jack in Davy Jone's locker and he believes they are part of an illusion brought on by madness...
Will: He thinks we're a hallucination.
Jack: William tell me something. Have you come because you need my help to save a certain distressing damsel...or rather, damsel in distress? Either one.
Will: No.
Jack: Well then you wouldn't be here would you? So you can't be here. QED, you're not really here.
8137865 maybe, but Sweetie Belle is like a smaller version of Rarity (with a bigger bust), AND he gets Fluttershy and Zecora, so it's a win in my book.
8164849 ... i don't think the Author is exactly seeking to do the whole Character driven romance fluff with sides of sex thing. It seems more like the other way around actually.
Note, I have absolutely no problem with absolute shut with smattering of character drama and development on the side. Honestly I sometimes prefer it. If I wanted my porn to have feelings gumming it up I'd just read normal romance, and then find some fap-fuel later. I enjoy a slow buildup as much as the next guy but sometimes the characters really should just get on with it.
Not to be a kill joy but, you may want to slow down on the number of mares you have for now and just focus on the 5 mares for Spike and Dusk. Because really, what are the odds that a Changeling would be outside, Zecora's, home at that moment.
Don't get me wrong. Chrysalis is hot, but the current 10 who are at the top of the list barely have a plan together. Give the best choices a chance first! Because to be prefectly honest, these 10 ladies are the best picks and match ups for both guy!
8168085 It's ponyville. You know the town that's home to the paragons of ponies. The enemies/food of the changlings. Home to a princess of equestria. I'm amazed there aren't 4 more of them skulking around the everfree.
Meanwhile, back in Golden Oaks, Dusk Shine and Spike were enjoying the peaceful day by painting a set of miniatures they had recently gotten.
I never got into miniatures myself. Sure, there are those that come close to my character design, but I've never found a miniature that actually fit my mental image of my character for an RPG.
Sex scenes are at their best when the relationship between the characters having it are well enough established that there is real emotional weight for the reader. The more characters there are the less time can be devoted to each relationship and the more shallow the sex becomes.
Now that said I am about to be a bit of a hypocrite and point out that thanks to the latest season 7 episode its been confirmed that Cheerilee and Big Mac are not romantically involved. So the hot school teacher is available.
Did Spike and Dusk develop 'horny mare senses'? they haven't seem the girls in 3 days, how did they detect exactly when they were acting…naughty?
Also Spike I can get behind him freaking out, but Dusk is male Twilight so that only means one thing, daddy is preparing a counter attack plan, he has books for everything so the main…ah 4 and Trixie, would not see what is coming their way…oh man I can't wait to see how he would freak out and the mares will need a time out just to calm him down before he burn ponyville to its ashes
8183307 You and me both, I wouldn't mind seeing Nightmare Moon come back in her own body separate from Luna's and she goes after Dusk too along side Chrysalis.
8208301 At this point, you might as well make a fic about Dusk Shine having to make a harem and deciding to make it completely out of reformed villains.
8208363 Sunset Shimmer and Starlight Glimmer, Oh I am so turned on right now, I always thought of Sunset as Celestia's daughter, either she is her daughter by birth or adopted, I even have an idea on her cutie mark backstory if she is adopted.
I'm looking forwards to seeing this continued, also it's funny to try and picture Dusk wearing glasses all the time, though part of me wonders why he would need to after his ascension since he also became muscular in the process. Granted I assume the latter is from the earth pony side of alicorns
8477483 Heres an idea for a story. Dusk shine x reformed villains x princesses fanfic. Villains include Umbra, Eris, NIghtmare Moon, and Chrysalis. Princesses include Cadance, Celestia, and Luna. ANd maybe other ponies as well. Its all up to you. I was just suggesting a possible story you could write.
OHHHHHHHHHHHH CHANGELING AKA CHRYSALIS FUCK YEAH I APPROVE
JUST MAKE SURE DUSK GOES ALL ALPHA ON HER ~
Player 11 is about to enter the game
INCOMING CHRYSALIS! ALL SHIPS, BATTEN DOWN THE HATCHES!
*Siren runs in the background*
Battle Stations. Battle Stations. Black Queen approaching. This is not a drill. THIS is a drill:
*Drilling machine in action*
Battle Stations. *Siren stops* Oh, god, now the siren's bust.
AWOOGA! AWOOGA! BATTLE STATIONS!
Okay. Yeah. Holy shit dude slow the fuck down.
Currently you have Rarity, Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy, Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Scootaloo, Sweetie Belle, Apple Bloom, Trixie and now Zecora after Spike and Dusk. Now if you were to have proper time to get each girl to have a relationship and sex or what-have-you, then you'd have literally 10 chapters (one for each girl) or 4-6 depending on pairs, trios and solos.
Then you also have anyone else afterwards who might want a piece of those two.
Oh and also unseen but totally there Chrysalis. This story doesn't need any more conflict, even if it was just the CMC trying to get just Spike and not anyone else.
Stop bringing in new characters, you are already diluting to others too much.
8164751
BTW, what doe QED mean?
8165022
Your question is as good as mine, but here's the 'unofficial' official definition of it from Google:
I guess in layman terms, it means this is how Dusk and Spike adapt to this sudden issue that showed up from the previous chapter.
Caution: this comment have been made w/o reading the newest chapter first. I will have it edited after I have read the chapter for myself.
EDIT: I've read the latest chapter. QED is like I thought it meant. Rarity's basically telling all the other mares that they have successfully shown that their targets Dusk Shine and Spike and that they are attractive to them, but that they needed to slow down, realize what all of their antics reacted to the two males, and revise their strategy of getting the two without all the innuendo and double-talk. Then when Pinkie came right out with yet another innuendo joke (which obviously RD and Scoots laughted loudly at it), Rarity shook her head at it with the "...QED" reply. (Just like we demostrated)
Long story short, make Dusk and Spike see that even though it's official that they are royalty now (and for Spike, he's been prince his entire life), the girls are still the same girls that are friends of the two princes and the females' affection for Spike and Dusk Shine are genuine and not because of the titles. Hope that makes sense.
bloody hell queen chrysalis is to town now! but man zecora Is into spike. Now this is going to get exotic for spike.
Poor guys, they just want to be left alone and live a normal life. Instead they're about to get swarmed by paramours
So, queen of cheese too? Hoo boy :rainbowlaugh :
8165022 Here's another example of QED, from "Pirates of the Caribbean 3: At World's End":
The part where Barbosa, Will, and the others find Jack in Davy Jone's locker and he believes they are part of an illusion brought on by madness...
8166272
8137865 maybe, but Sweetie Belle is like a smaller version of Rarity (with a bigger bust), AND he gets Fluttershy and Zecora, so it's a win in my book.
8164849
... i don't think the Author is exactly seeking to do the whole Character driven romance fluff with sides of sex thing. It seems more like the other way around actually.
Note, I have absolutely no problem with absolute shut with smattering of character drama and development on the side. Honestly I sometimes prefer it. If I wanted my porn to have feelings gumming it up I'd just read normal romance, and then find some fap-fuel later. I enjoy a slow buildup as much as the next guy but sometimes the characters really should just get on with it.
Not to be a kill joy but, you may want to slow down on the number of mares you have for now and just focus on the 5 mares for Spike and Dusk. Because really, what are the odds that a Changeling would be outside, Zecora's, home at that moment.
Don't get me wrong. Chrysalis is hot, but the current 10 who are at the top of the list barely have a plan together. Give the best choices a chance first!
Because to be prefectly honest, these 10 ladies are the best picks and match ups for both guy!
8168085 It's ponyville. You know the town that's home to the paragons of ponies. The enemies/food of the changlings. Home to a princess of equestria. I'm amazed there aren't 4 more of them skulking around the everfree.
I never got into miniatures myself. Sure, there are those that come close to my character design, but I've never found a miniature that actually fit my mental image of my character for an RPG.
8168085 I second this.
Sex scenes are at their best when the relationship between the characters having it are well enough established that there is real emotional weight for the reader. The more characters there are the less time can be devoted to each relationship and the more shallow the sex becomes.
Now that said I am about to be a bit of a hypocrite and point out that thanks to the latest season 7 episode its been confirmed that Cheerilee and Big Mac are not romantically involved. So the hot school teacher is available.
Did Spike and Dusk develop 'horny mare senses'? they haven't seem the girls in 3 days, how did they detect exactly when they were acting…naughty?
Also Spike I can get behind him freaking out, but Dusk is male Twilight so that only means one thing, daddy is preparing a counter attack plan, he has books for everything so the main…ah 4 and Trixie, would not see what is coming their way…oh man I can't wait to see how he would freak out and the mares will need a time out just to calm him down before he burn ponyville to its ashes
I'm so ready for the next chapter.
8183307 You and me both, I wouldn't mind seeing Nightmare Moon come back in her own body separate from Luna's and she goes after Dusk too along side Chrysalis.
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That would be cool to see. That way, even if they don't get Luna, they can still kind of get best-waifu.
8208098 Say what if instead of King Sombra it was Queen Umbra of the Crystal Empire?
8208301
At this point, you might as well make a fic about Dusk Shine having to make a harem and deciding to make it completely out of reformed villains.
DuskLightShimmer ship when??
8208363 Sunset Shimmer and Starlight Glimmer, Oh I am so turned on right now, I always thought of Sunset as Celestia's daughter, either she is her daughter by birth or adopted, I even have an idea on her cutie mark backstory if she is adopted.
I'm really enjoying this story... ETA on next chapter? Its okay if there isent one I was just wondering....lol
I'm looking forwards to seeing this continued, also it's funny to try and picture Dusk wearing glasses all the time, though part of me wonders why he would need to after his ascension since he also became muscular in the process. Granted I assume the latter is from the earth pony side of alicorns
can't wait for the next chapter
8165022
love that video
I'm really liking the story so far, keep up the good work.
I am loving this story, please tell me it will be continued soon??
PLease tell me Celestia and Luna become Dusk shines consorts, as well as Queen Chrysalis. PLease let it be so!!
8477289
No, Celestia and Luna won't be in either one.
8477483
Ok. Understood
8477483
Heres an idea for a story. Dusk shine x reformed villains x princesses fanfic. Villains include Umbra, Eris, NIghtmare Moon, and Chrysalis. Princesses include Cadance, Celestia, and Luna. ANd maybe other ponies as well. Its all up to you. I was just suggesting a possible story you could write.
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Right now the plate's kinda full. Got the ones I'm working on, plus four unpublished.
8481649
Well, Good luck on all of the ones your working on. May I ask what any of the unpublished ones are about??
8481671
Well, one's an R63.
8481711
Is it dusk shine??
8481711
yes, Dusk Shine is in it, but it's not a Dusk Shine x Harem.
8482160
ok. What is another story about? Just tell me a character.
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Barb x a couple others.
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Not bad. Been done before, but not a bad idea. HAve fun!! How long till the next chapter of the Dragon Layer story comes out??
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dunno. got one in Exposure Therapy and Good Morning Class to finish.
8482234
Cant wait for the Good MOrning Class one?? Approximately how long till that one comes out
8482234
Also, I can wait for the dragon one. Excellent cliffhanger.
When will you be able to update this story
GOOOO Changlings!!! Introducing: QUEEEEEEEEEEEEN CHRYSALISSSSS!!!!!!!!
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yes.