Fine Crime has been chosen by Celestia personally to undertake a job he has never wanted. Yet obvious curses can be hidden blessings, for Fine realizes his job is more than just to serve Celestia. He must find a way... to end her.
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Woh Character building for 3 ponies all at once in one chapter that isn't over 10,000 words? Well call me impressed.
Personally I have no problem with this chapter and fail to see what's so sloppy about. I find it rather well executed using the right amount of words and lines to make it flow so pleasantly when reading it. I guess it's true, that an artist worst critic is him/herself.
I personally thought book1 was going to the best of all the books you were going to write for this story but book2 seems to going topple that off it's place. Still too early to call which of the books I like more but so far book 2 characters are more interesting with the troubles they are trying to overcome. Perhaps it's me because I enjoy reading characters overcoming their problems rather then seeing them sink into deeper problems. No that isn't either. Because a character is really tested when they in their lowest and then crawl back up. Hmm.... right now I can't point out why book 2 is for me far more enjoyable to read. I guess I have to figure that out. Perhaps I have the answer when Book 2 finished. But for now keep on the good work.
Oh good lord. I've been away from this for a while. Anyway, this chapter was sloppy. Sloppy like a kiss from a Saint Bernard!
Trixie's backstory was never deeply explore in TvE and while this is filling in some gaps here and there, on the whole it's leaving more questions than answers. this both annoys and pleases me.