Fine Crime has been chosen by Celestia personally to undertake a job he has never wanted. Yet obvious curses can be hidden blessings, for Fine realizes his job is more than just to serve Celestia. He must find a way... to end her.
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Too much adorable!
hrk
*heart attack*
Now just to wait for Celestia to come soil it all with her fat butt.
Wonder where it will go next. Perhaps meeting the mare whom stole her stallion? Namely Octavia?
Just noticed something- with the water scene Fleur's accent is gone, but later, during shopping, it comes back- is that intentional, as a result of nervousness or something similar, or an overlook?
Edit- Ah, so that conversation early on was in Griffon, which is why she was fluent, while later on it was in Equestrian?
Maybe have italics for when speaking another language, would help, it's less intrusive that constantly stating whatever language is being used.
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I figured it was past time for something lighthearted in this story. There's been so much doom and gloom, it helps to remind that there's some happiness still out there. Makes the world a little more worth for fighting for.
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Intentional. Fleur alternates between speaking Equestrian (AKA 'common,' 'pony,' or 'English') and the griffon language, which Fine and (inexplicably) Surprise can understand. The accent indicates that she's speaking Equestrian. I do try to add notifications of this in the narrative when appropriate, but it's hard to do that continuously without just repeating myself and being annoying, so this is the next best thing. It runs the risk of confusing people, but I was willing to take that hit.