When I first saw that you were going to make the Twilight chapter a mare-mare thing I was like. "OH, COME ON!!!". Then I read this: “I don’t especially care if the pony I’m romantic with is a mare or a colt, as long as we have a connection. This one just so happens to be a mare.” ...and immediately forgave you . Seriously, deep philosophy, man.
And the wonderfulness continues! Great chapter. I think I have a slight inkling on Fluttershy perhaps, little bit of foreshadowing...but I may be wrong. :x I do have a feeling she'll be the last one though, haha.
Wow. So that was basically awesome incarnate. And Twilight, darling, sorry, but all the details really are necessary, and you'd best include yours in your story.
824933 : So Fluttershy, who was yer first time with? : eep! P-Please don't be mad : Why would I be mad? : Well...I... : Applejack! I think she doinked your brother!
Oh man that was SO GOOD. *fans self* Rarity, you and AJ are totally BEASTS in the bed. And with such excellent taste in stallions, too! Felt bad for Derpy in the RD/Derpy chapter because of how RD treated her after, but... ah well. Very in character for her, which is why I don't like Dash so much. :P Love love LOVE this story, and I can't wait to see where this goes. Particularly curious about Fluttershy, since I've pretty much always accepted the headcanon that Pinkie is a party animal in more ways than one. ;3
Well, that was certainly awesome. I was wondering for a moment who you were going to have for Rarity but, I'm cool with the decision. Like I was saying, pretty damn good (and hot) chapter, probably my favorite so far (not biased at all because Rarity is best pony, nope, not at all).
Now, excuse me while I go and to start having ideas who Twilight spent her time with...
I liked the Applejack chapter, the Rainbow Dash one was a bit of a let down, but this one was great. The story is back on track! And Twilight's next, I wonder who you're going to pair her up with (I have feeling it might be Luna, but I hope I'm wrong). I could argue the chapters so far didn't really read like first time stories, but then again that wouldn't make for good clop, would it? Well, we'll see how awkward it was for Twilight
Trust me, I would love for it to be Celestia (Twilestia is my OTP XD) but... Twilight did say 'awkward' and while yes, it could probably be, I'd rather my Twilestia be cute/sappy as opposed to awkward. Given it was in the middle of the post-Nightmare celebration though, Luna could certainly be an awkward fit but, eh, buck it. I'll just wait. 50 bits to Luna as well, just for the sake of it. XD
825354 Not for this particular fic, no. It's actually pretty much done, my co-author and I are just grinding through the editing on the last three stories and writing the epilogue. Afterward though I might be open to suggestions for other fics entirely. Depends on what it is.
825363 May I ask what was a let-down about Dash's chapter? I'm always looking for ways to improve. Glad you liked the rest though.
And thanks again to everyone sending their positive comments, both new and existing readers!
825502 It was mostly a matter of personal preference, not something you did wrong. Rainbow/Derpy doesn't do anything for me. Maybe the whole scene with them getting carried away under the shower was a bit hard to swallow (even though it's nothign unusal for a clop fic), AJ's just was more believeable. However, as I said, not really your fault, it just didn't click with me. You're doing a good job and you can't always please everybody, so don't sweat it too much
Oh sweet Celestia, I laughed SOOOO hard at Dash's interruptions Amazing work dude, loving it so far (this coming from a guy that doesn't usually enjoy clop-fics), keep it up!
Please DO be Luna. Please DO be Luna. Please DO be Luna. Please DO be Luna.
Honestly though, I think it fits, from the clues you posted. 1: Started right after Nightmare Moon. 2:You seem worried that we don't like Luna... 3: I can't think of a third one right now...
Still, great chapter. Rainbow's reaction was spectacular.
825633 The first time I went through the situation, in my head, Pinkie wasn't involved. Instead, Applejack just yells, "Fluttershy, y'all mean to tell me ya doinked mah brother!?" But then I realized that AJ probably wouldn't use the term "Doink"
I have to say, I'm pretty grateful for Twilight's remark near the end, because quite frankly, it mirrors my own reaction; my suspension of disbelief was close to nonexistent by that point. Yes, it's a clopfic, yes, it's gratuitous sex, but still, there are things that just don't click in this chapter. This doesn't read like Rarity's actual first time; this reads like her fantasy for her first time, straight out of a romance novel. The high society pony who just so happens to be interested in her? The leaps-through-the-beds stud who turns out to be a perfect gentlecolt? The absolutely mind-blowingly amazing sex? All in all, this was putting it on way too thick, especially after the (slightly) more realistic first two stories - though adding on a third "my first time was absolutely fantastic" story didn't exactly help matters. Near the end, I was waiting for the other shoe to drop, for someone - anyone - to call Rarity out on this.
(Also, just as an aside, my heartfelt pity goes out to anyone who gets it on with Rarity; inevitably having to compare to this is not a pleasant fate.)
Additionally, was it really necessary to compound her status as a Karma Houdini for the lies she told in "Sweet and Elite" by adding even more rewards to the pile? That was aggravating enough in the episode itself without finding a fic that actually seems to sympathize with what she did.
Oh, and another thing: Please, CG, do not take all these posts of mine on your stories as a sign that I hate what you write. Quite the opposite is true. Yet just as "Purely Scientific Interest" was held back by a few avoidable problems, something similar seems written in the stars for this story. The first chapters were nigh-perfect, but this one overreached and suffered as a result. I hope I'm wrong (and I might well be, having experienced a similar drop-off in interest in many fics I've read, including some of my favourites).
Then again, considering who is still to come (ba-dum-tish!), these issues might fall by the wayside. Here's hoping that's what happens.
825694 I'm actually kinda like that as well, it's hard for me to seriously see a romantic relationship for either of the royal sisters there are a lot of underlying issues that need to be addressed before it becomes believable. From their perspective, anyway. Not to say that it can't be done, of course, but it's tough to do right, and do well.
826784 We kinda expected at least a couple reactions like this, so don't worry, we're not offended.
The thing with this fic that you want to realize is that all six of the main pony-girls have very different experiences, whether it's the type of relationship or the type of sex (or both). Although some may have similar endpoints (i.e. whether or not they have actual romantic implications for the future), my co-author and I didn't want any two stories to be particularly alike. Hence, you have the fairly loving long-distance and long-lost crush angle with Applejack; the spontaneous, experimental grope-fest that ends rather disastrously with Rainbow Dash; and the fairly loveless, almost purely physical (but completely consensual) one-night stand with Rarity. Twilight, Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie will have fairly different stories as well; but the point is that we wanted them to all be unique and placed quite differently of the spectrum of relationships and sex. And if we're looking specifically at the scale of "physically satisfying sex," somepony is gonna be at the top, and that was pretty much Rarity.
Furthermore, somepony is gonna be at the bottom of said scale, and.... well, we'll let the fic answer that.
827041 Huh. Honestly, I wouldn't have pegged little miss "thinks like a romance novel" as the one-night stand candidate. That sounds more like something Pinkie or RD would do...
827060 RD's was a one-night stand in some sense of the word, yes. In that they hook up and subsequently break off in the same 24 hour period. As for Pinkie, well....again, her chapter shall speak for itself.
But yeah, I can sorta see what you mean about how Rarity thinks, but at the same time, she's always fantasized about a pony of high prestige sweeping her off her hooves; so when a world-famous, charming and hunky athlete shows interest in her it's not hard to see her swooning.
Best pony, best chapter.
GODS that was fucking hot.
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Found myself laughing at your pic, a dog looked at me like that the other day here...
damn now I must read
Y'know, in my headcanon, Rarity's Pa is a former proffessional athlete...
Nevermind that! Nice chapter. Nice characterisation.
Gonna have to disagree with you there, Twi. We WANT the details. All of them.
785801 The prologue alone has done a similar thing to my face
Have all had an experience with "mating" that nopony else knew about...
Wow. Just wow. And yes. All my yes.
When I first saw that you were going to make the Twilight chapter a mare-mare thing I was like. "OH, COME ON!!!".
Then I read this:
“I don’t especially care if the pony I’m romantic with is a mare or a colt, as long as we have a connection. This one just so happens to be a mare.”
...and immediately forgave you .
Seriously, deep philosophy, man.
Now I wonder who the certain someone in Fluttershys story will be...
Can't wait to see how AJ will take that
all i did in this chapter:
1. see who she ******d
2. search for Rainbow's reaction.
3. see who's next
And the wonderfulness continues! Great chapter. I think I have a slight inkling on Fluttershy perhaps, little bit of foreshadowing...but I may be wrong. :x I do have a feeling she'll be the last one though, haha.
Wow. So that was basically awesome incarnate. And Twilight, darling, sorry, but all the details really are necessary, and you'd best include yours in your story.
4 chapters... Golden... Simply golden...
(never in a million years would have guessed + = XD you played it off amazingly!)
You deserve 5/5 mustaches!
Awesome chapter! Wee bit disappointed that Twilight's chapter will be another mare x mare one. Oh well i suppose
Thats my Rarity
That was good, but I would hardly call it explicit.
824933 : So Fluttershy, who was yer first time with?
: eep! P-Please don't be mad
: Why would I be mad?
: Well...I...
: Applejack! I think she doinked your brother!
: Quite
Ahahaha. Poor Dashie :D
Oh man that was SO GOOD. *fans self* Rarity, you and AJ are totally BEASTS in the bed. And with such excellent taste in stallions, too! Felt bad for Derpy in the RD/Derpy chapter because of how RD treated her after, but... ah well. Very in character for her, which is why I don't like Dash so much. :P Love love LOVE this story, and I can't wait to see where this goes. Particularly curious about Fluttershy, since I've pretty much always accepted the headcanon that Pinkie is a party animal in more ways than one. ;3
This chapter was boneriffic, absolutely cute and hilarious! Dear lord, Rainbow Dash's comments are hilarious!
I can't wait for the next chapters!
Well, that was certainly awesome. I was wondering for a moment who you were going to have for Rarity but, I'm cool with the decision.
Like I was saying, pretty damn good (and hot) chapter, probably my favorite so far (not biased at all because Rarity is best pony, nope, not at all).
Now, excuse me while I go and to start having ideas who Twilight spent her time with...
Also, AJ stroking Dash's mane there... reading too much into it, aren't I? >_>
That was fucking hot.
Do you take requests?
I liked the Applejack chapter, the Rainbow Dash one was a bit of a let down, but this one was great. The story is back on track! And Twilight's next, I wonder who you're going to pair her up with (I have feeling it might be Luna, but I hope I'm wrong). I could argue the chapters so far didn't really read like first time stories, but then again that wouldn't make for good clop, would it?
Well, we'll see how awkward it was for Twilight
Keep up the good work!
..damn man that was one hell of a chapter
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Ya know... I want to say 50 bits on Princess Luna, but at the same time it seems too obvious....
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Bah. screw it. 50 bits on Princess Luna.
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Trust me, I would love for it to be Celestia (Twilestia is my OTP XD) but... Twilight did say 'awkward' and while yes, it could probably be, I'd rather my Twilestia be cute/sappy as opposed to awkward. Given it was in the middle of the post-Nightmare celebration though, Luna could certainly be an awkward fit but, eh, buck it.
I'll just wait. 50 bits to Luna as well, just for the sake of it. XD
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Not for this particular fic, no. It's actually pretty much done, my co-author and I are just grinding through the editing on the last three stories and writing the epilogue. Afterward though I might be open to suggestions for other fics entirely. Depends on what it is.
825363
May I ask what was a let-down about Dash's chapter? I'm always looking for ways to improve. Glad you liked the rest though.
And thanks again to everyone sending their positive comments, both new and existing readers!
Dayum Rarity. I didn't know she had it in her.
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It was mostly a matter of personal preference, not something you did wrong. Rainbow/Derpy doesn't do anything for me. Maybe the whole scene with them getting carried away under the shower was a bit hard to swallow (even though it's nothign unusal for a clop fic), AJ's just was more believeable. However, as I said, not really your fault, it just didn't click with me. You're doing a good job and you can't always please everybody, so don't sweat it too much
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Now watch that exact sequence make it into Fluttershy's tale...
Please don't be Luna. Please don't be Luna. Please don't be Luna. Please don't be Luna.
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Boy, some of you guys really don't like Luna. These are some pretty strong reactions.
825314 NOPE. I was too.
Also, this is too amazing.
825674 I'm sorry, but Princess pairings just don't make sense to me. I'm biased that way I guess.
Oh sweet Celestia, I laughed SOOOO hard at Dash's interruptions Amazing work dude, loving it so far (this coming from a guy that doesn't usually enjoy clop-fics), keep it up!
825674
Please DO be Luna. Please DO be Luna. Please DO be Luna. Please DO be Luna.
Honestly though, I think it fits, from the clues you posted. 1: Started right after Nightmare Moon. 2:You seem worried that we don't like Luna... 3: I can't think of a third one right now...
Still, great chapter. Rainbow's reaction was spectacular.
825633 The first time I went through the situation, in my head, Pinkie wasn't involved. Instead, Applejack just yells, "Fluttershy, y'all mean to tell me ya doinked mah brother!?" But then I realized that AJ probably wouldn't use the term "Doink"
Princess Fucking Luna!
DO IT!
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And as an added bonus, changing it to have Pinkie intuit Fluttershy's situation just made it that much funnier. (Dare I say it, 20% funnier?)
I can't wit for Pinkie's crazy story
Hmm.
I have to say, I'm pretty grateful for Twilight's remark near the end, because quite frankly, it mirrors my own reaction; my suspension of disbelief was close to nonexistent by that point. Yes, it's a clopfic, yes, it's gratuitous sex, but still, there are things that just don't click in this chapter. This doesn't read like Rarity's actual first time; this reads like her fantasy for her first time, straight out of a romance novel. The high society pony who just so happens to be interested in her? The leaps-through-the-beds stud who turns out to be a perfect gentlecolt? The absolutely mind-blowingly amazing sex? All in all, this was putting it on way too thick, especially after the (slightly) more realistic first two stories - though adding on a third "my first time was absolutely fantastic" story didn't exactly help matters. Near the end, I was waiting for the other shoe to drop, for someone - anyone - to call Rarity out on this.
(Also, just as an aside, my heartfelt pity goes out to anyone who gets it on with Rarity; inevitably having to compare to this is not a pleasant fate.)
Additionally, was it really necessary to compound her status as a Karma Houdini for the lies she told in "Sweet and Elite" by adding even more rewards to the pile? That was aggravating enough in the episode itself without finding a fic that actually seems to sympathize with what she did.
Oh, and another thing: Please, CG, do not take all these posts of mine on your stories as a sign that I hate what you write. Quite the opposite is true. Yet just as "Purely Scientific Interest" was held back by a few avoidable problems, something similar seems written in the stars for this story. The first chapters were nigh-perfect, but this one overreached and suffered as a result. I hope I'm wrong (and I might well be, having experienced a similar drop-off in interest in many fics I've read, including some of my favourites).
Then again, considering who is still to come (ba-dum-tish!), these issues might fall by the wayside. Here's hoping that's what happens.
825694
I'm actually kinda like that as well, it's hard for me to seriously see a romantic relationship for either of the royal sisters there are a lot of underlying issues that need to be addressed before it becomes believable. From their perspective, anyway. Not to say that it can't be done, of course, but it's tough to do right, and do well.
826784
We kinda expected at least a couple reactions like this, so don't worry, we're not offended.
The thing with this fic that you want to realize is that all six of the main pony-girls have very different experiences, whether it's the type of relationship or the type of sex (or both). Although some may have similar endpoints (i.e. whether or not they have actual romantic implications for the future), my co-author and I didn't want any two stories to be particularly alike. Hence, you have the fairly loving long-distance and long-lost crush angle with Applejack; the spontaneous, experimental grope-fest that ends rather disastrously with Rainbow Dash; and the fairly loveless, almost purely physical (but completely consensual) one-night stand with Rarity. Twilight, Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie will have fairly different stories as well; but the point is that we wanted them to all be unique and placed quite differently of the spectrum of relationships and sex. And if we're looking specifically at the scale of "physically satisfying sex," somepony is gonna be at the top, and that was pretty much Rarity.
Furthermore, somepony is gonna be at the bottom of said scale, and.... well, we'll let the fic answer that.
827041 Huh. Honestly, I wouldn't have pegged little miss "thinks like a romance novel" as the one-night stand candidate. That sounds more like something Pinkie or RD would do...
I feel so bad for RD... poor filly...
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RD's was a one-night stand in some sense of the word, yes. In that they hook up and subsequently break off in the same 24 hour period. As for Pinkie, well....again, her chapter shall speak for itself.
But yeah, I can sorta see what you mean about how Rarity thinks, but at the same time, she's always fantasized about a pony of high prestige sweeping her off her hooves; so when a world-famous, charming and hunky athlete shows interest in her it's not hard to see her swooning.
I want Rarity to get together with Rapidfire.
Yea Rarity and poor Rainbow Dash
That was hot, although it felt like Rarity was laying the bitchiness on a bit thick in the way she was treating Dash.
Ye gods. I have a feeling that Fluttershy's first time will either be adorable or hilarious. Adorabous? Adorabous!
50 bits on cheerilee