Fine Crime has been chosen by Celestia personally to undertake a job he has never wanted. Yet obvious curses can be hidden blessings, for Fine realizes his job is more than just to serve Celestia. He must find a way... to end her.
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Book 1 chapter 1: the beginning of the edge.
Sorry, had to do it, the series is dark after all.
Oooh yes!!! Been waiting for this one! And i would read it just from that description alone! Sorry i have been off the map for so long, Paul. Almost done settling into a new job, then i can get all caught up again.
So he's a rapist?
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Ah, welcome back. I hope you enjoy this one as much as you did the sequels.
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Hmm. This is actually more than 'edgy clopfic' , and you portray Evilestia quite nicely and actually scary, not 'cupcakes' scary. And Archon is going to break slowly and start to enjoy rape, am I right?
Hope you'll update soon.
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I'd tell you, but then I'd have to kill you.
First chapter was designed to sweep the rug out from under the readers and make it clear that this isn't your daughter's Equestria. All will be explained in due time. I'm thinking the fifth chapter will be the one that illuminates the situation.
Christ, you just had to jump to the precursor to one of the worst and most sickening parts of Inferno, huh?
No offense, but I think it'll be tough to get through this fic.
I can definitely see how this is gonna be a rough beginning for the uninitiated. (And it's still no picnic for those who have read TvE, either)
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It may not be as hard as you think. I'm starting off on the harsh things, but much of the story will be... 'tamer' than this opening. Even so, I fully expect people with determined views of Evilestia to instantly downvote without waiting for the explanation that comes later.
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Honestly, if I had found this with no prior knowledge of your other fics, I would be hard-pressed to even pick it up. Luckily, I know you can make great stories out of concepts I would normally disregard.
I'm guessing those dislikes are because of the topic of the story, not the quality? I know I've seen that before, which is why I don't have any of my own stories posted.
Like, I'm a decent writer, it's just that dislike douches are everywhere and the lot of folks just look at the Like/Dislike ratio.
You'd never catch me disliking a story, unless it was really, really bad.
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I never downvote a story. Period, I just don't do it. I write reviews, which is probably painful enough.
6063628 I envy the ability to write reviews. It takes a lot of guts of which I don't have.
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To be honest, I do dread the day when I write an overwhelmingly negative review (and there have been many) only to have the author start harassing and flaming me everywhere I go on the site. But I want to contribute somehow, and that's my method. Other than writing stories, that is.
6063666 Ugh, my biggest fear is permanent haters. Good thing when you come around to review one of my abominations, I'd take anything you send at me as constructive criticism and laugh at my own stupidity.
So I'll be getting to this soon. Maybe as soon as tonight, but I just have to say, probably not a good idea to blatantly state "Celestia is evil" in the story description. Bit of a stigma that comes with that.
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When you read the first chapter, you'll see that it doesn't matter a can of beans whether it's in the description or not. Anyone who automatically downvotes Evilestia stories by the virtue of their existence will be downvoting this story in the first chapter, and I knew that from the start. This story was always doomed to have a poor start.
Well shit.
That just happened.
And I'm gripping the seat for more. :V
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Huh. So that's how that happened. I gotta say that I liked the idea of Cadence and Shining going mad with lust on their own a lot moreso than Celestia breaking their minds. Because it implied that even the best ponies couldn't hold onto hope in Hell. That being said, I really enjoyed seeing firsthand the circumstances leading to Cadence's banishment.
And I really enjoyed seeing more Evilestia. We never got much of her in the previous TvE stories. And
is one of the top 10 lines that you've ever written. Although there should be a colon after fetishes.
Lookin forward to more!
...the hell did I just read?
Look, I'm hardly one to squirm at darkfics. Most of my fics are darker than MLP, some by a great deal. But this just felt... sadistic. Tormenting the characters just for the sake of tormenting them, and not even in a black comedy manner. Sorry, but this is too much. Downvoted.
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You're not the first to make that assumption. Yes, Celestia is sadistic, but no, I'm not tormenting characters just for the sake of tormenting them. If I was that kind of writer, I don't think I'd have 650+ followers. I understand that this story aims for the heart and balls right out the gate without any explanation (at least not until chapter 6), so I anticipated a lot of negative knee-jerk reactions over it. The real issue for this story's future ratings is how many people can push past that first wall to find the reason this world's gone to shit like it has.
Right now? The answer appears to be about 20% of them.
6443189 20% cooler . In all serious though it's well written. Terrible actions by the princess, but it's a dark fic. Crap happens.
Whoo... well that's one way to open a story. But hey, first chapter down!
I've finally come around to picking up OoS. Having finished Trixie about half a year ago, and Inferno just before that, it's nice that this timeline is still fresh in my memory.
It's been interesting, thinking about how I segue from a PA story to the next, even when the stories' in a different timeline. Maybe I'll blog about it sometime, but for an example: here I am about to tackle a story that prequel's TvE. It's first chapter is an acknowledgement of a late-game chapter from TI, which I read prior to TvE. Yet since the perspective is from a young Fine Crime, I'm reminded of Reddux the Tyrant, even if that's in an alternate timeline.
Which makes me wonder: based on a first impression of the first chapter, how well is Order of Shadows going to hold up as it's own Book? (For new reader's of PaulAsaran's work, this is like watching the second Avengers' movie and expected to just roll with it. Which you can, that's cool too. Just be aware that the oc are pretty intense, established ponies may feel ooc till they grow on you, and that this story set in a parallel timeline of an alternate Universe. Ready? Go!)
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Ah, glad to see a familiar face! I hope you're ready for the long haul, because I am at best only halfway through this monster. It's probably more like a third done.
Haven't read this story yet, but the synopsis makes it sound like "Dorothy Must Die". LOL, I'll be giving this a read when I can.
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Never read that, but just saw the synopsis and I may have to get a copy to satisfy my curiosity.
This is the first time I have ever read one of your stories and I have to say that Celestia in this seems like a really good villain almost like a combination of Darth Sidious and Vaas Montenegro.
that is one of the most fucked up things I have ever read, good job so far.
What the hell is wrong with celestia. This is beyond unnecessary.