It was a normal day on 2Fort, with the Reds out and about doing whatever they desired. It was August 11, the one day a year (aside from major holidays) that the Reds and Blus could settle their differences, and have a day of temporary ceasefire. Scout was busy practicing his baseball skill. Soldier was fighting the birds, yelling at them to get down and fight like men. Pyro was using a brand new lighter she received from home. Demoman was experimenting with new explosives, trying to make a bomb with new explosive power of alcohol, a new power recently developed by Mann Co, with minor modifications. Heavy was complimenting his guns, by telling them how they all did very good jobs. Engineer was working on new blueprints. Sniper was taking practice shots with each sniper rifle to make sure he could make accurate shots from longer distances than normal. Medic was in his lab working on medical experiments with his birds. Spy was working on new disguises to fool even the best of detectives. The Blus were doing the same, with different results. So, Red Engineer was hard at work with a new project with blueprints he developed five seconds ago. He was done in ten seconds. He announced over the intercom,
Engineer: All Red team personnel, please report to the laboratories. I have a new invention I'd like to showcase."
Within a few minutes (With the soldier reluctantly giving up his fight against the birds, vowing vengeance), Everyone was in the same room with the Engineer's creation.
Engineer: Now, I've called you all here today to show you a brand new invention. It's a teleporter that can transfer us between dimensions.
Scout: And how is this supposed to help us kill Blus?
Engineer: I'm glad you asked. Now using the scientific method, I've discovered that the Blu intel room is just an exact copy of ours, only in another dimension.
Scout: How the hell is that possible?
Sniper: Fascinatin'... Course, I ain't one to wander in the intellectual fields.
Soldier: If it means destroying those Blue scumbags, I'm all for it.
Engineer: Alright then, who's gonna try it first?
Scout: Is it guaranteed to get someone there safely?
Engineer: 99.99% guaranteed.
Scout: Good enough for me. Send me' and I'll be back in 20 seconds or less.
Engineer: Go for it. We'll be waitin'.
Scout stepped in, and it started whirling and flashing. In a few seconds, he was gone. He got his head straight and realized he was in the Blu intel room.
Scout: (thought): The hardhat was right. Unbelievable. Now, time to win a wager.
Scout grabbed the briefcase, and, since it was the day off, the alarms weren't triggered. He made it back to the base in record time of 19.5 seconds.
Engineer: Well I'm be derned. You made it.
Scout: Like I said, 20 seconds or less.
Demoman: Think you could get me to the scrumpy store, lad?
Engineer: I guess.
Demoman: Great!
Spy: Gentlemen. Can anyone say Dimension Trip?
All: Dimension Trip!
Engineer: Pile in, everyone!
The machine started whirling and glowing like before,and everyone vanished. Only, after it stopped, a Blu spy uncloaked himself in the room.
Spy: A teleporter? Well, time to murder some toys.
End of Chapter
The beggining of a crossover story done like a sir. Good job.
To quote heavy (or hoovy, if you like): "Good idea!"
must follow....
Well done...I can't wait for the rest!
.......i'll be honest...this was kinda horrible (no offense intended) it needs so much more thought to be put into it i mean come on i now TF2 is supposed to be zany but there's zany and then there's this "Red Engineer was hard at work with a new project with blueprints he developed five seconds ago. He was done in ten seconds." or "Spy: Gentlemen. Can anyone say Dimension Trip?
All: Dimension Trip!" i want to find that one funny but i honestly can't, it's just contrived.
Although i have to say the fact that it seems to be written in script form is...interesting? i suppose.
At a glance i don't think a lot of work went into this fic (or at least this page).
Final thought: needs to be fleshed out and serious thought needs to be put into what your actually doing with this instead of rushing to get to the point you want to convey (what i assume is to be them entering equestria)
My personal rating: As it is now out of
I didn't think the admins allowed scripts... i guess whoever let this one through was drunk or something,saw this and said 'fuqit'
Scripts aren't allowed.
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Unless you're Shakespeare, of course
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Good. Not sure about about the dialogue style, but good