In the legendary words of all people who have ever messed something up bad: Crap...
Big trouble with AJ- I'm sorry; Applejack. If he ever meets Rainbow Dash I can't imagine it will be very pleasant.
Anyways, would be really cool if he used the recent events to fuel his hatred for his weaknesses, making him start working out, getting up earlier, etc. To become a much better individual. That's what I do.
712041 Oh I bet... Ever tried chasing a pig in attempts to subdue it? It's messy (and I mean messy!) business. Especially when you fail profusely at it...
I have to admit the dialogue is better than I expected. But why describe the mundane task of prepping the water, it wasn't as interesting or relevant as the descriptions (short but detailed enough, wouldn't change that) of farm tasks. Oh well, please continue
I have only one hatred in this beautiful world...weakness. I simply hate feeling weak. This story makes me feel weak. I do not hate this story, it is a great story, I hate 'me'.
"Kick your butt at Mario Kart?" Aaaaahhhh Mario Kart, second best Nintendo game in my opinion. Great story! Love reading it. Applejack is a really great pony/person cause she always struck me as someone I could relate to.
There were crease marks made by your sheets from you sleeping with your covers tightly wrapped around you and they showed up pink in contrast to your pale skin.
My first thought: Holy crap, I'm white! This is the problem with second-person
FIRST!
Wow, I am a slightly-perverted wimp without a good work ethic. And no sense of humor.
But enough about me, this chapter was pretty good.
In the legendary words of all people who have ever messed something up bad:
Crap...
Big trouble with AJ- I'm sorry; Applejack. If he ever meets Rainbow Dash I can't imagine it will be very pleasant.
Anyways, would be really cool if he used the recent events to fuel his hatred for his weaknesses, making him start working out, getting up earlier, etc. To become a much better individual. That's what I do.
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But for now, he's gonna feel the wrath of Applejack xD
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711946 How ironic...
LAWL. Dat ending.
Me liek even moar.
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Oh I bet... Ever tried chasing a pig in attempts to subdue it? It's messy (and I mean messy!) business. Especially when you fail profusely at it...
Do you plan on introducing any of the other characters from mlp, or are you just sticking with the apple family.
Are the others going to be making appearances?
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I don't plan on it...
I FUCKING LOVE IT... when he was looking her ass I was thinking "Dat Plot... I watch it for teh plot"
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It's an unorthodox 2nd person. I kind of gave him a 'shape' so to speak so It could be used for some jokes you'll see later on.
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Don't we all?
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It was my favorite game in my young childhood xD And AJ knows a very specific video game name, doesn't she? *Hint hint*
Dammit, Applebloom! Why did you let the pigs out!?
I feel bad for blaming her.
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True dat...
Thank you for making a character who makes me feel not quite as pathetic at manual labor!
But seriously, this is far better than I'd have expected a humanized story to be.
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Tis better to not judge by the cover of the book, young brony.
Hahahahaha BUSTED!!!!!
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Busted like the Titanic....
Too soon?
I have to admit the dialogue is better than I expected. But why describe the mundane task of prepping the water, it wasn't as interesting or relevant as the descriptions (short but detailed enough, wouldn't change that) of farm tasks. Oh well, please continue
Well, shit.
718910I think like Titanic
Damn, I knew I was weak... But damn... I gotta work out more...
This is some story and a very interesting punishment overall. I can't wait to see more of this storyline of yours.
Nice story, But i dont quite get the AJ beeing so harmful towards the outsider :?
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All will be explained in due time, young filly
I like how this is going so far. The comedic dialogue is what really gets me though. I laugh out loud at any nerdy reference and snappy comeback.
Also...
"Look, city boy. Nobody calls me AJ Except my family an' friends. You don't fit in neither category."
...Hm. Sounds familiar...
I have only one hatred in this beautiful world...weakness. I simply hate feeling weak. This story makes me feel weak. I do not hate this story, it is a great story, I hate 'me'.
Keep up the great work though!
6:30 is early to him? BITCH PLEASE, I've woken up at 5:00 everyday for this entire school year. DON'T TELL ME 6:30 is early.
But... But I closed the pen!
... What, like you expected me to remember to do something like that?!
Pig-wrassling time!!
712009 best comment ever
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"Kick your butt at Mario Kart?"
Aaaaahhhh Mario Kart, second best Nintendo game in my opinion. Great story! Love reading it. Applejack is a really great pony/person cause she always struck me as someone I could relate to.
I already hate the guy in this story so much that I named him John and keep thinking this as a normal story.
My first thought: Holy crap, I'm white!
This is the problem with second-person
Also Applejack is a jerk in this.
Next chapter.
applejack...wat did u do
1922910 yeah, I get that reaction too sometimes, but not about skin colour.
"You run your hand through your shoulder-length blonde hair"
.....
*runs to mirror to check if I'm not blonde*