A magical incident involving Starlight and Spike leaves them faced with a choice. Will they give into their base desires, or work together to harness their new powers?
I see what you have here, and I like it. Interesting way of cutting out the "interspecies" part of an interspecies romance. Tracking! Keep up the good work!
... Medical association, or the more like the ancient symbol of Hermes, messenger god? Or the one with additional connotations of wisdom, alchemy, trade, negotiations?
I saw the tags, but still! That spike, er," thingy" scene came out of nowhere! Not unwelcome, but completely out of left field. I wonder how their friends will react when they see them... or if they find them during. >///*///<
7863343 technically... a cold is not a disease, but a viral infection. Everyone gets it... no being has a perfect immune system.... but no one cares... this is fanfiction... canon is irrelevant up to whatever point the author deems.
This is interesting. Here's some ideas! I wouldn't have a full blown clop scene for the next chapter and instead build a relationship until then (unless you want to treat people. Not my choice.) . I would also like to see them guide each other down a rightful path thus building a relationship and then it escalating until everything else. Maybe have Starlight be his magic mentor? But yeah. Its well paced and I'm looking forward to reading. It is now in my well earned favorites shelf. Also, do you have a reference picture for what they look like?
You know something? I don't see Spike and Starlight's transformations as transformations. I see it more as... evolution. Evolution's a funny thing... no matter how many obstacles get in its way, the strongest always survives. Still, you know what they say about evolution? Even amoebas can do it.
I look forward to see how much further our protagonists evolve. Consider this faved and followed.
A pressure he’d never known was now rising in his lower body. His tail coiled and uncoiled as the pressure continued to build, his member emerging from a newly-formed sheath. The shape of it reformed as it lengthened, losing its club-like shape, its bulbous tip flattening out into something more pony-like. Spike jerked his hips in a heady rush, grunting and snarling, the rising pressure building and building, so much, when was it going to stop?! It felt like helium was in his chest, each additional thump of power adding fuel to the fire, and he could feel the knot at his base swelling, so very thick and wide...
...and then his balls dropped.
Makes me think of Twilight asking this after they get back:
Not really. I was inspired partially by the OC Crystal Clarity by Kilala, as well as the descriptions of dragons in D&D 3.5e (specifically the Draconomicon).
7865823 We all are damned if anyone who ever saw her work didn't include something of her works into her headcannon. And her Dragonpony siblings are easily one of the most influencial in the fandom.
Certainly an interesting start - a chase sequence as the opening? Refreshing. And a nice way to set everything up. You have my interest and I'll gladly read more of this once you update
Hmm. I have nothing against clop, but I don't really like it here. It starts out beautifully written, well styled for the MLP universe with a fascinating plot, and then penis. I want to read this for the story, not for the clop. :p It's like the back story for one of the characters in my current DnD campaign- I read 3 pages into it, was utterly fascinated, then rape fetish. Which this story on this website clearly doesn't contain. That being said I'll still read this either way. Very well written.
7862035 Caduceus (has two snakes, wings) is trade/messenger symbol of Mercury. Last couple centuries, someone fucked up (or was cynical about the rates doctors charged) and started using it to symbolize medicine. The Rod of Aesclepius (has one snake, no wings) is a medicine symbol. And of, y'know, Aesclepius, god of medicine.
7886024 Can I make the same criticism as him without mentioning the taboo subject? Because I agree with him. I saw the Sex tag, and expected some mild sexual content related to the transformation. I didn't expect PENISPENISPENIS to just flop in out of nowhere with no warning and just start spraying the page. I'm VERY intrigued with the transformation and where the story is going, but the abrupt and very graphic content was extremely jarring. Is this going to be a common thing going forward? Because other than that, the story is very well written and I want to continue reading. I'd be lying if I said sexual content was a deal breaker for me reading stories. But usually if it's done tastefully. The complete lack of subtlety or transition here might make continuing difficult for me.
7890197 I think your being to critical here. Each aspects of Starlight's transformation has heavy sexual undertones. Each part of her changing was a unique experince that was sudden and pleasurable. Having Spike go through the same with age progression is going to have similar reactions. And Spike does have a peins, so this shouldn't be a surprize. Seriously why is anyone shocked by this? Maybe the author could have given Starlight a scene where her bits changed too. But seeing as how young pre adolescent spike suddenly went throught puberty in less than a minute thing would be more drastic for him.
7898209 People are shocked because it's coming literally out of nowhere. There is no mention of anything sexual before then, and then suddenly BLAM! Graphic description of ejaculation.
Always enjoy a good Spike/Starlight fic, and this one seems to have a lot going on! Color me excited
Hoo, this is good. I am fully on board for this!
Interdasting...
Are there more chapters like this?
I see what you have here, and I like it. Interesting way of cutting out the "interspecies" part of an interspecies romance. Tracking! Keep up the good work!
There better be like..........50 more chapters to come out for this......at the minimum.
His cutie mark is... a draconic caduceus?
... Medical association, or the more like the ancient symbol of Hermes, messenger god? Or the one with additional connotations of wisdom, alchemy, trade, negotiations?
this a great story so far I hope to see more soon.
7862035 I'd assume it's the messenger god, seeing as what Spike does is send messages.
ok you got me hooked
7862035
The latter.
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YOU VILE FIEND!
Jk, jk, I actually like them quite a bit
I saw the tags, but still! That spike, er," thingy" scene came out of nowhere! Not unwelcome, but completely out of left field. I wonder how their friends will react when they see them... or if they find them during. >///*///<
7861617
Typos?
7863343 technically... a cold is not a disease, but a viral infection. Everyone gets it... no being has a perfect immune system.... but no one cares... this is fanfiction... canon is irrelevant up to whatever point the author deems.
This is interesting. Here's some ideas! I wouldn't have a full blown clop scene for the next chapter and instead build a relationship until then (unless you want to treat people. Not my choice.) . I would also like to see them guide each other down a rightful path thus building a relationship and then it escalating until everything else. Maybe have Starlight be his magic mentor? But yeah. Its well paced and I'm looking forward to reading. It is now in my well earned favorites shelf. Also, do you have a reference picture for what they look like?
Very interesting idea and story. Easily love it and fav already. Great job!
You know something? I don't see Spike and Starlight's transformations as transformations. I see it more as... evolution. Evolution's a funny thing... no matter how many obstacles get in its way, the strongest always survives. Still, you know what they say about evolution? Even amoebas can do it.
I look forward to see how much further our protagonists evolve. Consider this faved and followed.
Also, this:
Makes me think of Twilight asking this after they get back:
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This one reminds of of kilala's works if you combine some subtle leaning towards transformation fetish into it...
7865553
Good observation! This transformation was actually heavily inspired by some of kilala's work. I really like her character designs.
7863993
Not really. I was inspired partially by the OC Crystal Clarity by Kilala, as well as the descriptions of dragons in D&D 3.5e (specifically the Draconomicon).
7861683
I'm planning for one more chapter, followed by an epilogue.
7862327
Truly, I am Fimfiction's greatest monster.
7865849 ok
will there be an illustration of what Starlight and Spike look like?
7865907
It'd certainly be cool, but I don't have that kind of artistic capability.
7865916 im not good a drawing either, that's the reason why I haven't drawn my OC's for my stories
7865823 We all are damned if anyone who ever saw her work didn't include something of her works into her headcannon. And her Dragonpony siblings are easily one of the most influencial in the fandom.
What's your fave parts of her stuff?
7865849
Just one (two, if the epilogue is counted)? Awww...
this chapter. I LIKE IT! ANOTHER!! NOW!!!
Yes!
Let them make more little Kirins!
Two can play at that game...
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Spike! Both?
greed? It's a dragon thing
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Spike got his chocolate in Starlight's peanut butter!
I'm getting a serious Corruption of Champions vibe from this. I like what I see here.
Its refreshing to see something different than another changeling transformation :D
What's so bad about unshorn fetlocks?
7873578
Everything. Imagine hair growing around your feet.
Certainly an interesting start - a chase sequence as the opening? Refreshing. And a nice way to set everything up.
You have my interest and I'll gladly read more of this once you update
Hmm. I have nothing against clop, but I don't really like it here. It starts out beautifully written, well styled for the MLP universe with a fascinating plot, and then penis. I want to read this for the story, not for the clop. :p It's like the back story for one of the characters in my current DnD campaign- I read 3 pages into it, was utterly fascinated, then rape fetish. Which this story on this website clearly doesn't contain.
That being said I'll still read this either way. Very well written.
7875466 You seem to have missed the "Mature" and "Sex" tags on your way in.
7881587 Now I see what you mean and have to agree. Looking back it does feel very sudden.
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You write transformation well.
Though, I kinda expected them to at least compare symptoms so they'd realize it was with each other they were hybridizing…
and yeah. Suddenly, cock. Jarring tone shift. Almost like the story magically was accelerated through puberty just like Spike.
7862035
Caduceus (has two snakes, wings) is trade/messenger symbol of Mercury. Last couple centuries, someone fucked up (or was cynical about the rates doctors charged) and started using it to symbolize medicine.
The Rod of Aesclepius (has one snake, no wings) is a medicine symbol. And of, y'know, Aesclepius, god of medicine.
7881587
Any kind of relevant criticism you had was immediately disregarded the moment you compared my story to rape fetish.
I don't care what kind of compliment you prefaced your statement with. You can go fuck right the hell off.
Blocked.
7886024
Can I make the same criticism as him without mentioning the taboo subject? Because I agree with him. I saw the Sex tag, and expected some mild sexual content related to the transformation. I didn't expect PENISPENISPENIS to just flop in out of nowhere with no warning and just start spraying the page. I'm VERY intrigued with the transformation and where the story is going, but the abrupt and very graphic content was extremely jarring. Is this going to be a common thing going forward? Because other than that, the story is very well written and I want to continue reading. I'd be lying if I said sexual content was a deal breaker for me reading stories. But usually if it's done tastefully. The complete lack of subtlety or transition here might make continuing difficult for me.
7890197
I think your being to critical here. Each aspects of Starlight's transformation has heavy sexual undertones. Each part of her changing was a unique experince that was sudden and pleasurable. Having Spike go through the same with age progression is going to have similar reactions. And Spike does have a peins, so this shouldn't be a surprize. Seriously why is anyone shocked by this? Maybe the author could have given Starlight a scene where her bits changed too. But seeing as how young pre adolescent spike suddenly went throught puberty in less than a minute thing would be more drastic for him.
7898209 People are shocked because it's coming literally out of nowhere. There is no mention of anything sexual before then, and then suddenly BLAM! Graphic description of ejaculation.