Where We Began
Where We Began
Okay, so you remember how I said eventually I'd bring you back to the start of this story? Well, hang on, we're almost there.
So, I kissed Twi. In front of Celestia and everybody. Looking back on it, this whole situation was created and ruined by alcohol. There's a lesson in that. Maybe.
Anyway, she bolted. Why she didn't just teleport, I don't know, but she might as well have, because she was gone in a flash. I didn't know what to do at first. I mean, when you make a decision like that, it's usually gonna end one of two ways. So, there I was, standing alone in the spotlight. It felt weird. I usually love being the center of attention, but this time was different—definitely not the kind of attention I wanted. After what felt like hours, Princess Luna cued up the band. I took the chance and headed outside.
I took a trot out to the gardens and sat against a castle wall. This was a lot to process. I think I humiliated one of my best friends, and on top of that, I'm pretty sure the whole country's gonna know about what just happened by tomorrow. I was so sure she'd... agh, I don't know what I was thinking! Maybe if Princess Luna hadn't put us both in the spotlight at the worst possible time.
But... I can't blame the princess. She wasn't the one who decided to make a move on Twilight. In front of her parents. And brother. And everypony else. I can't believe I thought that would be a good idea! What was I thinking? I pounded my hooves into the dirt. I felt lower than some dumb country analogy. I bet she hated me. I looked up at the moon. Where does Luna find the time for moon raising and this formal stuff? At least the gardens were quiet. No wonder Fluttershy liked it out here so much. She's inside probably enjoying her date with Soarin too much to notice.
Sheesh, of all the ponies to have their date go south, it had to be me! I don't even know why I show up to junk like this. I hate dresses, I hate snooty Canterlot ponies, and I hate being cooped up with a bunch of ponies that wouldn't know a good time if Pinkie fired one out of a cannon and into their faces!
"Hey, Sugarcube." I didn't even hear her walk up. I guess I had a lot on the brain.
"Hey, AJ," I sighed. I glanced at her. I swear, I'll never meet another mare that could wear an apple-themed dress and not look like a lunatic. She took a seat next to me. I guess neither of us were thinking about the fit Rarity would be throwing if she knew we were sitting on bare grass in our dresses.
There were a few minutes of awkward silence before AJ decided to speak up. "So, Ah don't mean to rub it in, but when Ah told ya to do something ta prove to Twi and her parents that you two were datin' for real, Ah was thinking more along the lines of talkin' to them. Not frenchin' Twilight."
I shot a glare at her. So much for not wanting to rub it in. "Yeah, thanks for the tip." I ran a hoof through my mane. "Do you think Twilight hates me?"
Applejack chuckled. "C'mon, you think Twi could hate anypony?"
"She ran away like she could," I mumbled. I felt a hoof around my shoulder.
"Ah'll bet it was just embarrassment, not hate," she said, like that somehow made it better.
"So, she's embarrassed to be with me," I snapped. "If this is your idea of helping, you're not doing a great job." I couldn't help but think this was all entertainment to her. Maybe it was just her casual tone.
"Look, Ah can't really say for sure what you should do, but talkin' to her is probably a good place to start." That sounded like a good plan, but...
"I guess... but what if she doesn't want to talk to me?"
"Well, then, there ain't much you can do. But I'd wager if there's anypony that could make this right, it's you."
I sat for a while, tilting my head back against the wall. "Where do you think she went?" I asked.
"Couldn't help ya there." She stood up beside me. "I gotta head back to the apple stand. Good luck with Twi, darlin'."
I sighed, waving a hoof as she left. I got up and stretched my wings. The night was cool, even in this dress. If I had to guess, Twilight had run straight back to our room in the tower.
If I was lucky, she'd have left the window unlocked.
My mind was still swimming, even after I made it back to our room. I swear I saw everypony's eyes looking right at me. My parents, Celestia, Luna, Shining, Cadence! Sweet Celestia, what must my parents be thinking right now?
I can't believe Rainbow Dash would do something like that! Does she think I'd just fall into bed with her or something? That I'd be easy just because I'm her friend? Well, I could tell you that I wasn't about to let this go. She embarrassed me in front of the entire royal court by getting drunk and... doing that!
I had to calm down. I've gotten worked up over a lot less than this, and if I didn't get myself under control, well... I don't think Princess Celestia would be happy having to clean up another of my messes.
I took a deep breath, trying to lessen my feelings. It wasn't just anger, it was embarrassment, too. That was the odd part. I've never been embarrassed to be seen with any of my friends. In fact, I'd assume more often than not, it's the other way around. But something about having an act that's supposed to be private thrust into the public eye like that upset me more than I was willing to admit. Looking back on it now, it was so trivial. No one cared! I'm an Element of Harmony! If not for me, these ponies would have been slaves to Discord, King Sombra, Chrysalis, who knows? Their opinions of my romantic life should have meant nothing to me!
They don't now. But at the time, I was just young and upset. I was mad, but I should have seen what Rainbow did for what it was. An act of affection, an expression of her feelings for me. All those times I'd wished to know what being loved by another pony was like had been shoved right in my face, and what did I do? I ran away.
I wanted to get out of this stupid dress and just get into bed, lock the doors, and sleep until tomorrow. I got the gown off when I heard a flutter on the balcony. Just as the fire in me died down, the sight of her stoked it again. She opened the double doors and stepped inside. I didn't say anything at first. If she had something to say, I owed it to her to let her say it.
"Twilight?" she asked, as though she were calling for me in a dark room. "You okay?"
She better have more than that. I thought.
"Just. Fine," I spat.
Rainbow sighed. It wasn't like her. As unsettling as I found it, I kept up my silence. Maybe more of Dash's stubbornness had rubbed off on me than I like to admit.
"Look, I'm sorry I embarrassed you." Seemed like she'd been taking lessons from Rarity in the venom department. Maybe she wasn't as intoxicated as I thought. Still, in my mind at the time, I felt I was the one who had the right to be upset and angry, not her. The emphasis she put on the word 'embarrassment' was enough to tip my scales. To this day, I count this argument as one of my most heavy regrets.
"And what's that supposed to mean?" I growled. "You do that in front of the princesses, the royal court, and my family and you come here to spit sarcasm at me?"
Her face hardened up. She was digging in for a fight. But this time, I wasn't going to shy away. "Oh, I'm sorry, I didn't think me being your date was something you wanted to hide!"
"No, you didn't think! What a surprise!" By this point I was packing what few items I'd brought with me, separating our things. I was on the verge of tears, but not just tears of sadness. There were a lot of things going through my mind at the time, and I didn't have the time to sort through all of them. Rainbow and I... we were supposed to work. It was my first try at courtship, though that's probably not very hard to believe. All the novels I'd read, and magazines I'd skimmed described romances as perfect scenarios. Yes, there could be fights, disagreements, differences of opinion, but in the end, they always worked out.
But this wasn't like those stories. This was reality. In reality, some don't realize they're on a sinking ship until it's already halfway underwater.
"At least I don't over-think everything to the point where I can't even function! Oh, what will my parents say? What will the princesses think?" Dash said in her heaviest mocking imitation of me. "Who cares what they think! That's your problem, you live your whole life by what other ponies think of you! You're no better than Rarity!"
I gasped. "You take that back!"
"Hey, if the shoe fits," she jeered, turning her head away from me.
That was the last straw. "Why don't you just go to your stupid Wonderbolt party! That's probably the whole reason you're here anyway! Maybe you can talk your way in, because Celestia knows they aren't just gonna invite you." I hated myself for saying such hurtful things to her. It's not like me at all. By this point, I'd actually forgotten about the initial embarrassment. I was just focused on making sure she felt the sting of my words.
Dash's jaw fell open a bit. I don't know if she just wasn't expecting a low blow, or she didn't think I could deliver one, but either way, the look on her face and in her eyes is something I'll never forget.
The silence dragged on for what felt like hours, but it was only a few seconds, at the most. Rainbow recovered, and closed her mouth. For a moment, she looked like a boxer that just weathered a harsh hit to the face. She was blinking, glancing around the room a bit before collecting herself and glaring at me.
"Fine. I will. I knew I should have just gone alone," she grumbled angrily, stepping toward the balcony she'd come from. "Have fun wasting your life worrying." The hurt was gone. Replaced by anger. Nopony hurts Rainbow Dash. She'd built armor out of her ego, and anything anypony said to her just glanced off it. I was her friend. She trusted me, and I used that trust to hurt her, purely out of spite and anger. I felt sick.
I fell on my haunches, my stomach swirling as I contemplated how big of a deal I'd made out of something I should have been excited to receive. She was my first kiss. I should have been overjoyed. It's not like she made Princess Luna congratulate me on a job well done at that exact moment.
I sniffed as my nose started to run. I guess I wasn't as good at fighting with somepony I genuinely cared about as I thought.
Well, there you go. Now we're back to where we started.
Screw her. I don't need Twilight, I thought. That would be the last time I take AJ's advice on anything for a while. I was still pissed off. Talking only made us both more upset, and now, instead of crawling into bed with Twilight, I was headed to the Wonderbolt's after-party to get annihilated drunk. Maybe, if I had the energy, I could fly home. I knew I sure as hell wasn't staying in that room tonight.
So I did. I found the Wonderbolts, we talked stunt flying shop, and I drank cocktail after cocktail. To tell you the truth, I don't really remember much of the night after that. I guess it's true what they say. Alcohol is the cause and solution to all the world's problems. Anyway, the party was winding down at around four in the morning. I don't think I saw Soarin or Fluttershy there, but who knows where they went. I do remember Spitfire telling me they had to be in Trottingham in the morning for a show, and they'd be sleeping on the tour bus tonight.
She probably asked me where my date went. Hopefully I didn't embarrass myself answering, but who knows what I said.
This part of the story is not my proudest moment. I ended up sprawled on a bench in the palace gardens. It was as far as I could make it, though who knows where I thought I was going. And, of course, you'll never guess who found me.
I was about to drift off to sleep when I heard a knock at the door. My cheeks and eyes were still a bit puffy, and I was exhausted; mentally and physically. I debated answering the door. It could have been Rainbow, come to hurl more insults now that she probably had gotten good and sauced. It could have been a palace servant come to bring me fresh towels. Though, at three in the morning, that was unlikely.
They knocked again. I threw myself out of bed and trotted hotly to the door.
"Go away!" I shouted.
"Ah know you're upset Sugarcube, but Ah just mean to talk to ya."
I don't know how she did it, but Applejack had impeccable timing. I opened the door expecting to see the filly that had been following her around all night, helping to sell her apples and apple accessories.
"Where's Apple Bloom?"
"She's plum tuckered. Ordinarily, I wouldn't leave her alone, but the palace is crawlin' with guards," she replied.
"Mac couldn't watch her?" I asked before recalling he had a date this year.
Applejack blushed. "Uh, he and Rarity got their own room for tonight..."
"Oh," I added knowingly. Though, I would be lying if I said I hadn't thought about him before—err, anyway...
Applejack stepped inside and marveled at the room as I lit a few candles with magic. "Sure is a nice place the princesses set ya up with!"
"Yeah, it's a little big for my tastes. I mean, when were Rainbow and I going to use a basketball court?"
Applejack sat down on a chair in the great room and turned back to me. She had changed out of her formal dress, now wearing the only piece of clothing I knew she was comfortable with. "So, Ah came ta talk to ya about Rainbow. Ah know it's none of my business, what goes on between you two—and Ah'll leave if you want—but Ah wanted to at least try."
I knew what this was about the moment she said she wanted to talk. As much as I didn't want to re-open this wound, I thought maybe a third party would help me understand what Rainbow was thinking. It was the first rational decision I'd made all night. "Okay," I mumbled in defeat, taking a seat across from her. More like a slouch, really.
Applejack adjusted her hat and took a deep breath. "Alright, well, ya may be wondering why Ah've taken an interest in the two of ya. Ah'm not tryin' ta play matchmaker or anythin' like that, but I'd be lyin' if Ah said Ah didn't have a hoof in what happened tonight."
I raised an eyebrow. "Really?"
Applejack nodded. "Rainbow came ta see me after you'd introduced her to your parents—tellin' them she was your date and all," she began. "Believe it or not, Dash was pretty upset that your parents just laughed it off, like the two of you weren't serious."
"But we aren't serious!" I interrupted. "This was our first real date!"
She smiled at me, as though she knew something I didn't. "To Rainbow, you are. Ah know you love all of us as your friends, Twi, but some of us ya don't know as well as ya might think." She sat back in her chair. "Rainbow doesn't really let anypony connect with her on the level you have very often. She was tellin' me the way you didn't insist to your parents that it was rude to laugh the way they did at the two of you here together really shook her up."
I nodded dumbly. In all my years of analytical thinking, all the time spent analyzing every possible angle of a problem, I never stopped to try and see things from Rainbow's perspective. Although, it is a bit hard for me, considering I'm nearly the exact opposite of her.
Applejack's eyes shifted around as she smiled at me sheepishly. "And, Ah may have given her some advice she took the wrong way."
I leaned forward. "Such as?"
"Ah told her she needed to prove to you and your parents that the two of you were serious. You had your way of proving it to them, and she had hers. Hers was a little more... public than yours Ah'd wager, but that wasn't all her fault."
I should have been angry at Applejack, but I wasn't. I was... relieved. It was odd that this feeling had only come after Applejack had talked to me, but a good feeling nonetheless. "I... I think I overreacted a bit."
She waved a hoof. "Nah, I wouldn't want to smooch my special somepony in front of all those strange ponies either."
"Not just there... Rainbow came back here after. We had a pretty nasty argument. She left about two hours ago." Those sickening stomach pains came rushing back. I had said such terrible things to her in my anger. I closed my eyes briefly and all I saw was that hurt look on Rainbow's face. I never wanted to see it again.
Applejack looked confused. "She ain't here?"
I shook my head. "I told her she should go to the Wonderbolt party."
Applejack looked at the antique clock in the corner of the room. "We should probably go look for her," she suggested.
"No, let me. You go back to Apple Bloom." I stood from my seat as she did the same.
Applejack nodded as she stepped toward the door. "Alright then. Ya may not like the state she's in when ya find her. Rainbow ain't a stranger to looking for answers in cocktails," she warned.
I smiled. "I know. I owe her one."
I had no idea where to start looking after I tried the Sun and Moon room. It was locked up tight, and none of the guards cleaning up had seen Rainbow for the past hour. I sat on the steps outside the building. Where could she have gone? I thought.
I sighed, setting my head on my hooves. She could have flown home for all I knew, and she had every right. The palace was closed down for the night, most buildings shuttered, and the portcullis closed. Only the night watch of Luna's guard remained awake. They always seemed colder than the daytime royal guards. I think it was their eyes. Yellow, like a cat's, and vertical pupils, too. Those bat-wings just seemed... scarier, I guess. Every now and then I'd catch their glowing eyes on me before continuing their sweep of the grounds.
I walked toward the gardens, thinking that eventually I'd see Rainbow. If not tonight, then maybe tomorrow, or some time in Ponyville. Time wouldn't make our seeing each other any less awkward, I felt sure.
Wandering around was something I didn't do very often. The gardens were peaceful, especially at this time of night. For all the times I've planned my activities down to the minute, sometimes it's nice to just waste them. Not often, but occasionally. I found a bench behind a tall hedge and sat down. My hooves ached from walking in those fancy shoes, so I'd kicked them off before going looking for Rainbow. Even without them, the ground wasn't as soft as I'd have liked.
I leaned back against the bench and stared up at the moon. It was bright and full, with only a few clouds to block its light. I sighed, running a hoof through my styled mane. It was a lot less styled by then. I closed my eyes and tried to think about how I was going to apologize to Rainbow, when I heard a sound come from the other side of the hedge.
It was a belch. Loudest and... belch-iest I'd ever heard. I stood on the bench and set my forelegs on the top of the bush. On the opposite side, Rainbow lay on a bench, the front of her dress stained by swigs of spilled drink while her elegantly braided mane had come undone in places. A low moan escaped her lips before I spied a bottle roll away from her hoof.
"Rainbow?"
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I get this huge smile every time this fic updates.
Well it rapped back into itself nicely, but now we have to wait and see what happens next.
Oh boy, Rainbow's gonna regret all that booze. I know how it feels to crawl to the bottom of a few bottles.
I think this was the best chapter yet. I was really involved.
oh yay an update! whens the next one planned?
Wow, they're both awfully bitchy towards Rarity. Kind of ugly friends there.
2835532 yes, it was a heat of the moment type deal.
I feel bad for Rainbow Dash now. I feel this story is beginning to wind down. Let's see how i all comes together in the end.
Oh wow, I felt that one. Nothing like having your life's hopes and dreams spit on.
I'm not sure if Twilight is willing to see that Rainbow Dash truly has feelings for her.
C'mon Twi', you can't calculate empathy.
Youch, that could be a hard argument to recover a relationship from.
TIME PARADOX
Whoops, never mind, it's just differing perspectives. Phooey. Those aren't as fun.
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Yeah, ouch. I remember doing similar in one of my own fics - it's quite easy to jab at Rainbow quite savagely like that :(
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Ah, so it's on of those fics. Although, I'd have to agree with you, she is quite jab-able.
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I think it would have been more in character for Rainbow to turn cold and indifferent after Twilight's jab about how she probably only came for the Wonderbolts.
...But that's probably just me.
Finally a update I love this story i wish it would come out fast though.
Great story! really got involved and insulted Rarity :D
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I agree on all points, and I would go into just as much detail, but James here has done that. I understand that up above I said things were cleared up, but I was still foggy/unsure about several things that James pointed out in his comment above.
I must agree that I feel as if you were trying to shrug off our comments/criticism of this chapter specifically of your fic. While you addressed me more directly, it seems as if you have more-or-less ignored James and Periphery (knocked them to the periphery as it were... shoot me). I still maintain that while a few things may have been somewhat cleared up, this chapter feels out of place. Don't get me wrong, I've followed this fic since it first started, and I love it, but this chapter throws a monkey wrench into things and makes me scratch my head in confusion.
I have not yet addressed the point you made in response to my earlier comments, so I will do so here, and I realize that I should have addressed these more directly earlier. For that, I apologize. Please understand that none of this is meant to be taken as offensive, just honest criticism for a fic that I greatly enjoy that I feel has taken a strange turn.
Okay, so if RD found a magazine with suggestively posed mares underneath Twi's mattress it's easiest to say that she would assume that Twi has porn of mares and is possibly into that. Great. End of story. To infer that she thinks anything else about Twi is not entirely believable. I wouldn't be surprised to find similar magazines in Rainbow's house hidden away somewhere. This doesn't prove much of anything.
And while I understand that they've been friends for a long time and are in sync with each other in a lot of ways and can understand each other's feelings, it still doesn't explain a lot in this chapter. They were acting like they were already an established, semi-serious couple throughout the chapter while there was nothing to suggest that they were in previous chapters. As James has said repeatedly, they were tip-toeing around the issue and were simply going under the guise that they were just friends taking each other to the Gala. Nothing really romantic has been implied. If I may, I will go through this chapter again.
Yes, Twilight figured out that Rainbow has the hots for her. Twilight's thoughts about the matter can be summed up in this line from the beginning of Ch10:
So far, Twilight has only considered Rainbow as a possible candidate, not "I am in love with Rainbow and am going to this with her as her official romantic date."
Okay, here it's established that Twilight pretty much has the hots for Rainbow too, or at least thinks she's beautiful.
And here, Rainbow essentially confirms that they are still just friends. They may totally be into each other, but they're still just friends at this point. Neither is taking this to be a real romantic occasion, just them going to the Gala together while at the same time spending time with a pony they're totally into and want to be with (though Twilight still seems unsure about the whole thing, hence the awkward silences).
The same goes for this line, Rainbow confirming that even though she has a crush on Twilight, they're going to this as friends. Not as a date.
Up to this point I am totally digging the whole chapter. It's cute, it's adorable, and I'm positively squeeing with joy. But again, Rainbow confirms here that they're just friends and that she has a crush on Twilight (even though she won't admit it).
Umm, given the context of the first bit of the chapter, it's still pretty much established that while Twilight may have romantic inclinations towards Rainbow, they're still just going as friends. Rainbow, the one with the major crush, said as much earlier on. Wouldn't it be really easy for Twilight to explain that she and Rainbow attended as friends so they wouldn't have to go alone? This is were the confusion starts for me.
Fair enough, if they were a couple. They're still just two friends who kinda like each other a lot and totally want to be together but neither has admitted anything to the other. Yes, Twilight figured out Rainbow has the hots for her, but she hasn't confronted Rainbow with that. (I really wanted to emphasize that point).
Whoa whoa whoa, back up a sec there cowpoke. Where did that come from? Since when were Twilight and Rainbow giving anything "a shot"? They were attending as friends! And to re-state what I just said, Twilight hasn't talked to Rainbow about the fact that she knows that Rainbow is completely crushing on her.
I would go on , but I would just end up saying the same thing over and over again, and I know we're both busy people and don't have the time for that. I adore this fic, I really do, but partway through this chapter things seem to fall apart. When did they get together as a romantic couple? It can't have been before the Gala since just before Twilight had just figured out that Rainbow was into her and she hadn't talked to her about it at all. So...what? There isn't anything for Rainbow to be serious about since they haven't become a couple yet.
This is pretty much the root of my confusion and criticism here for this chapter specifically. I really hope you don't take any of this the wrong way, none of it was meant to be offensive. I know from experience that people tearing apart your fic can be painful, so for that I apologize, but this is simply honest criticism and confusion from myself, James Rye, and Peripheral.
2842573>>2838660>>2676243 Okay, I'll start with periphery's questions first.
AJ and RD are close, right? closer than they would be to any of the others imo, so naturally AJ knows the signs of an crushing dash. thus why they talked at length about rd's intentions at the gala. AJ already knew that rd planned to try and make twi her mare by virtue of just knowing dash so well.
You're right, however, dash's transition to date mode could have been made more obvious. As for James and Timaeus, I will try to form a response when I wake up, but you both wrote lots of words, so it may take me a bit ti sort through what i can and can't answer.
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Well, there's very little I can add that hasn't been said already. Yes, I do still feel like a critical chunk of story was skipped, but I don't think I see it quite as severely as you do. To summarize, though, it felt like the whole story had been leading up to two big moments, one being the argument that started the fic, and the other being before that, an admission of feelings where the romance theme finally kicks in for real. That's pretty much a critical point in any romance story, where the characters involved take the plunge and express their feelings to each other, and I actually had more anticipation for that scene than seeing the story come full circle to the fight, because it had been building up so gradually. I went into chapter ten thinking, "So they're going to the gala at last. Maybe this is the chapter where they'll finally stop dancing around the romance issue and have an honest heart-to-heart conversation with each other, then discuss the idea of becoming a couple." So it definitely threw me when all that buildup just kinda felt like it poofed halfway through, and they started talking as though that conversation had already occurred. Sorta like a roller coaster where you've been going up and up for 5 minutes, so it's gotta be a gigantic plunge once you hit that peak, but then right at the top they suddenly stop the ride and tell you to take an elevator back down to the ground.
As for AJ... Well, I don't know. Knowing Rainbow well enough to realize she was hiding feelings for Twilight is one thing, but she acted like she'd already known they were well past that stage. She may have been convinced it was going to happen eventually, but as far as she actually knew, nothing actually had happened yet and it was still in the secret crush stage, right up until that moment that Dash "explained what had just happened" which wasn't nearly enough information for AJ's side of the conversation to make sense. Where was the "Wait, you asked Twi out on a real date? And she said yes? When did that happen?" Besides, my original point about Applejack was more about the way Dash just start talking to her like she assumed AJ already knew about everything that had happened besides the incident with Twilight's parents. As far as I can find, the last time Dash and AJ even talked to each other, way back in chapter three, Rainbow was insisting that even the idea of her liking Twilight was absurd, yet in chapter ten, she just walked up to AJ and dove into the conversation as though AJ already considered them a couple, and it was simply a matter of how Twilight's parents reacted to the news. Rainbow acted like it was an established fact that Applejack already knew about, even though she should have felt like she was suddenly springing something huge on AJ out of nowhere, because all of half an hour earlier, her "relationship" with Twilight was purely in her head, and in no way guaranteed to be mutual.
But eh, at this point I'm just sorta trying to willfully treat it like unreliable narrators, and assume more information was exchanged than we were privy to. I'd kinda prefer to just move on, I guess, because if you pretend those key conversations happened off-screen, most of the rest can make enough sense. Even if they'd been a couple for months, I can still believe Twilight being embarrassed about Dash kissing her right in front of everyone.
I do have to say one thing about chapter 11, though... when did being compared to Rarity become a terrible insult? That definitely deserved a "What the hell was that?" on both their parts.
I wish there were more content for the amount of time it takes to update..
Unfortunately, this isn't the only story to do this to me. And.. i hate that cliffhanger.
I have to say that I am like Twilight in many ways. I won't bore you with details, but I do believe that I would have acted the same way Twilight did. That being said, I was appalled at the way Dash handled the argument. She had no room to defend herself, and I was expecting her to undergo some emotional issues trying to rebuild her relationship with Twi. But she came back at her as an egotistical bitch, saying Twi was the problem because she worries about what others think.
Well, R.D...RIGHT BACK AT YA'!
I have one view on this. Twi was in the right, on top of being humiliated in public. Rainbow Dash was wrong, disrespectful, out of line, and to use the most accurate term, an asshole. I am not one to fight, but I think Twi's words were not enough, and she should not be feeling sorry about what she said. R.D. needs to get her mother fucking act together and, if nothing else, apologize.
I can't wait to see what direction this story will go, but as of right now, R.D. is so far out of character, she (as in R.D.) took the character and shoved it up her ass and around the corner, replacing it with alcohol and poor judgment, and I hope she can straighten herself up.
2868102 *reads* hmmm.. i see... *reads a little more* oh... i guess *reads even more* woah? *reads more* holy crap!
you went a tad over the line there pal. this fic is probably one of the best i've seen in a while, the best in terms of being in character IMO. i could see your opinion, but lay off the curses man. it's not like rainbow did it to be a bitch after all, she did have the best intentions, just bad results. not saying to change your opinion, but to, you know, express them a bit more..... softly
2872418 Sorry if I came across a little strongly. This is a great fic. I'm hooked. I'm just not happy with the way that R.D. is handling the fact that she embarrassed Twilight. She should be apologetic, not throwing back insults.
Awesome chapter. The part where Twilight says Rainbow built armor out of her confidence was really well-played. Rainbow seems very true to character in this chapter.
>that you two were datin' for rea
*Rereads past chapters*
Nope, still no change from "friends who one has the hots for the other but isn´t honest with it while the others is oblivious to it and only find out later thanks to a friend´s hint and then both agreed to go to this festival as FRIENDS" to "both are dating for real = both know of each other feelings, kissed and are together for real and not just there as FRIENDS".
When did they became a couple the last chapters???
>It was my first try at courtship, though that's probably not very hard to believe.
*rereads past chapter*
Nnnope. No sign nor word where Twi tells Dash that their "friend date" should be a "courtship date".
>"At least I don't over-think everything to the point where I can't even function! Oh, what will my parents say? What will the princesses think?"
How about you guys worry about CONFESSING AND CONFIRMING YOUR LOVE FOR EACH OTHER FiRST BEFORE JUMPING INTO THE MOTHERFUCKING RELATIONSHIP WORRIES AND DRAMAS!!!
Gawd...
Seriously? Was was up with that "talk"? Dash came right into it with fighting words as her apologize wasn´t even one to begin with.
There is NO indication the past chapters that they confessed, accepted their feeligns for each other AND that they changed their "just a friend´s date" into a REAL date for the Xth time!!!!!
Ugh, this chapter just intensified my dislike for the gibberish that´s going on since last chapter. It had such a decent pacing, believeable charas and nice story writing till after the start of ch.10 and ch.10 killed the pacing and hurt the story writing ch. 11 delievered the killing blow to the believeable charas side. This whole thing is a mess! It´s like ch.10 and 11 are of another story than the chapters 1-9! -_-
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It´s three weeks now, did you had enough sleep?
2962792 yes. I really have no rebuttal to any of those points. I slacked on thinking this story out, but mentally, I'm already done with it. This fic started out as a foray into first person, with no real planning. I'm sorry the story has been irrevocably ruined for you, but as lazy as this is going to sound, this story is old. It needs to end, regardless of how contrite the circumstances in the last chapters have been or how unbelievable. The last chapter is almost done, and when it is, I can move on, and I hope you will also.
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*sigh*
I will and i will read the last chapter, that´s what the story deserves for giving me some very good and adorable chapters. Its just sad compared to some of your other well done fics and how great it felt till chapter 10, all stuff that just shows that you can do so much better.
And i´ll keep it faved too though i´m unsure about up or down voting, i´m leaning more to the latter now...