Nice to see this finally posted! Klein has quite the "creative" mind, one that I'm sure gives him a lot of attention in art class. He's certainly ambitious, you can't fault him for that, too much!
Ok so this chapter is "Different", in the sense that its...bad. I could not bring myself to read past the "Ohh Celestia yo watched my video, does it make you horny?" "No totaly not, absolutely not nope". Now, compare this to all other chapters of the story, and the contrast is...high (that vocabulary)
As Erebus Cantillon mentioned, yea. Cowlestia. Slut ready to be fucked, no conquest what so ever. And conquest was the main driving point of the whole story! It was always long "courting" or "corrupting" whatever you like more, with an explosive finale. In this chapter however, ALL was skipped straight to the "im ready to be fuckd" part.
Honestly, this chapter is out of place in this story. Maybe in a separate spin off collection it would make sense, but in this one it just contrasts on the "main part" and looks baaaad.
Klein's gonna be broke 7 times over paying for all those alimentations...
Good chapter, though I didn't really like 1 part :
swarmed in rapeable crowds.
Say what now? I mean, part of this story's appeal was how 'not-rape' (for lack of better term) it was, and I even remember an emphasis on Klein being against rape...
Sure, it may be a what if segment, but that still puts the whole story in a different light if Klein regularly thinks about his 'targets' like this...
If you dont mind me asking, how long is this story gonna be? Judging by the chapters so far i would say we have 2 more Twilight chapters and maybe 1 more end chapter or an epilogue.
Yep, you're pretty much right on the money! I have one more Twilight arc planned for the story and then I might do an epilogue, I haven't decided yet. But the story will definitely be concluded with Twilight's chapters.
Nice to see this finally posted! Klein has quite the "creative" mind, one that I'm sure gives him a lot of attention in art class. He's certainly ambitious, you can't fault him for that, too much!
Three cheers for CowLestia.
sigh *unzips*
Ok so this chapter is "Different", in the sense that its...bad.
I could not bring myself to read past the "Ohh Celestia yo watched my video, does it make you horny?" "No totaly not, absolutely not nope".
Now, compare this to all other chapters of the story, and the contrast is...high (that vocabulary)
As Erebus Cantillon mentioned, yea. Cowlestia. Slut ready to be fucked, no conquest what so ever. And conquest was the main driving point of the whole story! It was always long "courting" or "corrupting" whatever you like more, with an explosive finale.
In this chapter however, ALL was skipped straight to the "im ready to be fuckd" part.
Honestly, this chapter is out of place in this story. Maybe in a separate spin off collection it would make sense, but in this one it just contrasts on the "main part" and looks baaaad.
My 2 cents
Klein's gonna be broke 7 times over paying for all those alimentations...
Good chapter, though I didn't really like 1 part :
Say what now? I mean, part of this story's appeal was how 'not-rape' (for lack of better term) it was, and I even remember an emphasis on Klein being against rape...
Sure, it may be a what if segment, but that still puts the whole story in a different light if Klein regularly thinks about his 'targets' like this...
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That's a fair criticism! I just wanted to use an evocative word, but you're right that it's a bit OOC.
I think this maybe my favorite chapter so far. The others are good but's it nice to see one get straight to the good stuff.
If you dont mind me asking, how long is this story gonna be? Judging by the chapters so far i would say we have 2 more Twilight chapters and maybe 1 more end chapter or an epilogue.
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Yep, you're pretty much right on the money! I have one more Twilight arc planned for the story and then I might do an epilogue, I haven't decided yet. But the story will definitely be concluded with Twilight's chapters.
U can't rape the willing.