perceiving her pal and partner in patrol, presently polyamorous with the prolific, procreant, purple-pink pony whose pussy he was plumbing and pounding, pistoning professionally plus primordially; whose palpating, proliferent phallus was pumping powerfully and plentifully into her posterior – procreation, pregnancy, proposed and promised – proliferating the princess' pussy with profuse proffering. Possibly planting a pre-pony.
On a scale of one to ten, how proud of yourself are you? Because seriously, that's a lot of alliteration.
7929470 Sorry, not sure how I forgot to reply to this comment for so long.
Thank you for appreciating how much effort I put into this story. I will always take suggestions to improve my writing, and actually actively encourage constructive criticism on all of my writing, whether from my readers or editor(s). I agree that there definitely needed to be more time than I initially had on Bade deciding on what he did. As for the idea about him being 'abducted', this story is to be based on Amaya, Bade and Twilight. I have no idea what that last part has to do with anything, but OK.
Amaya, meanwhile, was overcome by watching her deepest fetish unfolding before her very eyes, her eyes rolling up as she gave a helpless groan, her body reaching its own apex at the spectacle occurring before her: perceiving her pal and partner in patrol, presently polyamorous with the prolific, procreant, purple-pink pony whose pussy he was plumbing and pounding, pistoning professionally plus primordially; whose palpating, proliferent phallus was pumping powerfully and plentifully into her posterior – procreation, pregnancy, previously proposed – proliferating the princess' pussy with profuse proffering. Possibly planting his promised progeny.
Seeing somepony seeding, sowing, and saturating the sovereign's sacred sanctuary – Sparkle squeezing substantially, stimulating superior sperm supply synthesizing since starting sex – stuffed with substantial squirts, sums of seeking, stout sperm; self-sustainable seed. Silently, subconsciously, stating: 'She'll soon secure, support, sustain my sperm, so a son or soon-sister shall seize a soul; a sentient spirit. Such, I solemnize.'**
[Twilight] could only imagine Spike was giving Apple Bloom much the same treatment as Amaya was getting now, or possibly even more. Surely that beat Apple Bloom suffering through estrus alone, now instead having somepony who loved her to fulfill her baser needs.
On a scale of one to ten, how proud of yourself are you? Because seriously, that's a lot of alliteration.
I think the italics got away from you a bit there at the end.
finally
7998512 an 8? Glad you liked it, it was fun to write.
7998684 fixed, thanks
7998946 yep!
The third footnote appears to have no referent. Oh, and BTW, unf.
This has been a great story so far I can't wait how this is going to go in the next chapter.
7999312 Whoops, removed it! That footnote's for the next chapter.
Also, glad you enjoyed.
7999575 We'll see huh? I'm happy you liked it.
7929470 Sorry, not sure how I forgot to reply to this comment for so long.
Thank you for appreciating how much effort I put into this story. I will always take suggestions to improve my writing, and actually actively encourage constructive criticism on all of my writing, whether from my readers or editor(s). I agree that there definitely needed to be more time than I initially had on Bade deciding on what he did. As for the idea about him being 'abducted', this story is to be based on Amaya, Bade and Twilight. I have no idea what that last part has to do with anything, but OK.
Last half is in all italics.
Great chapter. Can't wait to see how her friends/family/princesses respond to all this.
7999115
cuz it's still broken on my end
8000352
8000379 It didn't register the save for some reason. Now it's REALLY fixed.
8000490 donno, it's been up for weeks.
LL
So...much...alliteration.
Not gonna lie... I'd love to read that story.