Hmm...the pacing's a little off. It could've used a little more meat in between events, or probably start off with Rarity already on the run, as most of us already know how she got there. Also, "get to me dress" just threw me off.
You've got a good concept. Just needs a little polish.
6008568 Yeah, I don't notice mistakes like that until someone points them out. The spelling mistake will be fixed immediately. I'm not sure how I'll fix the pacing and all.
dude, you gotta change the name. the fanfic is alright, but i'd like it if the name and summary of the fanfic were altered. to better fit the story. this is becoming, " a nudists adventure" not, "raritys nude gala experience." even if the episode in question is the catalyst, its not the actual focus. other than that, all this needs is some polishing that others are pointing out.
6030160 They're not. I might be able to word it better, but he's standing guard outside of the cloakroom while Rarity's inside, getting her spare dress.
I'm loving it so far.
Keep it up.
Darn you Im working on a fic like this too and you beat me to it lol.
6007059 Sorry about that. I didn't know. I'd love to read it.
6007067 Ive been waiting for a fic like this for ever so i hope you updae frequently
6007081 I'm not sure how far I can take this, but I'll try to update frequently until I declare it complete.
Good so far.
It's about time someone made this :)
well im dissapointed..... no offense though
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I've been WAITING for a story on this
6007208 is that a leg garter? Rarity you surprise me! (grrowl~!)
I've been waiting for this story. Only I was hoping it was about her and the gunk. *Wink**Wink*
Hmm...the pacing's a little off. It could've used a little more meat in between events, or probably start off with Rarity already on the run, as most of us already know how she got there. Also, "get to me dress" just threw me off.
You've got a good concept. Just needs a little polish.
6008568 Yeah, I don't notice mistakes like that until someone points them out. The spelling mistake will be fixed immediately. I'm not sure how I'll fix the pacing and all.
dude, you gotta change the name. the fanfic is alright, but i'd like it if the name and summary of the fanfic were altered. to better fit the story. this is becoming, " a nudists adventure" not, "raritys nude gala experience." even if the episode in question is the catalyst, its not the actual focus. other than that, all this needs is some polishing that others are pointing out.
6009924 Okay. I'll do that
Huh... this is actually pretty interesting, looking forward to more.
6030160 They're not. I might be able to word it better, but he's standing guard outside of the cloakroom while Rarity's inside, getting her spare dress.
Update?
6796908 I'll try. But I can't guarantee anything.
6797038 Ok
I like what I read, makes me wonder if in the next chapter she shows up to her own birthday party bare.
7145935 I honestly hadn't been able to come up with any ideas lately, but that's a good one.
7154408 Alright, glad I was able to help in some small way.
Maybe she'll start a nudist club?