I feel like your writing could be a little more descriptive. For example, I'm assuming from the title and cover image that Rainbow has a nice ass but it's skimmed over in the story. Some writing describing what the ass looks or feels like could go a long way e.g. Is it tight or fat, small or large. I also feel that the pacing was a little to quick and the actions of the characters should be a little slower. Other than that, looks like a lovely story full of potential.
I think you can be a bit more descriptive with the scenes. Rainbow's, Spike's and Rarity's body, what are they feeling, etc. Aside from that, me want to read moar.
I'm going to read this later for science reasons.
Yes science uhhh yes
That's it. I'm reading this.
Nah, I'm reading it for dat ass.
Well, you do want a coverart that is eye catching.
This one certainly fits the bill.
I'd really like to see how Rainbow gets Spike with Rarity. Or better the two share him.
I think Rarity secretly put Rainbow dash into seducing spike
I feel like your writing could be a little more descriptive. For example, I'm assuming from the title and cover image that Rainbow has a nice ass but it's skimmed over in the story. Some writing describing what the ass looks or feels like could go a long way e.g. Is it tight or fat, small or large. I also feel that the pacing was a little to quick and the actions of the characters should be a little slower. Other than that, looks like a lovely story full of potential.
I think you can be a bit more descriptive with the scenes. Rainbow's, Spike's and Rarity's body, what are they feeling, etc. Aside from that, me want to read moar.
Your prose is incredibly boring and lacks a great deal of detail.
Di- did you just reference what I THINK you referenced?
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Also, too many paragraphs.
Prequel memes, really?
Also, it wouldn't hurt to vary your paragraph lengths more.