"The road to hell is paved with works-in-progress.” —Philip Roth
Love is in the air as two ponies have never been so in love, but what if one of them wasn't a pony. Changelings can be quite the challenge when it comes to stable relationships. So now that the changeling has been booted to the curb, what are the awkward couple to do now? Join in for the comedic and hilarious story of a couple who have to pick up a relationship they never quite built themselves.
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If you are posting a second chapter then why is the story marked complete?
Thanks for catching that! =)
You know for this being your first story and all, my expectations weren't particularly high, but it's actually not bad!
It's rare to find a new author that doesn't write hot garbage. That being said, this story could use a lot of work, an editor in particular, probably starting with fixing the spelling in the title on the word 'Changeling'.
Also, Rainbow seemed a little out of character in this scene in my opinion, just a bit too bashful and timid.
Thanks for the tips and thank you for taking the time to read my first story, it really means a lot to me and I hope that I will be able to edit it more to meet the expectations.
...Maybe the fake Soarin should have taken Rainbow home after she fainted? It would have drawn less suspicion than y'know, her waking up in the middle of nowhere.
I guess your right, but the thing is I wanted the fake Soarin to be so obviously fake, that all of rainbows friends would know it was a channeling. Making it harder for dash to let go of her "Fake fantasy".
I really enjoyed this...
A LOT! When's the next update?