1718156 No. No there wasn't. I've never used the grimdark tag on ANY of my works. What's grimdark about it? It's incest. No one gets murdered. There's drama and some emotions, but nothing even remotely dark.
1718164 DUDE I REMEMBER IT WAS A DARK TAG ON THERE! don't tell there wasen't because i know there was,I remember But if you say there wasen't then whatever
1718168 I mean this in the nicest way possible, but seriously? You are a massive tool. Why would he lie about that? What could he possibly hope to gain? Is he secretly a complete bastard who gets off on mildly confusing a small number of anonymous people on the internet? unlikely. More to the point, why do YOU care? I mean honestly? Even if there WAS a Dark tag, it wouldn't really have fit the story.
Was it really THAT important? I've been reading this story since it was originally posted, and I have a freakishly good memory for tags. There was no dark tag. Had there been, it would have stood out like crazy to me, and I would remember it. Don't argue with the author over a tag and just enjoy the brother/sister incest you came here to read, k?
1718168 Oh great, now you're acting like the people who believe in the so called "Herobrine". I've seen a lot of these comments before, so just please, go away.
Hmm, I must confess that this chapter didn't grab me as much as the others. There was a lot of repetition and a slight mechanical-ness to the descriptions that was a little offputting. Also, there were a good number of spelling and punctuation errors that, for me, broke immersion quite often.
Fuckin', yes. Ya know? Like, good job. For this alone, you are awesome. So if you count in all the everything else you've done, you're like, dodeca-awesome. At least. You can put that on your resume. "At least dodeca-awesome."
listen all of you people that won't leave me alone about it no its not importent i do remember a dark TAG being there so don't fucking lie,And Ok i will go away
Gah! Curse you, curiosity! I just HAD to click and see what the big deal was.
Regardless of the questionable morality, this is a rather well-written story. I don't see any errors, or at least, none that were worth sticking in my mind. ...Sticking in my- I can't believe I said that.
I now have to ask, though... What if Twilie gets knocked up by this? That's going to be rather difficult to explain.
I keep forgetting to add that bit in about the anti-pregnancy magic... I even had a LINE in mind for it when Twilight was musing.
'There was nothing WRONG with what they were doing, really, especially as with a simple touch of magic, she could ensure she wouldn't become pregnant'.
Cadance grinned and pulled off his testicle with a soft pop!
Arghhhhhhhhhhhh! I have the worst possible image of this moment *checks himself* Okay, my testes are still intact, and I have both of them . . . Is it just me or does Cadence come off as being rather insidious? I don't know, she was kind of creeping me out. Now I must get Bronystories in on this.
1718661 I think I'll just answer for the author here you're a dumbass and you shouldn't be here seriously, are you here just to complain?
This was an excellent clop, there are only so many creepy metrics I can give you as to how much I enjoyed it aside from trying to measures the pints of-
this is one of my favorite stories on the site but the writing in this chapter is kind of rough. like, even just in terms of grammar and structure, it's in serious need of some proof-reading. pretty hard to get into when it's hard to parse the information. not sure if you rushed it out or what, but it seemed different in that regard.
still looking forward to reading it properly, but just a heads-up that you might want to pay more attention to your proof-reading/editing.
1718146 dude where'd you get that awesome avatar. O and sweet wrap up chapter loved the clop scene and the way you changed twi's mind from halting the fun.
i skipped half the clop in this chapter so i skipped half the chapter >. < it was a great read but i know i wouldn't have enough time to read it later so i strained myself to read the whole thing all at once :c
Ah, how sad that another great story by Anonymous Pegasus comes to an official end. I regret not commenting on the other chapters as I always meant to (at least, when the second and third were initially out or whatever, lazed about and just didn't do it) and even had fourth up for longest time to re-read and do so.
Well, despite the hate and stuff other people're giving you, I will be one to say that LOVED this story, even if it was quite depraved (should be obvious, it's in the title people! And the summary says or implies that it's incestuous, if the material offends you, DON'T read it ). Though I feel the beginning of this chapter was slightly NC-ish, cause Shining mistook his sister's attempts to stop him and confusion at the situation for consent (cause not sure if he was aware she was coming, or was aware it was the real one if he was about to do roleplay with Cadence, as I now get the feeling while I've been writing this, hope you'll tell me if I'm right or not, as I think that's what you were going for), and I can't help but feel that if she was needy or wasn't happy with it before, that this could've gone quite differently if you had desired it to. And surprised at something I hadn't considered before, even if it wasn't the focus of the story: how does one paint themselves up without painting genitalia, at least if you're a girl? Maybe I'm overthinking it a little bit, but just wondering how Twilight/Shining could do oral stuff without paint smearing or getting in taste, etc., when Cadence was painted.
Descriptions were quite nice, even if a bit over-the-top near the end with Twilight's repeated climaxing even if it was cause Shining was mating her WHILE Cadence was licking at her clit. Also not sure about you referring to Cadence a few times as Twilight's babysitter, just cause they're not really in that role anymore and should maybe be "former babysitter" instead, but it's your call. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png Well, hope to see some of the newer clopfics you mentioned working on, whether or not they have delicious incest/wincest like this one!
At one point, spelled spilling as sspilling soixante-neuf <-------- And doubt it's error, but intended writing of sixty-nine in French(?) language?
Edit: looked back over the chapter and I DO realize now that it was what was supposed to be more roleplay, but dummy Shining Armor didn't notice lack of wings to attribute it being his ACTUAL sister.
1718175 Dunno if can get a PM with a link to this pic you supposedly saw, if I haven't possibly already seen it. Though doubt I've seen one without Cadence, if it involves all three and not just TwiArmor.
what happened to the dark?
1718144 The... dark?
1718146 yeah it use to be romance and dark
1718151 No. There was no dark tag on this. Ever. O.o
1718153 Uh,Yes there was
1718156 No. No there wasn't. I've never used the grimdark tag on ANY of my works. What's grimdark about it? It's incest. No one gets murdered. There's drama and some emotions, but nothing even remotely dark.
1718160 Dude i remember along time ago,There used to be a dark tag on your story
1718162 Okay, screenshot or it didn't happen. Because it didn't happen. I mean, it's not like I wrote and posted the thing myself.
1718164 DUDE I REMEMBER IT WAS A DARK TAG ON THERE! don't tell there wasen't because i know there was,I remember But if you say there wasen't then whatever
Y'know, I just came across a picture that pretty much is a scene from this chapter. What are those odds?
Pretty high.1718175
1718168
I mean this in the nicest way possible, but seriously? You are a massive tool. Why would he lie about that? What could he possibly hope to gain? Is he secretly a complete bastard who gets off on mildly confusing a small number of anonymous people on the internet? unlikely. More to the point, why do YOU care? I mean honestly? Even if there WAS a Dark tag, it wouldn't really have fit the story.
1718168 *sigh*
Was it really THAT important? I've been reading this story since it was originally posted, and I have a freakishly good memory for tags. There was no dark tag. Had there been, it would have stood out like crazy to me, and I would remember it. Don't argue with the author over a tag and just enjoy the brother/sister incest you came here to read, k?
1718168 Oh great, now you're acting like the people who believe in the so called "Herobrine".
I've seen a lot of these comments before, so just please, go away.
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1718168 You mad?
Hmm, I must confess that this chapter didn't grab me as much as the others. There was a lot of repetition and a slight mechanical-ness to the descriptions that was a little offputting. Also, there were a good number of spelling and punctuation errors that, for me, broke immersion quite often.
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1718449
I love when people click on a fic that is OBVIOUSLY INCEST.
And then act surprised when it's incest. Like 'OMG WHAT IT THIS?! HOW COULD I HAVE KNOW I WOULD FIND THIS WHEN I OPENED THE STORY?!"
1718455 No, I've read the first four chapters, but when I saw chapter five I just went....Woah
1718456 Click the downvote button and move the fuck along. No one cares how much pony incest scars you.
Oh.My.Gosh.
Great.
why did I read this
why did you write this
why is it featured
why
Fuckin', yes. Ya know? Like, good job. For this alone, you are awesome. So if you count in all the everything else you've done, you're like, dodeca-awesome. At least. You can put that on your resume. "At least dodeca-awesome."
Also,
1718466
Word.
listen all of you people that won't leave me alone about it no its not importent i do remember a dark TAG being there so don't fucking lie,And Ok i will go away
omg theres more!!!!
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Gah! Curse you, curiosity! I just HAD to click and see what the big deal was.
Regardless of the questionable morality, this is a rather well-written story. I don't see any errors, or at least, none that were worth sticking in my mind. ...Sticking in my- I can't believe I said that.
I now have to ask, though... What if Twilie gets knocked up by this? That's going to be rather difficult to explain.
1718634 Oh for fucks sake.
I keep forgetting to add that bit in about the anti-pregnancy magic... I even had a LINE in mind for it when Twilight was musing.
'There was nothing WRONG with what they were doing, really, especially as with a simple touch of magic, she could ensure she wouldn't become pregnant'.
1718640
too late! You can't change it now.
Mwahahahahahaha
- Oh, Shinning... What you did, you whore?
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Arghhhhhhhhhhhh!
I have the worst possible image of this moment
*checks himself*
Okay, my testes are still intact, and I have both of them . . .
Is it just me or does Cadence come off as being rather insidious?
I don't know, she was kind of creeping me out.
Now I must get Bronystories in on this.
1718661 I think I'll just answer for the author here
you're a dumbass and you shouldn't be here
seriously, are you here just to complain?
1718688
I think it should read something like this;
Or something similar.
It may be over, but...
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This was an excellent clop, there are only so many creepy metrics I can give you as to how much I enjoyed it aside from trying to measures the pints of-
Aaaaand THREE-WAY!
Excellent wrap-up chapter. Even if Shiny was confused at first.
1718625
1718851 uhhh
my brain goes "nnnoooooooooooooooooooo""
.......
but my cock screams yyyyyyyyeeeeeeeeesssssssssssssssssssssssssss
I don't see why people are complaining about the incest. I mean, your 5 chapters in and your complaining NOW? I have a little sister myself and this doesn't bother me one bit.
Why? Cause it's just a story. Plenty others like this and more. I'm just saying:
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this is one of my favorite stories on the site
but
the writing in this chapter is kind of rough. like, even just in terms of grammar and structure, it's in serious need of some proof-reading. pretty hard to get into when it's hard to parse the information.
not sure if you rushed it out or what, but it seemed different in that regard.
still looking forward to reading it properly, but just a heads-up that you might want to pay more attention to your proof-reading/editing.
1718990 I... don't proof read and edit
1719001
welp
1718146 dude where'd you get that awesome avatar. O and sweet wrap up chapter loved the clop scene and the way you changed twi's mind from halting the fun.
cheers
1719125 It was done by IronHooves! http://ironhooves.deviantart.com/art/Warden-x-Kuno-Size-Fix-338362049?id=175d09gwyfw
1719240 thank you.
Damn you writters of this site...
Why must you make me enjoy this kind of thing?
i skipped half the clop in this chapter
so i skipped half the chapter >. <
it was a great read but i know i wouldn't have enough time to read it later
so i strained myself to read the whole thing all at once :c
That's the end of that, right?
Ah, how sad that another great story by Anonymous Pegasus comes to an official end. I regret not commenting on the other chapters as I always meant to (at least, when the second and third were initially out or whatever, lazed about and just didn't do it) and even had fourth up for longest time to re-read and do so.
Well, despite the hate and stuff other people're giving you, I will be one to say that LOVED this story, even if it was quite depraved (should be obvious, it's in the title people! And the summary says or implies that it's incestuous, if the material offends you, DON'T read it ). Though I feel the beginning of this chapter was slightly NC-ish, cause Shining mistook his sister's attempts to stop him and confusion at the situation for consent (cause not sure if he was aware she was coming, or was aware it was the real one if he was about to do roleplay with Cadence, as I now get the feeling while I've been writing this, hope you'll tell me if I'm right or not, as I think that's what you were going for), and I can't help but feel that if she was needy or wasn't happy with it before, that this could've gone quite differently if you had desired it to. And surprised at something I hadn't considered before, even if it wasn't the focus of the story: how does one paint themselves up without painting genitalia, at least if you're a girl? Maybe I'm overthinking it a little bit, but just wondering how Twilight/Shining could do oral stuff without paint smearing or getting in taste, etc., when Cadence was painted.
Descriptions were quite nice, even if a bit over-the-top near the end with Twilight's repeated climaxing even if it was cause Shining was mating her WHILE Cadence was licking at her clit. Also not sure about you referring to Cadence a few times as Twilight's babysitter, just cause they're not really in that role anymore and should maybe be "former babysitter" instead, but it's your call. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png Well, hope to see some of the newer clopfics you mentioned working on, whether or not they have delicious incest/wincest like this one!
At one point, spelled spilling as sspilling
soixante-neuf <-------- And doubt it's error, but intended writing of sixty-nine in French(?) language?
Edit: looked back over the chapter and I DO realize now that it was what was supposed to be more roleplay, but dummy Shining Armor didn't notice lack of wings to attribute it being his ACTUAL sister.
1718175
Dunno if can get a PM with a link to this pic you supposedly saw, if I haven't possibly already seen it. Though doubt I've seen one without Cadence, if it involves all three and not just TwiArmor.