During the war between Equestria and the Crystal Empire, the mane six get captured. Horrors await, as each of them is 'personally' interrogated by King Sombra.
7026649 Btw more spoilers (joke, they are not actual spoilers): all the characters are actually dead, this story is not set in the MLP universe but is actually happening in modern day Earth and it was the plants all along.
7026674 In case it was unclear, it was a joke. What I said are a bunch of 'spoilers' from M Night Shyamalan's films. The "what a twist" remark is a pun from Robot Chicken (or, at least, that is from where it entered pop culture) that is based on M Night Shyamalan's work.
Ha! Called it! I suspected that something like this would happen: going from despair and hate to passionate love in a short while? I'm surprised that Sombra wasn't more suspicious, that he didn't check with a truth spell first.
Wow, I was wondering the whole time what path Twilight is going to choose but in the end it didn't matter. Very well written and also hot.
The only points which made me personally suspicious about Twilight's plans were the 2 or 3 instances where she intentionally avoided getting her hooves near to Sombras neck.
A word of advice Sombra. Read the Evil Overlord List. You've clearly never read number 26: No matter how attractive certain members of the rebellion are, there is probably someone just as attractive who is not desperate to kill me. Therefore, I will think twice before ordering a prisoner sent to my bedchamber. I find Equestria's lack of reading disturbing.
I really love this Twilight and Sombra shipping... Even though... Sigh... It was only temporary. Despite this, I do gotta say that this was the best sex scene of Twilight and Sombra together in all my years on fimfiction. And for that, I'll give 10 Twilights. You deserve it, Pal.
I honestly didn't see that coming! Looking forward to Sombra taking out his anger on the others! (>rape) also I'd love to see a section on what happens to Rainbow in the barracks!
Yeah, I thought she was faking it. To disregard her friends so quickly and so harshly would be out of her character. Unfortunately, her friends are still in danger - especially Rainbow at the moment!
Great job on the story so far! I've loved the twists and turns around every corner! Honestly I would love to see twilight succeed halfway in gathering her friends, but these are just suggestions. I would also love to see a sombraXCelstia battle. The way you have your story going, makes me want Sombra die because the way he's been treating the main six , But at the same time I want him to win and see what it's like in "Equestria Sombra style." These are just some random person suggestions. Thanks for reading.
7027516 Considering both Rainbow and Rarity have their own tags while the rest are in the 'main 6' tag, I'm guessing it will tell us what happened to them two
7027337 I also think that Twilight and Sombra make a perfect pair, this is the exact reason why, in the story, I chose to make Twilight the virgin who lost her flower to the king. And this 'love' scene, it was, I think, my favorite to write. Thank you for the 10 Twilights. Since I cannot give you Sombras, I will just give back 11 hearts Why 11, because I like to go one step beyond
7028418 I always enjoy suggestions and some have, in a certain way, shaped the contents of the story. There might be some battle scenes in the future, *wink* *wink*.
As for what happens to the others well ... 7029348 tune in next time and find out
7026683 I feel proud of myself for actually getting that reference you are an NC fan, no?
Oh my Celestia!!! This chapter was INTENSE!!!!!!!! Can't wait to read more! I hope Twilight gets away and is able to rescue some of the others. I hope she gets to Shining and Cadence and tells them where her friends are being held.
7038447 You feel proud so I don't have to ^_^ I will love to deliver more, and will do so pretty soon Also, I sneak in a lot of references to things I like. They are all throughout my story, especially in the dialogues :)
Twilight could feel her heart beating faster and faster, as the handsome stallion got ever closer. Unsure whether to shift her position or remain as she was, the mare did the latter as she slowly lifted her head in order to keep eye contact with the black unicorn which towered over her smaller body.
The purple unicorn blushed a bit, as she left vulnerable. She closed her eyes, gave a playful smile and gently tilted her head away, giggling like a filly. This excited the monarch to an incredible degree. His penis was already throbbing with blood, as it dangled proudly between his legs. Wanting to enjoy every single inch of his captive's body, Sombra deviously began circling the mare, his eyes drifting all over her frame.
Wanting to tease herself a bit more, she rotated the tip of the rubber cock against her vagina, moving clockwise and then counterclockwise, as she slightly increased the pressure on her clitoris. Her head began to spin as she felt herself getting wetter and wetter. Her nipples were erect, hard enough to cut through glass. He body was burning with passion.
Her
Please don't get mad at me for doing this but I'm just attempting to help with the errors.
He looked upon the young mare with a mixture of lust and satisfaction. As per his assumption, she didn't dare use her magic against him. She had acted like an obedient slave should have. Even more, now that the monarch had ushered the purple unicorn onto the peaks of rapture, he believed he had captured her heart as fell.
10843171 Not only I am not mad, but very grateful . I remember proofreading these chapters so many times, after writing them , but still missed a lot it seems. Thanks
With a sinister smile on her face and an eerily cold look, Twilight Sparkle bluntly stated, "To be honest, I don't care about any of them. In fact, I would be happier if you just killed them all, even the two you wanted to add to your harem. Less competition for me. The only thing I care about … is you!"
Is she being serious? Coz here I thought she's just planning to seduce him and get his trust and find a way to escape
The mare's words brought a puzzled look to the stallion's face. Gazing downwards, he finally noticed the young pony's front hooves wrapped around the Crystal Heart. In an instant, his eyes burned with rage and he donned a vicious grin, as he tried to reach for the gem.
Hearing Sombra moan, she gave one final look towards the injured king. Before running out the door, Twilight Sparkle turned around and mockingly said, "Don't bother getting up, I'll let myself out."
10961872 It was so nice to read your comments. Not only do I get to see your favorite parts, but I am also reminded of when I wrote them. Man, how many times I rephrased some of these paragraphs ... good memories. And loving that you found them enjoyable
What a twist!
7026649 Btw more spoilers (joke, they are not actual spoilers): all the characters are actually dead, this story is not set in the MLP universe but is actually happening in modern day Earth and it was the plants all along.
7026656 What?
7026674 In case it was unclear, it was a joke. What I said are a bunch of 'spoilers' from M Night Shyamalan's films.
The "what a twist" remark is a pun from Robot Chicken (or, at least, that is from where it entered pop culture) that is based on M Night Shyamalan's work.
7026683 Well. I didn't expect Twilight Sparkle to get the Crystal Heart back even doing something was risky.
It appears that Sombra was thinking more with the head between his legs than the one between his shoulders.
Ha! Called it! I suspected that something like this would happen: going from despair and hate to passionate love in a short while? I'm surprised that Sombra wasn't more suspicious, that he didn't check with a truth spell first.
But her friends are in deep trouble, aren't they?
7026825 I guess we'll just have to be patient and find out ...
And the story just got even worse. Again I ask, why is it such a cliche for villians to be arrogant/stupid enough to fall for this garbage every time?
Wow, I was wondering the whole time what path Twilight is going to choose but in the end it didn't matter. Very well written and also hot.
The only points which made me personally suspicious about Twilight's plans were the 2 or 3 instances where she intentionally avoided getting her hooves near to Sombras neck.
edit : Oh yeah, can't wait what comes next.
A word of advice Sombra. Read the Evil Overlord List. You've clearly never read number 26:
No matter how attractive certain members of the rebellion are, there is probably someone just as attractive who is not desperate to kill me. Therefore, I will think twice before ordering a prisoner sent to my bedchamber.
I find Equestria's lack of reading disturbing.
I really love this Twilight and Sombra shipping... Even though... Sigh... It was only temporary.
Despite this, I do gotta say that this was the best sex scene of Twilight and Sombra together in all my years on fimfiction. And for that, I'll give 10 Twilights.
You deserve it, Pal.
I honestly didn't see that coming!
Looking forward to Sombra taking out his anger on the others! (>rape)
also I'd love to see a section on what happens to Rainbow in the barracks!
Yeah, I thought she was faking it. To disregard her friends so quickly and so harshly would be out of her character. Unfortunately, her friends are still in danger - especially Rainbow at the moment!
Great job on the story so far! I've loved the twists and turns around every corner! Honestly I would love to see twilight succeed halfway in gathering her friends, but these are just suggestions. I would also love to see a sombraXCelstia battle. The way you have your story going, makes me want Sombra die because the way he's been treating the main six , But at the same time I want him to win and see what it's like in "Equestria Sombra style." These are just some random person suggestions. Thanks for reading.
~Myrtylbro
7027516 Considering both Rainbow and Rarity have their own tags while the rest are in the 'main 6' tag, I'm guessing it will tell us what happened to them two
7027337 I also think that Twilight and Sombra make a perfect pair, this is the exact reason why, in the story, I chose to make Twilight the virgin who lost her flower to the king. And this 'love' scene, it was, I think, my favorite to write.
Thank you for the 10 Twilights. Since I cannot give you Sombras, I will just give back 11 hearts
Why 11, because I like to go one step beyond
7028418 I always enjoy suggestions and some have, in a certain way, shaped the contents of the story. There might be some battle scenes in the future, *wink* *wink*.
As for what happens to the others well ...
7029348 tune in next time and find out
My King will prevail!
7026683 I feel proud of myself for actually getting that reference you are an NC fan, no?
Oh my Celestia!!! This chapter was INTENSE!!!!!!!! Can't wait to read more! I hope Twilight gets away and is able to rescue some of the others. I hope she gets to Shining and Cadence and tells them where her friends are being held.
7038447 You feel proud so I don't have to ^_^
I will love to deliver more, and will do so pretty soon
Also, I sneak in a lot of references to things I like. They are all throughout my story, especially in the dialogues :)
7039342 I see well you've made me fall in love with this ship!
"A girl has never known love, until she has known the love of a king."
Man in the Iron Mask, much? Other meta-references, too.
...and this just got ruined.
Was it supposed to be ever or even?
As she was left ;)
Her
Please don't get mad at me for doing this but I'm just attempting to help with the errors.
Well ;)
10843128
Both can work. "Even" indicates a single motion. "Ever" indicates slow steady approach. That is what I was going for,
10843171
Not only I am not mad, but very grateful .
I remember proofreading these chapters so many times, after writing them , but still missed a lot it seems.
Thanks
Is she being serious? Coz here I thought she's just planning to seduce him and get his trust and find a way to escape
Well now that's double unexpected
10961872
It was so nice to read your comments. Not only do I get to see your favorite parts, but I am also reminded of when I wrote them.
Man, how many times I rephrased some of these paragraphs ... good memories.
And loving that you found them enjoyable