When Rainbow Dash's test goes wrong, and she lost her wings, what will happen to the best young flier in Equestria?
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I hope you enjoy this story, it is my first short story so go easy on me. please give me feedback on any way to improve the story, it would be much appreciated.
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You spelt "weather" wrong, you missed a capitilization of Applejack, but all in all a great story, her friends would have been more reluctant to tell her that her one talen is basicaly gone...
what are the freakin' odds I refresh this page and see YOU!
Oh yeah, I like the first person PoV, but seriously, I have seen at least two other Blazins do a Sonic Flameboom... But keep up the good work!
>>MailboxBomber
very slim, but funny how things like this happen isn't it?
>>Akkura
really, I haven't seen, or heard about anyone use that name, or do a sonic flameboom, thought it was an original idea. i did it first person because it is something that no one really does in Fanfics, and i wanted this to stand out from the rest.
>she lost her wings
Cliche as fuck!
i know that i messed up a lot. I definitely know that i am out of character, and have certain parts rushed, especially in chapter 2 since i had an idea of what to write during chapter 1, and i didn't have any sort of plan when doing chapter 2, and the fact that i revised my first chapter, but not my second. hopefully the rest of the story will be better than these first few chapters. this is my first real attempt at writing so i don't expect it to be great.
the story isn't going to be based around her losing her wings, that's why it's "losing myself", and not my original title (which is now chapter one's title) "losing my wings". i have plenty in store for RD (insert evil laugh here).
Can I ask where you found the picture of the flaming Rainbow Dash? Cause it seriously looks awesome.
>>Flashpoint
http://www.bronyville.org/viewtopic.php?f=10&t=125
it has a whole bunch of great Rainbow Dash pics. this one seemed to fit my first chapter well, since it looked like she was getting hit by lightning.
i changed the title a bit because i am going to write one story for each of the main 6 and i am bad when it comes to naming things
i have no idea what happened at the end with all the spacing, guess it messed up when uploading or something. I finally updated this story. I would like to thank DontWannaKnow, if it wasn't for your amazing story "A Fun Day!", i probably never would have updated this story. anyway, i hope you enjoy the new chapter, probably not going to be as good as the other chapters since i wrote this at midnight, and didn't do my usual revise because i wanted to get this up before i forgot, and was too tired to do it now
I'm sorry for anyone who enjoyed this story, but I'm 99.99% sure I'm not going to continue it, I have no idea where to take the story, so I decided to cancel it.
1447928 I'm sorry to hear you cancelled your story like this, I thought it was half way decent. I mean yeah you probably would have fared better had you gotten someone to proof read it. Sure it's an abused topic of Rainbow losing her wings, but I mean I hat seing someone cancel a story because they don't know where to take it. I am sitting on four different stories I have no idea where to take, so I'm going to recommend you try something with this one. Sit down and make a list of what could not possibly happen next. Write it out, and keep writing it until something clicks in your creative mind. This is about as nice as it's going to get from me, but I hate to see stories with potential be cancelled like this. If you really want some help with ideas, send me a message, I already know where you can take it.
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Thanks for the advice, I'm actually thinking of getting back to it, but I haven't had much time lately. I'm going to go over the story since I forgot almost everything about it and then see if I can take it anywhere. I'll message you if I can't think of anything.