You tried not to touch it cause it was already throbbing painfully without you making it worst, you could barely keep it open.
worse
'Why did I kissed her?'
kiss
It was like you had a no control over you actions, it just ... happened.
delete 'a' your
*Maybe some video games should get my mind off of things." Turning on your (game console) you started playing ? (favorite game), but you wasn't doing as good as you use to, your mind was still on something else.
' apostrophe at start & finish of mental quote, remove quote marks. Remove brackets from game console and favorite game, irrelevant. ? = your
'Why didn't I took Sunset's offer when I had the chance?'
take
'Well no, but maybe she's a much better person than I think, and besides, I did thought she was cute.'
think
With Aria:
Meanwhile with Aria: (otherwise it sounds like he went to bed with Aria sort of.)
'WHY DID THAT GUY KISSED ME!?'
KISS Yes, by all means keep it up, this is a promising story.
I'm enjoying it keep going
"Damn," You said,
you (Lower case here)
worse
kiss
delete 'a'
your
' apostrophe at start & finish of mental quote, remove quote marks. Remove brackets from game console and favorite game, irrelevant.
? = your
take
think
Meanwhile with Aria: (otherwise it sounds like he went to bed with Aria sort of.)
KISS
Yes, by all means keep it up, this is a promising story.
I think Aria is kinda cute if you actually think about it.
Sirens are lesser than human, in my opinion. She's obviously never met a Norse Berserker descendant or reincarnation.