One question. by the way this chapter is written, it sounds like there was never a divorce between Sour Apple and AJ's mother. so how can he be married again?
They soon stopped however as a wolf like howl sounded on the wind, followed closely by dozens more as Applejack spotted a mass of shapes out on the horizon near her farm, shapes which were making their way toward Ponyville.
You might need an editor to clean up this chapter a bit. Other than that, it's great. I'm so glad Applejack was able to see that Sour Apple was telling her the truth and that Granny Smith had to go if the Apples were ever going to salvage the family she destroyed just because she never approved of her son's life choices.
I really do hope that knowing her grandmother had lied to her about just who her family was all her life will help AJ see that she most likely lied about all wargs being monsters too.
9279940 Well yes, legally he was still married to Golden Gala when Granny forced him out of town, which did initially prevent Sour Apple from marrying Spring Glade....for a while anyway.
9282683 Well, you can always provide warnings for the act, so those not interested in it know when to skip. That said, you can also avoid going into deep detail. I.E. make it pretty obvious what is going on while still leaving room for minds to fill in the blanks. As it already has a mature rating though, you can go quite a bit into detail, just try to find the line that is between just sex and porn (or clop) and try not to cross it.
Jesus, this story constantly switches between 0 and 100 at the drop of a damn dime. I mean, it's very well written and has many great caveats, but wow at times this story is hard to follow.
One question. by the way this chapter is written, it sounds like there was never a divorce between Sour Apple and AJ's mother. so how can he be married again?
Sooo....they here for the wedding or the funeral?
That workout must be some great traditional canine mating.
Great job so far. Cant wait for more
Well that happened and now for more cliffhangers!
The names are... Sorry but they were a bit terrible. Great chapter but just the names..
You might need an editor to clean up this chapter a bit. Other than that, it's great. I'm so glad Applejack was able to see that Sour Apple was telling her the truth and that Granny Smith had to go if the Apples were ever going to salvage the family she destroyed just because she never approved of her son's life choices.
I really do hope that knowing her grandmother had lied to her about just who her family was all her life will help AJ see that she most likely lied about all wargs being monsters too.
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I blame apple naming conventions.
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Yeah....one can hope....
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Uh....what funeral?
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Well yes, legally he was still married to Golden Gala when Granny forced him out of town, which did initially prevent Sour Apple from marrying Spring Glade....for a while anyway.
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You know what that's fair
I can just taste the next misunderstanding... and it tastes absolutely delicious. truly, your writing style is simply... lovely...
Interesting world setting there, though this story feels like it should be a sequel in some areas.
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The funeral of Applejack’s Idiocy of course, what other funeral would I be talking about?
are we going to get to see any of those "Exercises?" *WolfGrin*
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Still deciding whether or not sex is going to be something that is going to be shown or only mentioned.
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I hope shown. I think ALL of the readers a curious about how Twilight and the worg (sorry cant remember his name) fit together
MORE MORE MORE
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Well, you can always provide warnings for the act, so those not interested in it know when to skip. That said, you can also avoid going into deep detail. I.E. make it pretty obvious what is going on while still leaving room for minds to fill in the blanks. As it already has a mature rating though, you can go quite a bit into detail, just try to find the line that is between just sex and porn (or clop) and try not to cross it.
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Well I know where that line is, I am just deciding whether I want to cross it or not.
Jesus, this story constantly switches between 0 and 100 at the drop of a damn dime. I mean, it's very well written and has many great caveats, but wow at times this story is hard to follow.
Dang that was a lot happening all at once. You somehow pulled it off though.