A young, orphaned filly, who hasn't even gotten her cutie mark yet, is having trouble sleeping. Falling asleep is easy, but evey night at exactly 3 am in the morning, a voice calls out. A voice that only she can hear. When the filly shows up one day in Ponyville, Twilight at first is skeptical of the filly's claims. But when mysterious things begin happening, things that the filly has knowledge of, will she and her friends be able to accept the Truth? And if they can, will they be able to put a stop to it?
Rated "Teen" for now, might bump it up in later chapters. While this is not my first attempt at a fanfic, I'm considering this my first "real" fanfic. Feedback and criticism is always welcome.
Chapters (3)
Okay, that didn't really make any sense, oh well it's just the beginning of the story.
That filly is odd.
5996467 A filly who lost her parents in a accident with a voice that randomly warns her of danger, I don't blame her one bit. I'd be scared too. Though I think I'd probably accidentally break a pony horn. Also lets not forget to mention WHAT EVER HAD EXPLODED THE BED SHE WAS SLEEPING ON, BURNING THE PLACE IN THE PROCESS. Sorry if that sounded hostile.
Why are their 5 dislikes? Nothing seems to be wrong yet.
6001444 I know right?
>>crimsoin sun
I was kinda expecting to get several dislikes, initially, but I've got good plans for this story. As it progresses, and you feel that it's missing certain tags, feel free to let me know.
6001753 Weird why didn't I get the notification that I got a replay to my comment???
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That would be my fault. Still trying to get the hang of replying, as well as figuring out the way things work.
Don't end your quotes with a period, commas make more sense, and, you need to add a question mark at the end of
Either way this story is good, please continue!
7139267
Thanks for pointing those out!
Would you like someone to help edit this? I would enjoy doing so if you're up to it! Either way, thanks for a great new chapter!
7166554
Having an editor might not be a bad idea. More often than not, I do my writing late at night when I'm tired, but the ideas are flowing. Usually results in great ideas, but not so great grammar.