Yeesh, too many times I've seen Daring's name get repeated in the last sentences, I almost wanted to smack my head on the wall just to stop myself from repeating her name over and over again.
Applejack and Engineer: We all agree here.
Yeah, what they said, but not like it matters as I am loving this story right now and I cannot wait to see the rest of it go into play! Also, finally! FIRST!
Now we bind the power of spirits of rage to make our bullets burn and spirits of whispers to make our war machines silent.
The zebras have such cool technology. It's just a shame they all had to die. Well... you know what I mean, as a nation they're gone forever.
“The Senate speaks of the depravity of ponykind, trumpeting the hastening degradation of your social and moral values, as if they have kept theirs.
You zebras made them all addicted to drugs! Poor Littlepip...
The method of education involved nursery rhymes and a rhythmic learning structure which is so at odds with Equestrian schooling that I cannot imagine how it would make learning our language any easier. I would be hard pressed to consistently express myself in the form of poetry.
Headcanon accepted.
In this era, I fear the art of language is slowly dying. I have read The Principles of Proper Pony Speech, and I am aghast. As a writer, I fear what we are doing to our own ability to express ourselves. And if we have so little respect for our own language, what hope have we to respect the languages of other cultures?
lul inorite shortform is teh dumb smh
The other nations have grown recalcitrant to learn Equestrian.
Shouldn't that be 'recalcitrant towards learning Equestrian' or am I just plain wrong?
The pony clutched his red hat (surprisingly still on his head) and rolled over.
Superglue did that trick too, no doubt!
“From now on,” she resolved as she took to the air again, flying into the darkness, “I work alone.”
I like this story; it has all of the coolness of FoE without the soul-crushing atmosphere! Not sure how many parts are left, but it's definitely worth a like at the very least.
The best ever explanation of where this quote originates. You managed to write the scene horrifying without over-the-top gory details... works so much better for it.
Wow, Jua literally and figuratively pretty much walked right into that. Down, down, the the drain she goes. Will she come back up? Nobody knows!
Story even shows that in some cases zebras and ponies aren't really any better then one another. Jua gave some pretty ominous stuff away, if you consider where the war the two nations are fighting will end. Though I suppose this original story does the same for the zebra lands and stuff that happens in the shadows there back then.
Daring Do groaned loudly, her eyes clinching shut as she strained against her restraints, her limbs flaring with agony. He (Her) tail tip barely brushed the arrow.
Yeesh, too many times I've seen Daring's name get repeated in the last sentences, I almost wanted to smack my head on the wall just to stop myself from repeating her name over and over again.
Applejack and Engineer: We all agree here.
Yeah, what they said, but not like it matters as I am loving this story right now and I cannot wait to see the rest of it go into play! Also, finally! FIRST!
6606883 Thanks for pointing that out. Should be better now.
Overall i am guessing that this story takes place before we knew about the Tree of Harmony?
The zebras have such cool technology. It's just a shame they all had to die. Well... you know what I mean, as a nation they're gone forever.
You zebras made them all addicted to drugs! Poor Littlepip...
Headcanon accepted.
lul inorite shortform is teh dumb smh
Shouldn't that be 'recalcitrant towards learning Equestrian' or am I just plain wrong?
Superglue did that trick too, no doubt!
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Couldn't resist.
I like this story; it has all of the coolness of FoE without the soul-crushing atmosphere! Not sure how many parts are left, but it's definitely worth a like at the very least.
The best ever explanation of where this quote originates.
You managed to write the scene horrifying without over-the-top gory details... works so much better for it.
Yes
Wow, Jua literally and figuratively pretty much walked right into that. Down, down, the the drain she goes. Will she come back up? Nobody knows!
Story even shows that in some cases zebras and ponies aren't really any better then one another. Jua gave some pretty ominous stuff away, if you consider where the war the two nations are fighting will end. Though I suppose this original story does the same for the zebra lands and stuff that happens in the shadows there back then.
Say hello to Saint Peter for me. Or whoever has his job, only in hell.
Whooo! Another well done chapter, hehehe.
Didn't spot any typos~
And that ending... mm mm mmm, deliciously well done~ I love it! You did this scene very well~ Good job!
I'm sensing the end is nearing. This chapter was a great read. Really enjoyed it Kkat.
tossing it
I'm still reading through to the end with my mental imagined popcorn.