Just a normal brazilian brony who starts writing stories after a dream he had.
Consider this fanfic as a spin-off sequel to A Stinky Problem.
Glorious Melody could be a great mom taking care of her daughter Biscoito, but sometimes she could be so distracted with things that she don't see her daughter trying to get cookies without permission.
Superpinkbrony still helping in the editing!
Warning: Contains babies adventures and babies using their diapers, if you don't like this Idea, what are you doing here and how did you get into my profile at first?
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A little constructive criticism. The story felt a bit rushed. Biscoito's efforts to get the cookies could have felt more like an adventure with lots of problem solving. Also, Glorious seems like too much of a laid back mother. I get no sense of panic that her foal was in danger, or that she was upset that Biscoito ate the cookies. Plus, it wasn't really a punishment to have Biscoito in dirty diaper when she likes to be in a dirty diaper.
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Thats a explanation for this, these stories are not supposed to be like BIIIG, adventures, just some slice of life, day a day of their lifes with a short plotwith only one chapter. That's why I have stories like The Amazing Diaperverse of Tenerius and Sweetie's Little Accident where I can search time to make a more detailed and long stories, but I can still make some chapter rushed because the eager to do not let you without stories.
About Glorious have no sense of danger with her daughter, I don't think she could actually hurt in her own house, Glorious always make everything baby safe for her daughter. And about Glorious punishing her with the dirty diaper, actually that was a mistake, I changed the plot in the last time, she was not supposed to punishment her with the messy diaper and the timeout, just the last one.
Also, thanks for adding your opinion, it helps me on others stories, and remembered me about Glorious and the safe house about the last fanfic with Biscoito.
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I hope you see my point.
beautiful and a cute/adorable story brava bravo!