Ooooooh a New storie *sqeee* insta like and follow!

"Oh horse apples," Applejack replied, "Remember that there tight white blouse ya wore last week? You had the top few buttons undone just so you can show off them fancy cans ya got there."
"I deny that accusation!" Rarity shot up.

Ha ha ha that was great.

Also Nurse luna oboy...im not sick any more.
Keep up the great work can't wait for more. Love from sweden.

I really like this but that whole scene where Spike was home with Celestia, Luna and Cadance felt a lot like this- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7_HVSU7NK5E . Other than that I really like this first chapter and cant wait to see more!

Not a bad start man ill see where this goes. I also got a couple ideas for story arcs if your interested.

7574683 Tell me PM

7574689 KO awesome story, Spike as a theft like the anime show mouse is awesome. Wonder if the Spike is going to have more girls working with him.
By the way, whatever happened to Shining Armor?

7574861 All will be told as the story progresses

...MLP/Mouse crossover?

7575002 Well spoof is the correct term, but more or less

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Ah. Was just checking if I recognized the material.

Can't wait to see what you have for the next chapter. Origin stories maybe?

7575167 The ladies will get their origins

With Iron Will in this I hope Spike knows what he's doing.

Oh look, it's Mouse. My dad wasn't a fan of the show himself, but I happen to like the premise. I expected Iron Will to rhyme like he sometimes does just to make things more over the top, but you can't have everything in life.
Anyways, good luck.

7575907 Why didn't your pop like it?

7575916 Well, he wasn't a fan of the voice acting, he thought the dynamic between the master thief and his (... Assistants?... Helpers?... Fangi- I never watched much of the show or read much of the manga, sorry) was cliched (a guy's a master thief, yet somehow has a hard time with women), and... I can't remember much else.
I thought it was interesting, though, so maybe I'll give it another shot one of these days.

interesting that it seems that cadence is not only Flurry Heart's mom but Twilight's as well...its new.

How will Twilight finds out that Spike is Dragon??

7575938 Well Spike only acts like he's bad with his assistants around school but at home he ravishes in it.

7575966 I figured this was the case, considering the M-rating.

I freaking love it and the dialogue ere so well written that we cannot that the story in our head imagined itself.

Mouse hahahaha!!!!

So is this a mix of harem and phantom thief kid/ Kaito Kid?

7577803 That's one thief genre anime, but it's mostly like the anime Mouse

7578193 like and favorited that's all I got to say about this story great job hope to see more soon.

Thank You for making this, I like the mouse anime, also, for chapter ideas, after the twelve episode story, after that you could do your own thing like continuing the story in your own way though, maybe having Spike reveal his identity to the six and they then join his team, and your version of the man who cheats death, They together learn his weakness to take him out once and for all and a story chapter where Spike saves the chief and warms up to him and calls off his chase to capture him, and then stories were spike and the girls just hang around like the manga you can read online which I recommend you check out for more story chapter ideas, and for like the final few chapters, Spike as a father with his wife or wives and son or kids showing him the ropes of his families legacy.

Great story now this is stuck in my head.

I have one word for you my good sir......

MOAR!!!!!!!!

To me that seemed to go from zero to a hundred in a millisecond, honestly it freaked me out but in the good way.

7578193 I saw a bit of mouse but I like it.

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That's an awesome idea. And for the record, I had to see where this was coming from, and I tell you, I am not disappointed at all!!! And even better, it was at a time before those (in my opinion--crackheaded) Japanese censorship laws came into play. And it was licensed for North America, so for the most part it's uncensored and dubbed in English. Seeing chapter one of this, and then seeing the episodes on YouTube, got to hand it to you, definitely a hit with what you are using.

One quick question, and I know it's probably obvious, but are all of the characters anthropomorphic (meaning furry, but human bodies)? I can see the tag, but sometimes Anthro just means that they just have the wings or furry ears, but everything else is humanized. I just have to know.

7604975 They're pure human. Spike's alias and costume makes him look part dragon

Very impressive chapter. Nice touch with having Cadence flirt with Spike by sticking her butt out and giving him a shot of her pink panites. Very nice.

Alexander the Great's Breastplate, the Spear of Destiny, Excalibur, the Imperial Regalia, the Great Hope Diamond. The Bridge of Paradise

Now the Fire Ruby. Any room for the Kuro Kabuto?

Piezooka!

It's the premise of Mouse

Making the original M. Lupin an Englishman? I can hear the cries of Gallic outrage from here.

A Sly Cooper-based story... this will make a fine addition to my collection.

purple skirt with her cutie mark symbol on it and a purple belt surrounding it, a golden yellow bracelet around her arms, fuzzy purple boots with fuzzier tops with a diamond on each boot, and a three diamond hair

You had done so good up until here not using cutie mark and actually describing them.

You're writing has some serious repetition issues, although oddly towards the middle and end of the chapter they come far further apart. The first part is pretty full of it though. It's a shame, because that would turn some people off of the story before they get to the point where it improves vastly.

The story draws most it's inspiration from Mouse, if I had to wager and I only place winning bets, and Lupin... far more obviously, or better known perhaps. It has some clear promise, though I wonder if this chapter was edited or not. Onward to see if you fulfill some of that promise!

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Actually Mouse the manga more or less bit for bit

There stood, Celestia, Luna, and Cadence out of their school attire, and wearing sexy maid outfits, "Welcome home, Master. How was your day?" they asked collectively.

I knew I shouldn't have been eating when I read this story XD. Now I got a mess to clean

Good story though

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don't worry I made the same mistake, kind of wish I hadn't been sitting on the floor with my laptop

Spike might want to wach it and not get cocky because when you start geting cocky you start making mistakes

Guess i will have to bear the "anime too much" feeling for now 'cause i'm really want to see where is this goin'
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When this story starts is when he'll start making mistakes... well maybe not now. But later, who knows?

This was awesome introduction of the sorry ,now I fell that I have to reread mouse. I can't wait to see where this goes.

Someone a. Fan of mouse